Walking— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence that answers directly, then give one or two specific reasons using correct vocabulary and grammar. Avoid redundancies and incorrect phrases like “under the flop.” Use linking words (e.g., because, so) correctly.

Ejemplo: Not really. I don’t walk much because there are few pedestrian areas and the infrastructure is poor, so I usually use a motorbike or car to get around.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and use past tense consistently. Keep it concise and correct word choice (e.g., “far fewer” not “far more far less”). Provide one clear reason and a short supporting detail.

Ejemplo: Not really. When I was a child there were far fewer sidewalks, so my family usually traveled by motorcycle rather than walking.

Sugerencia: Begin with a direct topic sentence, then add two specific reasons with clearer vocabulary. Replace informal phrases like “vibes” and check singular/plural (greenery). Use linking words such as “and” or “because.”

Ejemplo: People like walking in parks because it is good for their health and helps them relax. Also, parks have lots of trees and fresh air, which makes the atmosphere pleasant.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and correct grammar and word choice. Avoid repetitions and unclear negatives ("that's obviously not in Indonesia"). Give a brief reason why you chose the place and one specific detail about what you would like to experience.

Ejemplo: I would like to take a long walk in Japan because of its beautiful parks and clean streets. I would enjoy walking in places like Kyoto to see temples and cherry blossoms.

Sugerencia: Provide a clear, direct answer in the past tense and avoid irrelevant information. Remove repetitions and correct word choice (working vs walking). Give one specific detail about where and what you saw or did.

Ejemplo: I went for a walk in my neighborhood last weekend. I walked along the main street and around the small park near my house.

× Well I don't work much in my city, especially because here the pedestrians areas are scarce and the infrastructure overall is still under the flop, so I usually rely more on motorbikes or cars.

✓ Well, I don't walk much in my city, especially because the pedestrian areas here are scarce and the infrastructure overall is still poor, so I usually rely more on motorbikes or cars.

Problems: incorrect article use with 'pedestrians areas' (should be 'the pedestrian areas' or 'pedestrian areas'); wrong noun form 'pedestrians' as adjective; awkward phrasing 'don't work much' vs context asking about walking so 'don't walk much' is correct; 'under the flop' is incorrect collocation and should be 'poor' or 'underdeveloped'. Suggestion: use 'the' for specific areas, use noun modifiers without plural 'pedestrian areas', choose appropriate adjective 'poor' or 'underdeveloped', and match verb to context ('walk' not 'work').

× Not really. Again. Back then pedestrian areas are far more far less than now, so we rely more on motorcycles with my parents.

✓ Not really. Back then pedestrian areas were far fewer than they are now, so we relied more on motorcycles with my parents.

Problems: tense mismatch — 'are' should be past 'were' to match 'back then'; 'far more far less' is contradictory and incorrect; quantifier 'fewer' is required for countable 'areas' instead of 'less'; pronoun and verb agreement: 'we rely' should be past 'we relied'. Suggestion: use past tense consistently, use 'fewer' for countable nouns, and avoid contradictory modifiers.

× Well, I think because walking is not only good for health but also feels very refreshing, especially in parks. There are a lot of greeneries so the vibes is kind of warm I think.

✓ Well, I think walking is not only good for your health but also very refreshing, especially in parks. There is a lot of greenery, so the atmosphere feels warm, I think.

Problems: article and noun collocation — 'good for health' needs 'your health'; 'greeneries' is not standard — use 'greenery' (uncountable) or 'green spaces'; 'a lot of greenery' requires singular 'is'; 'vibes' is informal and 'the atmosphere' is more appropriate; verb agreement with uncountable noun. Suggestion: use correct collocations, choose uncountable 'greenery', and adjust verb agreement and register for clarity.

× Well, that's obviously not in Indonesia. If I could have, if I had a change, then I would like to go to Japan and experience walking there.

✓ Well, that's obviously not in Indonesia. If I could, if I had the chance, I would like to go to Japan and experience walking there.

Problems: unnecessary 'have' after 'could'; 'change' is a typo — should be 'chance'; conditional phrasing 'If I could, if I had the chance, I would...' is correct for hypothetical future. Suggestion: remove extra words, correct typos, and use standard second conditional for hypothetical desire.

× Well, I don't think I've been working lately, but the the latest walk is probably in probably around my neighborhood.

✓ Well, I don't think I've been walking much lately, but my most recent walk was probably around my neighborhood.

Problems: 'been working' mismatches context — should be 'been walking'; duplicated 'the the' and repeated 'probably'; 'the latest walk is' should be 'my most recent walk was' to refer to a past event; tense consistency — present perfect for recent experience then simple past for the specific most recent occasion. Suggestion: use correct verb ('walk'), remove duplicates, choose 'most recent' and match tense appropriately.