Hobby— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, use correct grammar and parallel structures, and avoid redundancy. Add one or two specific details (what you read, what painting style) and use linking words to connect ideas. Keep answers under five sentences.

Ejemplo: I have several hobbies, such as reading, painting and listening to music. For relaxation I usually read contemporary fiction because it helps me unwind and improves my vocabulary. I also enjoy painting watercolors at weekends, which relaxes me and lets me be creative.

Sugerencia: Begin with a direct answer, avoid confusion and long hesitations, and use clearer past-tense forms. Give a concise supporting detail about dancing as a child and connect ideas with linking words (e.g., "however", "so"). Correct repetition and filler words.

Ejemplo: I don't remember many specific hobbies from early childhood, but my family says I loved dancing. For example, whenever music played at home I would dance around the living room, and my parents often encouraged me to join local school performances.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and use correct tense and grammar. Reduce fillers (uh, umm), use linking words to show continuity ("so", "therefore"), and be specific about your current involvement (role, frequency). Keep it within five sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I have continued dancing since childhood. I used to dance at home whenever music played, and now I am a member of my college dance team, where we rehearse twice a week for performances.

Sugerencia: Start with a clear direct statement, use correct comparative structures and avoid repetitions. Give one specific contrast (what family members do and what you do), use linking words ("whereas", "however") and correct vocabulary ("into sports" not "away from me").

Ejemplo: No, my hobbies are different from my parents'. My mother and father both enjoy fitness and football, whereas I prefer reading and dance. For instance, they go to the gym most mornings, while I spend weekends reading novels or practicing choreography.

× Yes, of course I do have many hobbies like reading books, doing painting, going on a walk, listen to music.

✓ Yes, of course I have many hobbies like reading books, painting, going for walks, and listening to music.

The sentence contains incorrect gerund forms and parallelism issues. 'Doing painting' should be 'painting'; 'going on a walk' is more natural as 'going for walks'; 'listen to music' should be the gerund 'listening to music' to match the other hobby forms. Also remove the redundant auxiliary 'do' in 'I do have' for natural present simple: 'I have'. Ensure items in a list use parallel forms.

× In my leisure time I usually read books to relax myself and books gives me a pleasure and boost my vocab.

✓ In my leisure time I usually read books to relax, and books give me pleasure and boost my vocabulary.

Subject-verb agreement and word choice errors: 'books gives' is incorrect because plural subject 'books' requires 'give'. 'Relax myself' is unnatural; 'relax' suffices. 'A pleasure' is unnecessary; use 'pleasure'. 'vocab' is informal; use 'vocabulary'. Maintain present simple tense and correct subject-verb agreement.

× As I interpreted through the different stages of life, I didn't remember that I had any hobby, but my mother usually told me that you that I love to participate in dance.

✓ As I look back at different stages of my life, I don't remember having any hobby, but my mother often told me that I loved to dance.

Tense consistency and word choice: 'As I interpreted' is awkward; use 'look back'. 'I didn't remember that I had any hobby' should be 'I don't remember having any hobby' for present reflection, or use past 'I didn't remember' with consistent context. 'My mother usually told me that you that I love' is ungrammatical; correct to 'my mother often told me that I loved to dance.' Use past tense 'loved' for childhood habitual action reported by mother.

× And whenever I am at home, I just put on the music and I ask my mom or dad to put on the music and I Just Dance all the way in the home and.

✓ Whenever I am at home, I put on music and ask my mom or dad to play music, and I just dance all around the house.

Redundant phrases and odd capitalization: remove repeated 'put on the music' and trailing conjunction 'and.' 'Just Dance all the way in the home' is ungrammatical; use 'just dance all around the house.' Maintain simple present for habitual action and correct word order.

× Yes, I still carrying uh, the hobby from my childhood that is none other than the dancing like, and in my childhood age, usually I would ask my parents to put on the music.

✓ Yes, I am still carrying the hobby from my childhood, which is dancing, and when I was a child I would often ask my parents to play music.

Missing auxiliary verb: 'I still carrying' requires 'I am still carrying' or better 'I still have.' 'None other than the dancing like' is awkward; use 'which is dancing.' 'In my childhood age' should be 'when I was a child.' Use consistent past tense for childhood habits.

× I Just Dance all the way at my home and as umm, now I'm also the part of the dance team at my college, so I'm carrying.

✓ I just danced around my home, and now I'm also part of the dance team at my college, so I continue it.

Tense and phrasing: 'Just Dance' should be past or habitual 'dance/danced' depending on context; since speaking about past and present, split into 'I just danced around my home' (past habit) and 'now I'm also part of the dance team' (present). 'I'm carrying' is incomplete; replace with 'I continue it' or 'I still dance.' Ensure natural connectors and complete clauses.

× Not me but my mom and dad share the same same hobbies as my mother is gym freak and my father is too because he's a football player.

✓ Not me; my mom and dad share the same hobbies. My mother is a gym enthusiast and my father is too because he plays football.

Pronoun and redundancy issues: 'Not me but' is informal; use 'Not me;'. Repetition 'same same'. 'My mother is gym freak' needs an article and noun form: 'a gym enthusiast.' 'He's a football player' is acceptable but 'he plays football' is clearer. Separate into two sentences for clarity.

× But for me the sports and all this stuff is really away from me because I love to read the books, uh, dancing and all that's that.

✓ But sports and those activities are really far from me because I love reading books and dancing.

Preposition and word choice: 'away from me' is odd; use 'far from me.' 'The sports' should be 'sports' (no article). 'Read the books' should be 'read books' or 'reading books.' Remove filler phrases 'uh, and all that's that.' Ensure parallel gerund forms 'reading' and 'dancing.' Also fix subject-verb agreement: plural subject 'sports and those activities' require 'are'.

× This stuff and even my hobbies are way more different than my siblings as well.

✓ These things and even my hobbies are very different from my siblings'.

Incorrect comparative and quantifier: 'way more different than' is informal and ungrammatical; use 'very different from.' 'This stuff' -> 'these things.' Compare with 'different from' not 'different than.' Possessive needed for 'my siblings' to show comparison with their hobbies: 'my siblings' (possessive) or rephrase 'different from my siblings' hobbies.'