Hobby— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Cevap kısa ve anlaşılır fakat dilbilgisi hataları ve ifade belirsizlikleri var. "which comprised all of the fighting sports" ifadesi yanlış kullanım; doğru yapı "which includes/combines" olmalı. Ayrıca doğal konuşma için ek bir açıklama ve bağlaç kullanılmalı (ör. "because", "so"). En fazla 3-4 cümle içinde neden sevdiğinizi ve ne sıklıkla yaptığınızı belirtin.

Ejemplo: Yes, I practise mixed martial arts, which combines several fighting styles. I enjoy it because it keeps me fit and improves my focus, so I train three times a week.

Sugerencia: İyi başlangıç, fakat cümlede dilbilgisi ve kelime seçimi hataları var ("come a professional player" → "become a professional player"). Ayrıca "Fanarbacha" ifadesi muhtemelen hatalı veya belirsiz; açıkça hangi takım veya yer olduğu söylenmeli. Bir veya iki ek detay (ne zaman, neden sevdiğiniz) ekleyin ve bağlaç kullanın.

Ejemplo: Yes, I used to play basketball and dreamed of becoming a professional player for a local team. I loved the teamwork and practiced every weekend with friends.

Sugerencia: Cümlede kelime kullanımı ve akıcılık sorunları var. "patient" yerine "patience" kullanmalısınız; ayrıca "the existence of this hobby" garip ifadeyi basitçe "this hobby" ile değiştirin. Gereksiz duraklamaları (uh) kaldırın ve bir bağlaçla nedenini ve bir örnek verin.

Ejemplo: Yes, I've been keen on fishing since I was a child because it teaches patience and relaxes me. For example, I often spend early mornings by the lake to unwind.

Sugerencia: Cümle yapısı ve zaman kullanımı hatalı; "my father is also keen on fishing" ve "because of him I started to love fishing" gibi düzeltmeler gerekli. Gereksiz dolaylı ifadeleri ve duraklamaları çıkarın. Ayrıca daha spesifik bir örnek verin (nerelere gittiğiniz, ne yaptığınız).

Ejemplo: Yes, my father is also keen on fishing, and because he used to take me to the river when I was young, I started to love it too. We would spend whole mornings baiting hooks and waiting for fish.

× Yes, I like to do mixed martial arts, which comprised all of the fighting sports.

✓ Yes, I like to do mixed martial arts, which comprise all fighting sports.

The verb 'comprised' is incorrect here because the relative clause refers to 'mixed martial arts' (plural concept) and should use present simple 'comprise' or passive 'are comprised of'. Also 'all of the fighting sports' is wordy; 'all fighting sports' is more natural. Suggestion: use 'which comprise all fighting sports' or 'which includes elements of many fighting sports.'

× Yes, I used to play basketball and I had a dream that I wanted to come a professional player in Fanarbacha.

✓ Yes, I used to play basketball and I had a dream that I wanted to become a professional player in Fanarbacha.

The verb 'come' is incorrect; the correct infinitive for 'to become' is 'become'. Use 'become' after 'wanted to'. Also ensure past habitual tense 'used to' is correct. Suggestion: replace 'come' with 'become' and check proper noun spelling 'Fanarbacha' if needed.

× Yes, I uh, I am already keen on fishing because the patient and the existence of this hobby make me really happy.

✓ Yes, I have been keen on fishing since childhood because the peace and the presence of this hobby make me really happy.

This sentence has word choice and tense issues. 'I am already keen' is unnatural; 'I have been keen' or 'I've been interested' fits continuity from childhood. 'The patient' is wrong word; likely meant 'peace' or 'patience'. 'The existence of this hobby' is awkward; 'having this hobby' or 'the presence of this hobby' is better. Suggestion: use 'I have been keen on fishing since childhood because the peace and having this hobby make me really happy.'

× Umm, my father also keen on fishing, I think uh, because of him I start to love fishing because he always uh, take me when he went to see.

✓ Umm, my father is also keen on fishing. I think because of him I started to love fishing because he always took me with him when he went fishing.

Multiple issues: missing verb 'is' after 'father', incorrect tense 'start' should be past 'started' to match 'always took', and pronoun/phrase 'take me when he went to see' is incorrect. Use 'took me with him when he went fishing.' Ensure consistent past tense for habitual past actions. Suggestion: add 'is', change 'start' to 'started', change 'take' to 'took', and replace 'went to see' with 'went fishing.'