Walking— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be direct with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and reduce repetition. Use one or two supporting details with linking words and accurate phrasing (e.g., "I don't walk much because my job is mostly desk-based; I only manage about 2,000 steps a day"). Avoid repeating words and check tense consistency.

Ejemplo: I don't walk much because my job is mainly desk-based. For example, when I worked at a hotel I usually only did about 2,000 steps a day, so I rarely had chances to walk long distances.

Sugerencia: Start with a clear past-tense topic sentence and give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (past tense: 'I was an indoor person', 'I stayed at home', 'read books or watched television') and avoid repetition.

Ejemplo: No, I wasn't very outdoorsy as a child. I was an indoor person, so I usually stayed at home reading books or watching television after school.

Sugerencia: Give a concise reason as a topic sentence, then add a clear supporting detail and use linking words. Fix grammar and word choice ('relaxing, peaceful atmosphere', 'make people feel safe and calm'). Finish the sentence fully and avoid filler.

Ejemplo: People like to walk in parks because of the relaxing and peaceful atmosphere. For example, the greenery and quiet paths help people feel safe and calm, which makes walking there more enjoyable than walking in busy streets.

Sugerencia: Use a clear conditional topic sentence and correct risky expressions ('would love to walk' instead of 'would die to'). Provide one supporting reason with correct grammar and linking words. Avoid fragmented phrases and verb errors.

Ejemplo: If I had the chance, I would love to take a long walk along the coastline because the sea breeze and views would help me relax and unwind.

Sugerencia: Answer directly with a past-tense topic sentence and give one specific detail. Correct time expressions (e.g., 'last Sunday'), name clarity, and avoid repetition. Finish the reason fully and keep sentences short and coherent.

Ejemplo: Last Sunday I went for a walk in a large shopping mall called 'Moon Square Culture'. My friend and I walked from level 1 to level 8 because we wanted to explore different shops and get some exercise.

× Not really, compared to the time I work.

✓ Not really, compared to the time I work, I don't walk much.

The original sentence has incorrect present tense usage and unclear meaning. 'Compared to the time I work' needs a main clause describing walking frequency. Use present simple 'I don't walk much' to match habitual action. Suggestion: restructure sentence so the comparative phrase attaches to a clear main clause.

× I was working in hotel.

✓ I worked in a hotel.

The student used past continuous 'was working' without context; simple past 'worked' is correct for a past job. Also the noun needs an article: 'a hotel.' Use simple past for completed past states or jobs.

× I only work around maybe 2000 steps per day so I I don't think I work a lot as I always sit in front of desk.

✓ I only walk about 2,000 steps per day, so I don't think I walk a lot because I always sit in front of a desk.

Multiple issues: 'work' is incorrect verb choice for taking steps—use 'walk.' Use present simple 'walk' for habitual actions. Add article 'a desk.' Use 'about' instead of 'around maybe' and proper number formatting '2,000.' Remove duplicate 'I.' Replace 'as' with 'because' for clarity.

× Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

✓ Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

This sentence is correct; it uses past simple question form appropriately. No change needed.

× To be honest, no. I am more indoor person so most so most of the time when I was a child I stayed in my home and just read book or watch television.

✓ To be honest, no. I am more of an indoor person, so most of the time when I was a child I stayed at home and just read books or watched television.

Several tense and article issues: add 'of' in 'more of an indoor person.' Remove duplicate 'so most.' Use 'stayed at home' (preposition 'at'), plural 'books,' and past simple 'watched' to match 'when I was a child.' Maintain consistent past tense.

× I think it's because there is a relaxing and quiet atmosphere make me people feel safer and peace peaceful so that's why people choose their to walk instead of.

✓ I think it's because a relaxing and quiet atmosphere makes people feel safer and more peaceful, so that's why people choose to walk there instead.

Pronoun and verb agreement errors: use 'a relaxing and quiet atmosphere' (no 'there is' needed), singular subject requires 'makes.' Remove 'me' and use 'people.' Use 'more peaceful' instead of 'peace peaceful.' Correct word order: 'choose to walk there.' Ensure sentence is complete.

× Well, let me think, if I had time I would die to work near by the coastline because I think it's would make me feel relaxed and unwind.

✓ Well, let me think. If I had time, I would love to work near the coastline because I think it would help me relax and unwind.

Multiple errors: 'die to' is incorrect; use 'would love to.' 'Near by' should be 'near' or 'nearby.' Remove extra 'it's' and use 'it would' with 'help me relax and unwind.' Use conditional structure: 'If I had time, I would...'. Tense and verb choice fixed.

× Where did you go for a walk lately?

✓ Where did you go for a walk recently?

Using 'lately' with past simple is acceptable, but 'recently' is more natural in questions about past events. No major tense change required; this is a stylistic suggestion.

× I'd say shopping mall.

✓ I'd say a shopping mall.

Missing article 'a' before 'shopping mall.' The contraction 'I'd say' is fine; add article to complete noun phrase.

× Next Sunday I went a big shopping mall called Mom Should die in Culture and my friend and I walked, worked worked there from level 1 to level 8 because the.

✓ Last Sunday I went to a big shopping mall called Mom's House in Culture, and my friend and I walked around there from level 1 to level 8.

Many errors: 'Next Sunday' is wrong for a past event—use 'Last Sunday.' Add preposition 'to' after 'went.' Correct name likely 'Mom's House' not 'Mom Should die'; use apostrophe. Remove repeated 'worked' and use 'walked around.' Remove trailing 'because the.' Use past simple for completed actions.