Hobby— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 文法と語順の誤りを直し、より自然で簡潔な表現にしましょう。トピック文で趣味を明確に述べ、その後に理由や具体例を1〜2文で続けると良いです。例えば時制の一致（"since I started living alone"）や語彙の選択（"look up new recipes"）を修正します。発話は3〜4文にまとめ、冗長な語を避けてください。

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoy cooking. Since I started living alone, I often look up new recipes and try to make them. I find preparing meals relaxing, and experimenting with different cuisines keeps it interesting.

Sugerencia: 最後の文が不完全で、文法や語順の問題も見られます。まず過去形で一貫して答え、具体的な活動期間や経験を一文で述べ、その後で感想を短く付け加えると良いです。不要な繰り返しを避け、自然な語彙（"joined the Brisbane Club"）を使ってください。

Ejemplo: Yes, I did. I played the trumpet and joined the Brisbane Club during elementary and junior high school. I enjoyed performing with the group because it helped me improve my confidence.

Sugerencia: 時制と前置詞の使い方（"since childhood"）や語句の自然さを改善しましょう。感情を表す語は一語で自然に表現（"relaxed"や"stress-free"）し、理由と具体例を簡潔に繋げます。文を2〜3文にまとめ、冗長な"really"の多用を控えてください。

Ejemplo: Yes, I have. I have enjoyed singing since childhood. I often go to karaoke with friends and singing helps me feel relaxed and relieves stress.

Sugerencia: 文法（現在完了や現在形の使い分け）と語順の誤りを直しましょう。"all of my family"は不自然なので"my whole family"を使うと良いです。『何年も〜している』なら現在完了形（"have been playing"）を使い、活動の頻度や具体的な場面を一文でまとめてください。

Ejemplo: Yes, my whole family enjoys playing tennis. We have been playing for many years and often spend time together at the tennis courts, which we all find enjoyable.

× Today, yes I do, I'm really into cooking from when I start living alone I always screw my and search new dish and try to cook it.

✓ Yes, I do. I became really into cooking when I started living alone. I always search for new dishes and try to cook them; it helps me relax.

The original sentence has multiple tense and verb-form errors. 'from when I start living alone' should be past tense 'when I started living alone' because the action of starting living alone happened in the past (Present tense issue ID 6). 'I always screw my' is unclear and likely a wrong word; replaced with 'I always search for new dishes' and 'try to cook them' using correct plural and object forms (Singular and plural issue ID 1). 'It makes me relax' is acceptable but 'it helps me relax' is more natural. Suggestions: use past tense for past events, choose correct verbs, and match plural forms for 'dishes' and 'them'.

× Yes I did. I was really into playing instruments like the trumpet.

✓ Yes, I was. I was really into playing instruments, such as the trumpet.

Minor tense consistency and phrasing: 'Yes I did' is acceptable but 'Yes, I was' matches the following 'I was really into' for smoother coherence (Past tense issue ID 5). 'like the trumpet' is better phrased 'such as the trumpet'. Suggestion: keep tense consistent in short answers and use 'such as' for examples.

× I was a member of Brisbane Club when I was an elementary school and junior high school student.

✓ I was a member of the Brisbane Club when I was an elementary and junior high school student.

Missing definite article before a specific club name: 'the Brisbane Club' is needed (Article errors ID 22). Also 'an elementary school and junior high school student' is redundant; 'an elementary and junior high school student' is clearer. Suggestion: use articles with specific institutions and simplify parallel noun phrases.

× Playing it makes me.

✓ Playing it makes me happy.

The sentence lacks a complementation after 'makes me' (Sentence without a verb ID 23). 'Makes me' requires an adjective or phrase like 'happy' or 'feel good'. Suggestion: add an appropriate complement (e.g., 'happy' or 'feel relaxed').

× Yes I do, I really into singing from since childhood.

✓ Yes, I do. I've really been into singing since childhood.

Incorrect verb and preposition combination: 'really into' must follow a form of 'be' (e.g., 'I'm really into' or present perfect 'I've been really into') (Incorrect use of prepositions ID 11 and Present tense issue ID 6). 'from since childhood' is redundant; use 'since childhood'. Suggestion: use 'have been' + 'into' to indicate a continuing state from the past to present.

× I really like to go karaoke with my friends and sing a lot.

✓ I really like going to karaoke with my friends and singing a lot.

Verb pattern preference: 'like to go karaoke' is incorrect. Use 'going to karaoke' or 'going to karaoke bars' and include preposition 'to' (Incorrect use of prepositions ID 11). Also parallel verb forms require 'singing' to match 'going'. Suggestion: use 'like + -ing' or 'like to + infinitive' consistently and include 'to' before 'karaoke'.

× It makes me feel relieved, stress.

✓ It makes me feel relieved and less stressed.

Incorrect word choice and punctuation: 'relieved, stress' is ungrammatical. Use 'relieved' and the adjective 'stressed' with a modifier 'less' for contrast (Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs ID 13). Suggestion: combine ideas with 'and' and choose the correct adjective form 'stressed'.

× All of my family likes to play tennis.

✓ All of my family like to play tennis.

Subject-verb agreement with collective nouns can vary; here 'all of my family' functions as a plural group, so use 'like' not 'likes' (Verb in the present participle form ID 10 and Subject-verb agreement ID 27). Suggestion: use 'all of my family' + plural verb 'like' or rephrase 'My whole family likes to play tennis.' if treating family as singular.

× All of us play round tennis for many years and we often hang out at tennis courts do and enjoy it.

✓ We have been playing round-robin tennis for many years, and we often hang out at tennis courts and enjoy it.

Tense is incorrect: 'play ... for many years' requires present perfect progressive 'have been playing' to show an action continuing to the present (Present tense issue ID 6). 'round tennis' likely means 'round-robin tennis' or 'doubles'; corrected to 'round-robin tennis'. The phrase 'hang out at tennis courts do and enjoy it' contains extra 'do' and incorrect structure; remove 'do' and use 'and enjoy it'. Also added plural 'courts'. Suggestion: use present perfect continuous for actions continuing over time, remove extraneous words, and choose the correct tennis format term.