Shoes— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Your answer is relevant and includes personal detail, but it is slightly repetitive and has minor grammar issues (e.g. "bought the shoes each month", "they last more"). To improve, begin with a clear topic sentence, avoid repeating the same idea, correct verb forms, and add one specific example to support your point. Use linking words (e.g. "when I was younger", "now") for coherence but keep sentences concise (max 4–5 sentences).

Ejemplo: I used to buy shoes almost every month when I was younger because I wanted to follow fashion. However, now I buy shoes much less often and focus on quality instead of quantity, so each pair lasts several years. For example, my current leather trainers have been comfortable and durable for over two years. Therefore, I prefer investing in better-made shoes these days.

Sugerencia: Good clear answer with reasons, but there are some small grammar and wording issues (e.g. "Yes Sir" is informal in context, "click on the Internet", "there the discounts is also better"). Improve by using a clear topic sentence, correcting collocations, removing fillers, and combining points with linking words. Add a specific example of a recent online purchase to strengthen your answer.

Ejemplo: Yes, I often buy shoes online because it is convenient and saves time. I can browse many brands, place an order with a single click, and usually receive the shoes within one or two working days. For instance, I recently ordered running shoes from an international website during a sale and they arrived in two days with a 40% discount.

Sugerencia: The answer gives a basic idea but lacks clarity and precise vocabulary ("a quantity", "250 crumbs" is unclear). Improve by giving a clear price range or average, correcting grammar, and explaining reasons for spending choices. Use linking words and a concrete example with real currency or approximate amounts to make it specific and credible.

Ejemplo: It depends on the type of shoes, but I usually spend between $50 and $120 on a good pair because I value durability. For example, I recently bought two pairs during a sale for about $250 in total after a 70% discount, which I considered excellent value for money.

Sugerencia: Your preference is clear and you give reasons, but sentences are fragmented and contain hesitations and repetitions ("like like", "uh"). Improve by stating your preference clearly in one topic sentence, then give two concise supporting reasons with a linking word. Avoid filler words and correct small grammar issues.

Ejemplo: I generally prefer comfortable shoes because I walk a lot and don’t want blisters or sore feet. However, for formal occasions I sometimes choose fashionable shoes such as high heels despite the discomfort. For example, I wear comfortable sneakers for daily commuting but reserve dress shoes for weddings or important meetings.

× So to be honest, when I was younger I bought the shoes each month and I used to organize them on the shelf from the darkest color to the brightest color.

✓ So to be honest, when I was younger I bought shoes every month and I used to organize them on the shelf from the darkest color to the brightest color.

The original uses 'the shoes' which incorrectly specifies; 'shoes' as a general plural is correct (article error/quantifier). Also 'each month' is less natural than 'every month'. This is primarily a past-tense narrated habit sentence; use simple past and 'used to' is correct. Suggest replacing 'the shoes' with 'shoes' and 'each month' with 'every month' for idiomatic past habitual expression.

× Now when I'm older, I don't buy shoes as often as before.

✓ Now that I'm older, I don't buy shoes as often as I did before.

The clause 'Now when I'm older' is unnatural; 'Now that I'm older' is correct. Also the comparison 'as often as before' should include past reference 'as I did before' to clarify the past frequency. This fixes tense clarity and sentence structure.

× Now when I buy shoes, I go more for quality than quantity and they last more.

✓ Now when I buy shoes, I choose quality over quantity, and they last longer.

'Go more for' is informal; 'choose quality over quantity' is clearer. 'They last more' is ungrammatical — use comparative adverb 'longer' to compare durability. This corrects adverbial comparative use and wording.

× Yes Sir, most of my shoes are bought online.

✓ Yes, sir, most of my shoes are bought online.

Add commas around direct address 'sir' to follow punctuation conventions; although punctuation is not grammar type listed, the phrase is acceptable. No major tense error. (Kept because of formality.)

× I like the process where I don't have to go to a store, try something on and go back home again.

✓ I like that I don't have to go to a store, try things on, and then go back home.

'The process where' is awkward; use 'that' or 'the fact that'. 'Try something on' should be plural 'things' to match 'shoes' in general. 'And go back home again' is redundant; 'then go back home' is clearer. This improves sentence cohesion and parallelism.

× Here I can just click on the Internet and I get the shoes maybe one to two working days.

✓ Here I can just click online and get the shoes in maybe one to two working days.

Use 'click online' or 'click on the website' instead of 'click on the Internet'. 'I get the shoes' should be 'get the shoes in...' to indicate delivery time. Adjusts present tense and preposition use for idiomatic English.

× Umm and also there the discounts is also better online than in store.

✓ Umm, and also the discounts are better online than in store.

Subject 'discounts' is plural, so verb must be 'are' not 'is'. Remove the unnecessary 'there' and the extra 'also'. This fixes subject-verb agreement and redundancy.

× It really depends, now I go more for quality than a quantity, but the last pair of shoes I bought I got a 70% discount so I bought 2 shoes for 250 crumbs which I feel is really cheaper.

✓ It really depends. Now I go more for quality than quantity, but the last pair of shoes I bought I got a 70% discount, so I bought two pairs for 250 crumbs, which I felt was really cheap.

Multiple issues: 'a quantity' is incorrect — use 'quantity' without an article. '2 shoes' should be spelled 'two pairs' (assuming 'pair' unit) and 'crumbs' is informal but left; verb tense consistency: 'which I feel is' should match past narrative 'which I felt was really cheap.' Also punctuation split into clearer sentences. This addresses article use, number expression, and past tense consistency.

× I would say right now, comfortable shoes when I was younger, more fashionable shoes.

✓ I would say that right now I prefer comfortable shoes; when I was younger I preferred more fashionable shoes.

Original lacks verbs in the fragments and mixes tenses. Add 'prefer' to clarify current and past preferences and maintain tense consistency. This fixes sentence structure and verb usage.

× I like to have shoes I feel that can walk in without my feet hurting or getting blisters.

✓ I like to have shoes that I can walk in without my feet hurting or getting blisters.

The relative clause is awkward: 'shoes I feel that can walk in' incorrectly uses pronouns and clause order. Use 'shoes that I can walk in' placing the subject 'I' with the verb 'can walk' properly. This corrects pronoun/clause structure.

× And also depend on if it's, uh, more formal.

✓ It also depends on whether it's more formal.

Use 'It depends on whether' for conditional dependence; 'depend on if' is incorrect. Also include subject 'It' and correct verb form 'depends'. This fixes conjunction and subject-verb agreement.

× I like like high heels and then I don't really care if they're comfortable or not.

✓ I like high heels, and then I don't really care if they're comfortable or not.

Remove duplicated 'like like'. Otherwise sentence is fine; keep present tense. This corrects a repetition error.