Shoes— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh, like), and give a specific frequency with a brief reason. Use one or two linking words to connect idea and frequency.

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes. I usually buy new pairs every two or three months because I value how footwear reflects someone’s style and personality.

Sugerencia: Give a direct answer, then list 2 clear, specific problems using linking words (for example, however, furthermore). Avoid repetition and ungrammatical phrases; use correct tense and countable expressions.

Ejemplo: Yes, I have, but I often have problems. For example, the product images sometimes look different from what arrives, and the sizes rarely match my usual fit, so I frequently have to return them.

Sugerencia: Provide a clear, concise amount range as a topic sentence, then explain reasons briefly with correct vocabulary and grammar. Avoid unclear words (e.g., 'make a merger') and incomplete sentences. Use linking words such as 'however' or 'because'.

Ejemplo: I usually spend about $100 to $150 on a pair of shoes. However, I sometimes spend more because I believe higher-priced shoes are more durable and worth the extra cost.

Sugerencia: Begin with a direct topic sentence stating your general preference (it depends on the occasion). Use clear contrasting linking words (for formal events vs casual activities) and avoid repetition. Keep sentences grammatical and finish thoughts fully.

Ejemplo: It depends on the occasion: for formal events like meetings or weddings I prefer fashionable shoes, but for walking, the gym, or everyday outings I choose comfortable shoes so I can move easily and avoid pain.

× So I think it's a crucial part of a, part of a person, uh, personality.

✓ So I think it's a crucial part of a person's personality.

The speaker misused articles and phrasing ('a, part of a person, uh, personality'). The correct form is 'a person's personality' to show possession. Suggestion: use possessive form to link 'person' and 'personality' and avoid redundant articles.

× So most of the time I prefer to buy like after two or three months or that's how often I buy the shoes.

✓ So most of the time I prefer to buy shoes every two or three months; that's how often I buy them.

The original has awkward timing expression and missing object reference. Use 'every two or three months' for habitual frequency and 'them' to refer to 'shoes'. Suggestion: use clear frequency expressions and pronouns to avoid repetition.

× Yes, I have bought shoes online but all the time I had a bad experience buying shoes online because there's an always an issue.

✓ Yes, I have bought shoes online, but I have often had bad experiences because there is always an issue.

Errors: incorrect article placement ('there's an always an issue') and tense/aspect awkwardness. Use 'there is always an issue' and present perfect 'have had' for repeated past experiences connected to now. Suggestion: place adverbs like 'always' after 'is' or before the verb and use correct perfect aspect for repeated experiences.

× What actually that is shown in picture is always different what we actually get and moreover the size is always a problem.

✓ What is shown in the picture is often different from what we actually receive, and moreover the size is always a problem.

Original has incorrect word order and missing preposition 'from'. Use 'what is shown in the picture' and 'different from' to compare, and 'receive' is a clearer verb. Suggestion: use correct word order for cleft sentences and the preposition 'from' when comparing differences.

× So every time whenever I purchase shoes online I have to return it ultimately.

✓ So every time I purchase shoes online, I ultimately have to return them.

Problems: pronoun agreement ('it' referring to 'shoes' plural) and adverb placement. Use plural pronoun 'them' and place 'ultimately' before the verb for clarity. Suggestion: ensure pronoun number matches the noun and place adverbs where they clearly modify the verb.

× Generally whenever I go for shopping at that time, I make a merger around something between $100 to $150.00.

✓ Generally, when I go shopping, I spend around $100 to $150.

Errors: 'go for shopping' should be 'go shopping'; 'make a merger' is incorrect for spending money; use 'spend around' and 'between X and Y' or 'around $X to $Y'. Suggestion: use correct verbs with 'shopping' and standard expressions for amounts.

× But there has been a a lot of time when I have to go beyond my budget because sometimes I feel like I overspend on it.

✓ But there have been many times when I have had to go beyond my budget because sometimes I feel like I overspend.

Errors: 'there has been a a lot of time' incorrect subject/number; 'have to' should be past participle 'have had to' for repeated past actions; 'overspend on it' unnecessary 'on it'. Suggestion: use 'there have been many times' and 'have had to' for experiences up to now.

× But at the same time I think those shoes are really durable and goes.

✓ But at the same time I think those shoes are really durable and last a long time.

Error: verb 'goes' is incorrect collocation for shoes. Use 'last a long time' or 'are long-lasting'. Suggestion: choose appropriate verbs or adjectives for durability.

× Typically it depends upon an occasion.

✓ Typically, it depends on the occasion.

Unnatural preposition 'depends upon an occasion' and article use. More natural: 'depends on the occasion' without 'an'. Suggestion: use common collocations 'depend on' and 'the occasion' for a specific context.

× If I'm going for a meeting or for a wedding ceremony, at that time I prefer to be a fashionable shoes.

✓ If I'm going to a meeting or a wedding ceremony, at that time I prefer fashionable shoes.

Errors: 'going for a meeting' should be 'going to a meeting'; 'prefer to be a fashionable shoes' mixes verb forms and articles. Use 'prefer fashionable shoes' or 'prefer to wear fashionable shoes'. Suggestion: use correct infinitive 'to wear' if using 'prefer to' or delete 'to be' and the article.

× And at the same time, if I'm going for some walk or for a gym or for a regular outing, at that time I prefer to wear comfortable shoes so that I feel comfortable. I'm like not.

✓ And at the same time, if I'm going for a walk, to the gym, or for a regular outing, I prefer to wear comfortable shoes so that I feel comfortable.

Issues: 'some walk' should be 'a walk'; 'for a gym' should be 'to the gym'; redundant and awkward ending 'I'm like not' incomplete. Suggestion: use correct prepositions for activities ('for a walk', 'to the gym') and remove unfinished fragments.