Rules— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Jawaban Anda sudah cukup baik dan jelas, namun kalimat kedua agak panjang dan bisa dibuat lebih ringkas dan alami. Gunakan kata penghubung yang tepat untuk membuat jawaban lebih koheren dan hindari pengulangan kata yang tidak perlu.

Ejemplo: Yes, there are several rules at my school. For instance, all students must wear the same uniform and shoes to promote equality and prevent differences between rich and poor. These rules help create unity and make everyone feel included.

Sugerencia: Jawaban Anda kurang alami dan ada kesalahan tata bahasa seperti 'treated by the rules'. Gunakan kalimat yang lebih natural dan perbaiki struktur kalimat agar lebih efektif dan jelas.

Ejemplo: I don't think so because students prefer to have freedom at school. They want to express their creativity without feeling stressed by too many rules.

Sugerencia: Jawaban Anda sudah cukup baik, namun kalimat terakhir agak panjang dan kurang jelas. Perbaiki penggunaan preposisi dan buat kalimat lebih singkat dan jelas.

Ejemplo: Yes, I have. His name is Mr. Bambang, my third-year high school teacher. He was very dedicated because he encouraged me and helped me prepare for university entrance exams, which helped me get into my dream university, Jaran University, where I graduated.

Sugerencia: Jawaban Anda kurang jelas dan ada kalimat yang tidak lengkap atau tidak koheren seperti 'so that's why we will not. Differentiate.' Perbaiki struktur kalimat dan gunakan kata penghubung yang tepat agar jawaban lebih logis dan mudah dipahami.

Ejemplo: I think the current rules are enough for schools in Indonesia because promoting equality from an early age is important, so there is no need for more rules.

Sugerencia: Jawaban Anda mengandung kesalahan penggunaan kata ganti (he/she) dan kalimat yang kurang alami seperti 'kinda killer'. Gunakan kata yang lebih tepat dan perbaiki tata bahasa agar jawaban lebih jelas dan profesional.

Ejemplo: Yes, I had a very strict teacher named Ma'am Agatha. She taught English and, although she was strict, she helped me a lot. Thanks to her, I always got the highest scores in class.

Sugerencia: Jawaban Anda kurang jelas dan kalimatnya tidak alami. Hindari frasa yang membingungkan seperti 'I don't put sort of this thing on my internal radar'. Gunakan kalimat yang lebih sederhana dan langsung untuk menyampaikan pendapat Anda.

Ejemplo: I don't want to be a teacher, even though I currently work as a mentor in the GIS field. Therefore, I am not interested in working as a teacher in a rule-free school.

× For example, as all students are required to wear the same uniform and shoes to promote quality and prevent any differences between rich and poor students.

✓ For example, all students are required to wear the same uniform and shoes to promote equality and prevent any differences between rich and poor students.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'as' at the beginning, causing a sentence fragment. Removing 'as' creates a complete sentence. Also, 'quality' should be 'equality' to convey the intended meaning.

× I don't think so, because students don't want to be treated by the rules.

✓ I don't think so, because students don't want to be restricted by the rules.

The phrase 'treated by the rules' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'restricted by the rules' or 'controlled by the rules' to convey limitation imposed by rules.

× ...which allowed me to get into my dream university by the Jaran University where I eventually graduated.

✓ ...which allowed me to get into my dream university, Jaran University, where I eventually graduated.

The phrase 'by the Jaran University' is incorrect. The correct preposition is omitted here; the university name should be set off by commas without 'by the'.

× I think the current regulation is sufficient for schools in Indonesia because the equality needs to be promoted in the school since the earlier age, so that's why we will not. Differentiate.

✓ I think the current regulations are sufficient for schools in Indonesia because equality needs to be promoted from an early age, so that's why we should not differentiate.

The original sentence has multiple errors: 'regulation' should be plural 'regulations'; 'the equality' should be 'equality'; 'since the earlier age' should be 'from an early age'; the sentence is fragmented and unclear at the end, corrected to 'so that's why we should not differentiate.'

× I've had a really strict teacher and her name is Ma'am Agatha. He taught English subject even though she was kinda killer at the time. But he helped me a lot in English subject and I always got the highest score in the class.

✓ I've had a really strict teacher and her name is Ma'am Agatha. She taught English even though she was kind of strict at the time. But she helped me a lot in English and I always got the highest score in the class.

The pronouns 'He' and 'she' are mixed incorrectly referring to the same female teacher. Consistent use of 'she' is required. Also, 'kinda killer' is informal and unclear; 'kind of strict' is more appropriate.

× I don't put sort of this thing on my internal radar because I don't want to be a teacher even though currently I work as a mentor in GIS field but I don't want to teach in formal education community.

✓ I don't put this sort of thing on my internal radar because I don't want to be a teacher, even though I currently work as a mentor in the GIS field, but I don't want to teach in the formal education community.

The phrase 'put sort of this thing on my internal radar' is awkward; 'put this sort of thing on my internal radar' is correct. Also, 'in GIS field' should be 'in the GIS field'; 'formal education community' should be preceded by 'the'.