Hobby— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Clarify and correct word choice, reduce redundancy, and tighten structure. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid hesitations and repetition (e.g., "watching movies, watching YouTube videos"), and keep to 3–4 concise sentences. Use linking words (for example, "also" or "in addition") and more specific vocabulary (e.g., "self-help and motivational books," "educational YouTube channels").

Ejemplo: I have several hobbies. I particularly enjoy reading self-help and motivational books because they help me stay focused. In addition, I watch educational YouTube channels and movies for relaxation and to learn new ideas. I also like trying new recipes from the internet, especially quick healthy meals.

Sugerencia: Be concise and avoid repeating the same idea. Provide a clear topic sentence, then one or two specific supporting details with linking words (e.g., "because," "so"). Remove redundant phrases like "I would say yes" and repetitive "I developed my hobby."

Ejemplo: Yes. I loved dancing and singing as a child because my school regularly held singing and dancing competitions. As a result, I practiced often with friends and improved my skills, which made these activities long-term hobbies.

Sugerencia: Correct tense and smooth the sentence for naturalness. Start with a clear statement and add a brief specific detail about how you keep it now (frequency, style, or purpose). Keep to one or two sentences and use linking words if needed.

Ejemplo: Yes. Dancing has been my hobby since childhood, and I still practice regularly by taking online classes and attending local dance sessions on weekends.

Sugerencia: Make the answer more direct and reduce filler words. Use a clear topic sentence, then a specific example with a brief explanation of how you learned it. Replace vague phrases like "I believe yes" and "I feel" with firmer language.

Ejemplo: Yes, some of my hobbies overlap with my family's. For example, my mother loves cooking, and I learned many recipes by watching her in the kitchen, which inspired me to try new dishes myself.

× Yes, I have several office.

✓ Yes, I have several offices.

The noun 'office' should be plural when used with 'several'. Use plural form 'offices' to match the quantifier 'several'. Suggestion: use 'several offices' or rephrase to 'several hobbies' if you meant different meaning.

× I like reading books, especially self help and motivational one.

✓ I like reading books, especially self-help and motivational ones.

When describing 'books' (plural) the modifying nouns must be hyphenated compound adjectives and the head noun remains plural: 'self-help' and 'motivational' modify 'ones'. Use 'ones' to refer back to plural 'books'. Suggestion: hyphenate 'self-help' and use 'ones' for plural reference.

× Besides that I love watching movies, watching YouTube videos uh that are informative and educational.

✓ Besides that, I love watching movies and YouTube videos that are informative and educational.

The sentence has repetition and filler 'uh' and poor coordination. Combine parallel elements with 'and' and place the relative clause 'that are informative and educational' after the noun phrase it modifies ('YouTube videos'). Remove filler. Add a comma after the introductory phrase.

× I also like trying out new recipes from the Internet.

✓ I also like trying out new recipes on the Internet.

Use the preposition 'on' with 'the Internet' when referring to content found online. 'From the Internet' is not idiomatic for trying recipes; 'on the Internet' is preferred.

× I would say yes.

✓ I would say so.

This is stylistic: 'I would say yes' is not ungrammatical but in context 'I would say so' is more natural. No tense error; kept as suggestion.

× I loved dancing and singing when I was a child.

✓ I loved dancing and singing when I was a child.

This sentence is correct past tense; no correction necessary.

× Besides that, I loved playing games with my friends.

✓ Besides that, I loved playing games with my friends.

Sentence is correct in past tense; no correction necessary.

× I developed this hobby as a child because our school used to organize different singing and dancing competition.

✓ I developed this hobby as a child because our school used to organize different singing and dancing competitions.

The noun 'competition' should be plural ('competitions') to agree with 'different' and the plural activities. Use plural form to match the sense of multiple events.

× As a result, I was interested and I developed my hobby.

✓ As a result, I became interested and developed the hobby.

Use 'became interested' for a state change and avoid repeating 'I' by combining verbs. Use 'the hobby' to refer back to the previously mentioned hobby.

× Yes I did, dancing was my hobby since childhood and till today I enjoy dancing.

✓ Yes I did; dancing has been my hobby since childhood, and I still enjoy dancing today.

Combine tenses properly: use present perfect 'has been' for an action continuing from the past to the present. Use 'still' and 'today' for clarity and place clauses with proper punctuation.

× I believe yes because a few of my hobbies resonate with my family members.

✓ I believe so because a few of my hobbies resonate with my family members.

'Believe yes' is not idiomatic. Use 'believe so' to agree positively. Pronoun 'so' stands in for the previous clause.

× For instance, my mom really loves cooking, so do I.

✓ For instance, my mom really loves cooking, and so do I.

Add 'and' for smoother coordination. Sentence otherwise correct.

× I feel I have observed her since childhood and uh, I also acquired that hobby as a result of seeing her enjoying her hobby.

✓ I feel I have observed her since childhood, and I also acquired that hobby as a result of seeing her enjoy it.

Use 'enjoy' (bare infinitive) after 'seeing' in this causative/perception construction. Avoid repeating 'hobby' by using pronoun 'it'. Remove filler 'uh' and add comma for coordination.