Rules— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 문장이 길고 중복이 많습니다. 기본적으로 질문에 바로 답한 뒤(예: "Yes, there are rules.") 이유와 구체적인 예를 간결하게 덧붙이는 연습을 하세요. 연결어(to show, for example)를 정확히 사용하고 시제와 관사(a/the) 오류를 고치세요. 또한 어휘를 단순하고 명확하게 정리해 최대 3문장(주제문 + 1~2개의 구체적 세부사항)을 넘기지 마세요.

Ejemplo: Yes, there are rules at my school. For example, students must attend classes regularly because attendance affects our grades. If you miss many lessons, your final mark can be reduced.

Sugerencia: 의견을 제시한 뒤 그 이유를 명확하게 설명해야 합니다. 'manner' 대신 'good manners'나 'discipline' 같은 표현을 사용하고, 예시를 구체적으로 들되 중복을 피하세요. 연결사(because, for example, therefore)를 적절히 사용해 문장 흐름을 살리세요.

Ejemplo: Yes, I think students would benefit from more rules because rules encourage discipline and good manners. For example, a dress code or punctuality rules can help students behave more professionally in class.

Sugerencia: 문법과 어순 오류가 있습니다(예: 'I've been really dedicated TE to teacher'는 의미 불명). 질문에는 'Yes'로 시작한 뒤 간단한 설명(누가, 어떻게 헌신했는지)을 제공하세요. 구체적인 행동(추가 수업, 피드백 제공 등)을 명확한 문장으로 한두 문장만 쓰세요.

Ejemplo: Yes, I had a very dedicated teacher in high school. She stayed after school to run extra classes and gave us individual feedback to help us improve.

Sugerencia: 의견 표현은 간단명료해야 합니다('fewer rules' 또는 'more rules'). 이유는 한두 문장으로 구체적이고 논리적으로 제시하세요. 중복 표현('free freedom')과 철자 오류('roles'→'rules')를 고치고 연결어(to, because, so)를 자연스럽게 사용하세요.

Ejemplo: I prefer fewer rules at school because students need some freedom to be creative. For example, having flexible study periods can encourage independent learning and responsibility.

Sugerencia: 짧고 정확한 진술 후 구체적 사례를 덧붙이세요. 불필요한 단어(‘that is which has colored color’)와 중복을 제거하고, 문법(관사, 시제)을 고치세요. 예시는 규칙의 구체적 영향(왜 엄격했는지, 학생들에게 어떤 결과가 있었는지)을 포함하면 더 좋습니다.

Ejemplo: Yes, I had a very strict teacher in middle school. For example, he even banned students from using colored lip balm because he thought it was distracting in class.

Sugerencia: 의견을 명확히 밝히고 이유를 간결히 설명하세요. 중복된 표현('I've although')과 길게 늘어놓는 문장을 피하고, 'socially developed' 대신 'socially well-adjusted' 등 자연스러운 표현을 쓰세요. 마무리로 구체적 예(규칙이 사회성 발달에 어떻게 기여하는지)를 하나 제시하세요.

Ejemplo: No, I wouldn't like that because although freedom matters, some rules are necessary. For example, rules about respectful behaviour help students learn how to get along with others.

× First, students have to attend the class regularly because we are the students and the attendance is the most important thing the students show to the professor.

✓ First, students have to attend class regularly because we are students and attendance is the most important thing students show the professor.

The definite article 'the' is unnecessary before 'class', 'students', and 'attendance' in these general statements. Remove 'the' to make them plural/uncountable general references. Also remove the redundant 'the' before 'students' to sound natural.

× For example, the attendance effects our grade mostly and if we miss the class.

✓ For example, attendance mostly affects our grades if we miss class.

Use the correct verb 'affects' (not 'effects' which is a noun) and maintain subject-verb agreement. 'Attendance' is uncountable, 'grades' is common plural, and omit 'the' before 'class' for general reference.

× Yes, they can benefit more and more of rules because I think rules make some people get some manners.

✓ Yes, they can benefit more from rules because I think rules help some people develop manners.

Use the preposition 'from' with 'benefit', not 'of'. 'Make some people get some manners' is ungrammatical; use 'help... develop manners' to express the intended meaning.

× Manner is very important to our society and our society, for example, when people have no manners.

✓ Manners are very important to our society; for example, problems can arise when people have no manners.

Use plural 'manners' and adjust sentence structure to clarify the example. The original repeats 'our society' awkwardly; combine ideas into a clearer sentence and use 'problems can arise' to complete the thought.

× Yes, I've been really dedicated TE to teacher in my high school.

✓ Yes, I had a really dedicated teacher in my high school.

'I've been really dedicated TE to teacher' is ungrammatical. Use simple past 'I had' to match the past context and correct noun order 'dedicated teacher'. Remove extraneous letters.

× She is very dedicated to her students.

✓ She was very dedicated to her students.

The context asks about a past teacher in high school, so use past tense 'was' rather than present 'is' to keep tense consistent.

× For example, she made another classes after classes to help the children, so I was.

✓ For example, she held extra classes after lessons to help the students, so I attended.

Use 'held' or 'organized' for running classes, not 'made', and 'extra classes' is correct. 'After classes' better as 'after lessons'. Complete the clause: 'so I attended.' Use past tense throughout.

× I prefer have to have fewer roles in school because I think the free freedom is one of the most important thing be for example when the students have no freedom they can find.

✓ I prefer to have fewer rules at school because I think freedom is one of the most important things; for example, students may struggle if they have no freedom.

Correct verb pattern 'prefer to have', change 'roles' to 'rules'. 'Free freedom' is redundant; use 'freedom'. Use plural 'things'. Rephrase the example to be coherent and grammatically correct.

× Yes, when I was in middle school students, I had very strict teacher because he even stopped me to use some lip balm that is which has colored color so.

✓ Yes, when I was in middle school, I had a very strict teacher because he even stopped me from using a lip balm that had color.

Place phrase 'when I was in middle school' correctly and use 'a very strict teacher'. Use 'stopped me from using' for correct verb pattern and 'lip balm that had color' or 'colored lip balm' to describe it. Use past tense consistently.

× No, I don't want to be because I've although I think freedom is important, but also I guess the rules are important too because there are if there are no rules, students cannot be socially developed, for example.

✓ No, I don't want to because although I think freedom is important, I also believe rules are important; for example, if there are no rules, students cannot develop socially.

Remove awkward 'to be' after 'want'. Use 'because although' corrected to 'because' or 'although' and reorder: 'although I think... I also believe...'. Use 'develop socially' rather than 'be socially developed'. Clarify the example with correct conditional structure.