Shoes— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetitions and correct countable noun forms and articles (e.g., 'different occasions', 'I don't buy shoes often').

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes. I prefer to own different pairs for different occasions, such as sports, work, and parties, but I don't buy them often because I need to save money. However, when I can afford it, I like to choose varied styles to match my outfits.

Sugerencia: Finish your thought clearly and reduce filler words. Use a topic sentence about your experience, then give a specific reason and a linking phrase showing what you did to avoid problems. Mention a concrete step (e.g., reading reviews, checking size charts) to make the answer credible.

Ejemplo: Yes, I have bought shoes online and it turned out well. At first I was skeptical because I worried about quality and fit, but I checked customer reviews and the size chart before ordering, so the shoes fit and were satisfactory.

Sugerencia: Use correct grammar and be more precise with ranges and units. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then give clear examples with consistent number format and a linking phrase. Avoid vague phrase 'depending on the time' and replace with 'depending on the purpose or quality'.

Ejemplo: It depends on the type of shoes. For example, hiking boots usually cost around 2,000 to 3,000 pesos, while casual shoes cost about 1,000 to 1,500 pesos, depending on the brand and quality.

Sugerencia: Start with a full sentence as a topic sentence and reduce informal contractions. Use one or two supporting reasons with a linking word and a brief example. Correct minor grammar: 'would hurt my feet' → 'that would hurt my feet' and 'hinder me from walking'.

Ejemplo: I prefer comfortable shoes over fashionable ones because shoes that hurt my feet make it difficult to walk all day. For instance, I often choose cushioned sneakers for long days out rather than high heels that look stylish but are uncomfortable.

× I like to have different shoes for different occasion, but I don't really buy shoes always because I don't have the money.

✓ I like to have different shoes for different occasions, but I don't always buy shoes because I don't have the money.

Use plural 'occasions' when referring to multiple instances (quantifier/number agreement). Move 'always' before the main verb 'buy' for correct adverb placement and natural word order. Suggestion: say 'different occasions' and place frequency adverbs (always, usually) before the main verb: 'I don't always buy...'.

× But if I do have the chance to buy anything, any shoes I want, I want different varieties.

✓ But if I have the chance to buy any shoes I want, I would choose different varieties.

Original uses awkward modal/tense and word order. Use conditional 'would' for hypothetical situations and place 'any shoes I want' directly after 'buy'. Also 'different varieties' is better used with 'choose' rather than 'I want different varieties' for clarity. Suggestion: use 'if I have the chance... I would choose...'.

× I did successfully umm, so actually buying shoes online is very difficult and at first I was skeptical to buy one because I'm afraid that it's not of good quality but umm, I just made sure that the sides that I.

✓ I did, successfully. Actually, buying shoes online used to be very difficult and at first I was skeptical about buying any because I was afraid they might not be good quality, but I made sure to check the seller and the measurements.

Mixes past and present tenses and has incomplete sentence. Use past tense 'used to be' and 'was skeptical' for a past experience. Use 'about buying' not 'skeptical to buy'. 'I'm afraid that it's not of good quality' should be 'I was afraid they might not be good quality' for tense and modal accuracy. Complete the thought by specifying what was checked (seller/measurements) for clarity. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense when describing past experiences and use 'skeptical about' + gerund.

× So if it's like a hiking shoes then that would range to 2 to 3000 pesos.

✓ So if it's a pair of hiking shoes, that would range from 2,000 to 3,000 pesos.

Use 'a pair of hiking shoes' or 'hiking shoes' without 'a' plus singular noun. Use 'range from X to Y' rather than 'range to'. Format numbers consistently and include commas. Suggestion: use correct article and 'range from... to...'.

× For casual probably 1000 to 1500.

✓ For casual shoes, probably 1,000 to 1,500 pesos.

Add the noun 'shoes' and currency 'pesos' for clarity; format numbers and include commas. Also include a comma after introductory phrase. Suggestion: supply omitted nouns and units when giving price ranges.

× So the price would vary depending on the time.

✓ So the price would vary depending on the type.

Context indicates 'type' of shoe, not 'time'. Using the wrong preposition/word changes meaning. Suggestion: use 'type' to refer to categories of shoes: 'vary depending on the type'.

× Comfortable shoes anytime of the day.

✓ Comfortable shoes anytime of the day.

This fragment lacks a subject and verb but in spoken answering style it functions as an elliptical response. If expanded: 'I prefer comfortable shoes at any time of the day.' Suggestion: in full sentence include subject and verb: 'I prefer comfortable shoes at any time of the day.'

× I don't want to wear very fashionable shoes but would hurt my feet all day and that would hinder me to walk wherever I wanna go.

✓ I don't want to wear very fashionable shoes that would hurt my feet all day and hinder me from walking wherever I want to go.

Use 'that' to connect the clause describing the shoes. 'Would hurt' should directly follow 'shoes' as a defining clause. Use 'hinder me from walking' not 'hinder me to walk'. Use 'want to' rather than colloquial 'wanna' in formal speech. Suggestion: use relative pronoun 'that', correct verb patterns ('hinder someone from doing something') and avoid informal contractions in formal responses.

× So yes, I'd prefer comfortable shoes over fashionable shoes.

✓ So yes, I'd prefer comfortable shoes to fashionable ones.

Use the common preference structure 'prefer A to B' rather than 'prefer A over B' (both are possible but 'prefer A to B' is more idiomatic). Also use 'fashionable ones' to avoid repetition. Suggestion: say 'prefer X to Y' and use pronoun 'ones' to replace repeated noun.