Hobby— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence naming your main hobbies, then give one brief specific detail or reason using a linking word (e.g., because, for example). Avoid vague phrases like “good essence.”

Ejemplo: I have a few hobbies, mainly playing sports and chess. For example, I play football twice a week because it keeps me fit, and I play chess to improve my concentration.

Sugerencia: Reduce fillers (uh) and be specific. Begin with a clear statement about your childhood hobby, then give one or two concrete examples and a reason or memory using a linking word (e.g., for instance, also).

Ejemplo: Yes, when I was a child I loved playing with my friends, especially hide-and-seek. For instance, we used to play every evening after school, and I also enjoyed making dolls at home.

Sugerencia: Be clearer and use simpler, correct phrasing. State directly whether you still have a childhood hobby and name it, then add a brief supporting detail using a linking word (e.g., however, in addition).

Ejemplo: I don't still do most of my childhood hobbies; however, reading has stayed with me. For example, I have enjoyed books since I was small and now I read novels every month.

Sugerencia: Avoid redundancy and grammar errors. Answer directly, then give a specific example of how you and your family share the hobby, using a linking word (e.g., and, so, because). Correct verb forms and keep it concise.

Ejemplo: Yes, my son and I both enjoy playing chess. We play together every weekend, and it helps us relax and improve our problem-solving skills.

× Hobbies are very important to keep the good essence in your life.

✓ Hobbies are very important for keeping a good quality of life.

The original uses an awkward noun phrase 'the good essence' and an incorrect verb construction 'to keep the good essence in your life.' Replace with a natural phrase 'for keeping a good quality of life.' Use the gerund 'keeping' after 'for' to express purpose; use 'a' before 'good quality' to form a proper noun phrase.

× I am fond of playing sports as well as playing chess.

✓ I am fond of playing sports as well as chess.

When listing activities after 'fond of,' using 'playing' twice is repetitive. Use 'playing sports as well as chess' or 'playing sports and chess.' Both activities share the gerund 'playing,' so omit the second 'playing' for conciseness.

× I can remember vividly. I had many hobbies, uh, I love playing with my friends the most and the game was hide and seek.

✓ I remember vividly. I had many hobbies. I loved playing with my friends the most, and the game was hide-and-seek.

Tense inconsistency: 'I can remember vividly' is acceptable but 'I had many hobbies, I love playing...' mixes past and present. Since referring to childhood, use past tense 'I loved.' Also split run-on sentence into separate sentences and hyphenate 'hide-and-seek.' Use past tense throughout when describing past habits.

× Apart from this many other things like going to a fair and uh making dolls were there.

✓ Apart from that, many other things, like going to fairs and making dolls, existed.

The phrase 'Apart from this' is unnatural when referring back to previous statement; 'Apart from that' is better. 'Going to a fair' should be pluralized to match 'many other things' or made generic 'going to fairs.' The placement of 'were there' is awkward; use 'existed' or rephrase more naturally. Also add commas for clarity.

× At present I am not having any kind of that hobby which I used to have in my toddler's day, and I think only reading is there which has come with me a long way.

✓ At present I do not have any of the hobbies I had in my toddler years, and I think only reading has stayed with me.

Incorrect verb form: 'I am not having' is unnatural in English; stative verbs like 'have' use simple present 'I do not have.' 'Any kind of that hobby' is awkward; use 'any of the hobbies I had.' 'Toddler's day' should be 'toddler years.' 'Only reading is there which has come with me a long way' is clumsy; 'reading has stayed with me' is concise and natural.

× Yes, my son and I, we both share the same hobby, uh, which is playing chess.

✓ Yes, my son and I both share the same hobby, which is playing chess.

Redundant pronoun 'we' creates awkward structure. Remove the extra subject to maintain correct subject-verb structure. The verb 'share' correctly agrees with the compound subject 'my son and I.'

× We enjoyed it also help us to relax mentally and to keep us imaginative.

✓ We enjoy it because it helps us relax mentally and keeps us imaginative.

Tense and conjunction issues: 'We enjoyed it' (past) conflicts with ongoing habit; use present 'We enjoy it.' 'also help us' lacks subject-verb agreement and connector. Use 'because it helps us' to connect clauses and ensure verbs agree: 'helps' and 'keeps.' Remove 'to' before 'relax' when using 'helps us relax.'