Hobby— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be direct with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar, avoid redundancy, and give specific supporting details using linking words. Limit to up to five sentences and use varied vocabulary (e.g., "explore, experience, sample"). Correct verb forms and articles: say "I love traveling" not "I love to traveling."

Ejemplo: I have several hobbies, but my main one is traveling in my spare time. I love exploring new places because I can experience different cultures and sample local food. For example, last year I visited Tokyo and tried street food I had never tasted before. Overall, traveling helps me relax and learn about the world.

Sugerencia: Start with a clear topic sentence, use correct past tense and articles, and choose precise nouns. Use linking words (e.g., "for example, such as") and correct verb forms: "I used to borrow my mother's phone" and "I loved preserving memories." Add a concise example to support your point.

Ejemplo: Yes, I used to enjoy taking photographs as a child. I often borrowed my mother's phone to capture anything that caught my eye, such as strangers in interesting outfits or beautiful landscapes. For example, I once photographed a colorful market and later showed the pictures to my family. I loved preserving those memories.

Sugerencia: Give a clear, grammatical topic sentence and avoid unclear words like "idolatry" used incorrectly. Use correct tense and pronouns, and limit to three or four well-formed sentences. Explain who you admired and why, and provide a specific example. Use linking words (e.g., "because, so, for example").

Ejemplo: Yes, I have admired pop stars since I was a child. I used to watch singers and actors on TV because I admired their talent and style. For example, I followed a K-pop group and learned dance moves from their videos, which inspired me to practice singing and dancing myself.

Sugerencia: Answer directly, correct grammar ("I am from an ethnic minority," "my whole family loves singing and dancing"), and be specific about occasions and feelings. Use linking words such as "for example" and include one concise supporting detail. Keep it within five sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, many of my family members share my hobbies. I come from an ethnic minority and my family loves singing and dancing, especially at gatherings. For example, whenever we eat together or attend a wedding, we usually sing traditional songs and dance as a group. This shared activity helps us feel connected to our culture.

× I have several comments especially I love to traveling in my spare time.

✓ I have several hobbies; especially, I love traveling in my spare time.

The verb 'love' should be followed by the gerund form (verb + -ing), so 'traveling' is correct. Also 'comments' is likely incorrect contextually and should be 'hobbies'. Use a semicolon or period to separate clauses for clarity.

× I'm so happy to have a chance to explore new places and try something different.

✓ I'm so happy to have the chance to explore new places and try different things.

Use 'the chance' (specific opportunity) and parallel structure: 'try different things' matches 'explore new places'. This corrects awkward phrasing and improves fluency.

× Cultures and delicious food and so on.

✓ I enjoy the cultures, delicious food, and so on.

This fragment lacks a verb and subject. Turning it into a complete sentence with 'I enjoy' and using commas to list items fixes sentence structure.

× I had a hobby of taking pictures when I was a child.

✓ I had a hobby of taking pictures when I was a child.

This sentence is grammatically correct for past tense; no change needed. It correctly uses past tense to describe a childhood hobby.

× I always brought in my mother phones to take pictures of something I saw.

✓ I always brought my mother's phone to take pictures of things I saw.

Do not use 'brought in' here; 'brought' or 'borrowed' is appropriate. Use the possessive form 'my mother's phone'. Use plural 'things' for general objects seen.

× Whatever it's a stranger or a beautiful scene, I love to preserving memory of that.

✓ Whether it's a stranger or a beautiful scene, I love preserving those memories.

Use 'Whether' for alternatives, not 'Whatever'. 'Love' should be followed by gerund 'preserving'. Use plural 'those memories' to refer back to multiple instances and correct word order.

× Yes, since I was a child I always idolatry and during my childhood I always admire that singer or actor on the TV.

✓ Yes, since I was a child I have always idolized and admired singers or actors on TV.

Use present perfect ('have always') to show a continuing state from childhood to present. 'Idolatry' is a noun; use the verb 'idolize'. Use plural 'singers or actors' for general reference and 'on TV' is the correct prepositional phrase.

× When I grow up, I love to that K pop stars and I when I see him I always start struck yeah.

✓ When I grew up, I loved those K-pop stars, and when I saw them I was always starstruck.

Match tense: childhood reference should use past 'grew up' and 'loved'. 'Those' for plural 'K-pop stars'. Use 'saw them' (plural pronoun). 'Starstruck' is one word; use past tense 'was' for the state. Remove filler 'yeah'.

× Do you have the same hobbies as your family members?

✓ Do you have the same hobbies as your family members?

This question is grammatically correct; no change needed. Article usage is appropriate here.

× Actually I am a ethnic minority.

✓ Actually, I am an ethnic minority.

Use 'an' before a vowel sound ('ethnic') and include a comma after introductory 'Actually'.

× I came from from a younger family and my whole family allowed to singing and dancing.

✓ I come from a younger generation in my family, and my whole family is allowed to sing and dance.

Remove duplicate 'from'. 'Came from' shifts tense; use 'come from' if speaking about origin generally. 'Younger family' is unclear—'younger generation in my family' clarifies. 'Allowed to sing and dance' needs 'is allowed' or 'are allowed' and base verbs 'sing' and 'dance'.

× Whenever we eating together or we join a wedding we always dance and sing.

✓ Whenever we eat together or attend a wedding, we always dance and sing.

Use base verb 'eat' after 'we' (present simple). Use 'attend' rather than 'join' for events like weddings. Add commas for clarity and parallel structure.

× I think that's a common point.

✓ I think that's something we have in common.

'Common point' is unnatural; use 'something we have in common' for natural English. This corrects phrasing and improves clarity.