Part 1
Examinador
Are there any rules for students at your school?
Candidato
Yes, there are some rules about attending class on time where uniforms and we are not allowed to use mobile phones in classes and we even have a rule about hairstyles like boys hair couldn't be too long.
Examinador
Do you think students would benefit more from more rules?
Candidato
No, because I think there are some. Too much rules will make students feel stressed and limited. Imagine if the school requires students don't run or laugh loudly during the break time, then the school will becomes a boring and scary place.
Examinador
Have you ever had a really dedicated teacher?
Candidato
Yes, my primary school English teacher usually stay after school to answer the questions for students who needed help. I remember one time I can't understand the programmer point. She very patiently explained it until I finally got it because of.
Examinador
Do you prefer to have more or fewer rules at school?
Candidato
Well, I like having fewer roles at my school because it gives me more freedom and makes me feel more comfortable and focus better on my studies. For example, my school has a rule about hairstyles which I think is unnecessary and limits me.
Examinador
Have you ever had a really strict teacher?
Candidato
Yes, I had a math teacher in my high school who was really really strict. She always made sure we did our homework on time and followed the rules. If someone fails to do this, she will punish them.
Examinador
Would you like to work as a teacher in a rule-free school?
Candidato
No, because I think students in the schools without rules will be difficult to manage. Big imagine if during this course some students want to reading, some others want to dancing or singing. Then the classroom becomes a playground and it could be hard for students to learn.
Are there any rules for students at your school?
Puntuación: 65.0Sugerencia: 回答中语法和表达不够准确,句子结构混乱,缺少连贯的连接词,建议简化句子结构,使用恰当的连接词使表达更自然流畅。
Ejemplo: Yes, there are several rules at my school. For example, students must attend classes on time and wear uniforms. Also, mobile phones are not allowed during lessons. Additionally, there is a rule about hairstyles; for instance, boys cannot have very long hair.
Do you think students would benefit more from more rules?
Puntuación: 70.0Sugerencia: 回答表达基本清楚,但语法错误较多,且缺少连贯的连接词,建议注意主谓一致和时态使用,并使用连接词使句子更连贯。
Ejemplo: No, I don't think more rules would benefit students. Too many rules can make students feel stressed and restricted. For example, if the school forbids running or laughing loudly during break time, it would become a boring and scary place.
Have you ever had a really dedicated teacher?
Puntuación: 60.0Sugerencia: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不完整,句子不连贯,建议注意时态一致,补充完整句子,并使用连接词使表达更清晰。
Ejemplo: Yes, my primary school English teacher was very dedicated. She usually stayed after school to help students with their questions. I remember one time I couldn't understand a programming concept, but she patiently explained it until I finally understood.
Do you prefer to have more or fewer rules at school?
Puntuación: 70.0Sugerencia: 回答表达较好,但有拼写错误(roles应为rules),建议注意拼写和句子流畅性,适当使用连接词增强逻辑性。
Ejemplo: Well, I prefer having fewer rules at school because it gives me more freedom. This makes me feel more comfortable and helps me focus better on my studies. For example, there is a rule about hairstyles which I think is unnecessary and limits my self-expression.
Have you ever had a really strict teacher?
Puntuación: 75.0Sugerencia: 回答内容清晰,但时态使用不够准确,建议注意时态一致性,并使用连接词使句子更连贯。
Ejemplo: Yes, I had a very strict math teacher in high school. She always made sure we did our homework on time and followed the rules. If someone failed to do so, she would punish them.
Would you like to work as a teacher in a rule-free school?
Puntuación: 65.0Sugerencia: 回答中语法错误较多,表达不够自然,建议简化句子结构,注意语法和词汇的正确使用,并使用连接词使表达更流畅。
Ejemplo: No, I wouldn't like to work in a school without rules. I think it would be difficult to manage students. For example, if some students want to read while others want to dance or sing during class, the classroom would become chaotic and it would be hard for students to learn.
× Yes, there are some rules about attending class on time where uniforms and we are not allowed to use mobile phones in classes and we even have a rule about hairstyles like boys hair couldn't be too long.
✓ Yes, there are some rules about attending class on time, wearing uniforms, and we are not allowed to use mobile phones in classes. We even have a rule about hairstyles, like boys' hair couldn't be too long.
原句中“where uniforms”应为“wearing uniforms”,且“boys hair”缺少所有格,应为“boys' hair”。这是单复数和所有格的错误。建议注意名词所有格的正确使用和动词形式。
× No, because I think there are some. Too much rules will make students feel stressed and limited.
✓ No, because I think there are some. Too many rules will make students feel stressed and limited.
“Too much rules”中“rules”为可数名词,应该用“too many”而非“too much”。这是量词使用错误。建议区分可数和不可数名词,使用正确的量词。
× Imagine if the school requires students don't run or laugh loudly during the break time, then the school will becomes a boring and scary place.
✓ Imagine if the school requires students not to run or laugh loudly during break time, then the school will become a boring and scary place.
“requires students don't run”应改为“requires students not to run”,动词不定式用法错误;“will becomes”中“becomes”应为原形“become”,因为情态动词后动词用原形。建议注意情态动词后动词形式和否定结构。
× Yes, my primary school English teacher usually stay after school to answer the questions for students who needed help.
✓ Yes, my primary school English teacher usually stayed after school to answer the questions for students who needed help.
“usually stay”与过去时态不一致,应为“usually stayed”。建议时态保持一致。
× I remember one time I can't understand the programmer point.
✓ I remember one time I couldn't understand the programmer's point.
“can't”应为过去时“couldn't”,且“programmer point”应为所有格“programmer's point”。建议注意时态和所有格的正确使用。
× She very patiently explained it until I finally got it because of.
✓ She explained it very patiently until I finally got it.
“She very patiently explained it”语序不正确,应为“She explained it very patiently”。“because of”后无内容,应删除。建议注意副词位置和句子完整性。
× Well, I like having fewer roles at my school because it gives me more freedom and makes me feel more comfortable and focus better on my studies.
✓ Well, I like having fewer rules at my school because it gives me more freedom and makes me feel more comfortable and focus better on my studies.
“roles”应为“rules”,词义错误。建议注意词汇的正确拼写和使用。
× If someone fails to do this, she will punish them.
✓ If someone fails to do this, she will punish them.
此句无语法错误,符合时态和主谓一致。无须修改。
× Big imagine if during this course some students want to reading, some others want to dancing or singing.
✓ Just imagine if during this course some students want to read, others want to dance or sing.
“Big imagine”应为“Just imagine”;“want to reading”应为“want to read”;“some others”改为“others”更自然。建议注意固定搭配和动词不定式用法。
× Then the classroom becomes a playground and it could be hard for students to learn.
✓ Then the classroom becomes a playground and it could be hard for students to learn.
此句无语法错误,符合时态和主谓一致。无须修改。