Shoes— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and coherent: give a clear topic sentence stating your habit, then add one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition and unclear fragments.

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes and I usually buy a pair about once a month. I prefer them because they are comfortable and versatile; for example, the right sneakers let me play basketball or soccer without pain.

Sugerencia: Use a clear tense and structure: state whether you have bought online, then give specific advantages with linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., 'more types', 'than in shops') and avoid wordiness.

Ejemplo: Yes, I have bought shoes online because there are more types to choose from than in physical shops, and I can often use coupons to get a lower price.

Sugerencia: Be realistic and precise: give a clear amount and comment with reasons. Reduce hesitation words and correct phrasing (e.g., 'I spend about $80' or 'I spend around $800 a year'). Explain why it feels expensive or not worth it with one specific reason.

Ejemplo: I usually spend about $80 per month on shoes, which I know is quite expensive. Sometimes I think it's not worth it because the shoes wear out quickly or I buy similar styles repeatedly.

Sugerencia: Give a direct preference and justify it with a clear reason and a brief example. Use standard phrasing (avoid 'wanna to') and a linking word to connect ideas.

Ejemplo: I prefer comfortable shoes that are also somewhat fashionable because comfort matters for daily use, but I also like them to look good—for instance, I choose sneakers that have supportive soles yet a modern design.

× I like to buy shoes once a month because I love them, because it is comfy on my foot and I can do I cannot.

✓ I like to buy shoes once a month because I love them, because they are comfortable on my feet and I can do things I could not do otherwise.

The sentence uses inconsistent and incorrect pronouns and phrasing. 'It is comfy on my foot' should be 'they are comfortable on my feet' because 'shoes' is plural (plural issue) and requires plural pronoun and plural noun 'feet'. 'I can do I cannot' is ungrammatical; it should be rephrased to 'I can do things I could not do otherwise.' Suggestion: keep pronouns and number consistent and use clear comparative clause for contrast.

× I can play basketball, soccer and things like that wearing shoes and it's not that expensive.

✓ I can play basketball, soccer and similar activities while wearing shoes, and they are not that expensive.

The original mixes singular 'it's' with plural 'shoes'. Use plural pronoun 'they' to agree with 'shoes' (singular and plural issue). Also improve word order for clarity: 'while wearing shoes' and 'not that expensive' should refer to 'they' (the shoes).

× I bought shoes online because there's more type of shoes that I can pick from the shops offline and I think there's coupons that can make the shoe the price of the shoes less than I expected.

✓ I bought shoes online because there are more types of shoes I can choose from than in offline shops, and I think there are coupons that can make the price lower than I expected.

Errors: 'there's' used with plural noun 'types' — use 'there are' (subject-verb agreement and quantifier issue). 'More type of shoes' should be 'more types of shoes' (plural). 'Pick from the shops offline' is awkward; use 'choose from than in offline shops'. 'Make the shoe the price of the shoes less' is incorrect word order; rephrase to 'make the price lower'. Suggestion: ensure number agreement and clearer comparative structure.

× I spend on shoes like $800 umm every month and I think it it's, it is expensive umm, while sometimes I think it's not worth it.

✓ I spend about $800 on shoes every month, and I think it is expensive, although sometimes I think it's not worth it.

Word order error: 'spend on shoes like $800' should be 'spend about $800 on shoes'. Remove filler repetitions 'it it's, it is'. Use 'although' for contrast instead of 'while' for better clarity. Maintain present simple tense for habitual action.

× I prefer comfortable shoes and a bit fashionable because I want it to be a look.

✓ I prefer comfortable and somewhat fashionable shoes because I want them to look good.

Pronoun 'it' incorrectly refers to plural 'shoes' — use 'them'. Also adjective order: 'comfortable and somewhat fashionable shoes' is more natural. 'To be a look' is ungrammatical; use 'to look good.' Suggestion: keep pronoun number consistent and use natural collocations.

× I wanna to make it look good and very comfy.

✓ I want to make them look good and very comfortable.

Colloquial 'wanna to' is incorrect: 'want to' is correct. 'It' should be 'them' to match plural 'shoes'. Use the adjective 'comfortable' rather than informal 'comfy' in careful speech. Also infinitive 'to make' + object + base verb 'look' is correct; do not use 'to' twice. Suggestion: use standard forms 'want to' and match pronouns and register.