Walking— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Cevap net bir fikir veriyor fakat dilbilgisi hataları ve akıcılık eksikliği var. Cümle yapısını düzeltin (ör. doğru fiil çekimleri, edatlar) ve gereksiz tekrarları çıkarın. Ayrıca kısa bir konu cümlesiyle başlayıp 1-2 destekleyici detay verin. Bağlaç kullanarak neden yürümeyi sevdiğinizi ve nerede yürüdüğünüzü bağlayın.

Ejemplo: Yes, I walk a lot. I usually walk along the seaside because I find the fresh air relaxing, and I believe walking is very beneficial for my health.

Sugerencia: Geçmiş zamanı doğru kullanma üzerinde çalışın (simple past). Tekrarlardan kaçının ve daha spesifik detay verin (kimle, nerede, ne sıklıkla). Cümleyi konu cümlesiyle başlatıp bir veya iki destekleyici cümle ekleyin; uygun bağlantı sözcükleri kullanın.

Ejemplo: Yes, I did. When I was a child I often walked to school and played outside with my neighbors, so I spent a lot of time outdoors every day.

Sugerencia: Cevabınız sebep sunuyor ama düzensiz ve belirsiz. Daha açık ve düzenli bir konu cümlesi kurun ve nedenleri mantıklı bir sırayla verin. Gereksiz dolgu kelimelerinden kaçının ve örnek veya sonuç ekleyin.

Ejemplo: People like walking in parks because they are safe and peaceful places, especially for families with children, and parks usually have pleasant paths and greenery.

Sugerencia: Gayet iyi bir hayal ve neden belirtiyorsunuz; fakat ifadenizi daha doğal hale getirmek için 'Northern Lights' terimini ve kısa bir gerekçe ekleyin. Cümleleri biraz daha akıcı bağlaçlarla birleştirin.

Ejemplo: If I had the chance, I would like to walk under the Northern Lights because I've dreamed about seeing them since childhood, and I think it would be an unforgettable experience.

Sugerencia: Cümleleri daha doğal bağlayın ve zamanları doğru kullanın (simple past for 'last time'). Ayrıca yer isimleri açık ve tutarlı olmalı; kısa ek detay verin (ne kadar sürdü, ne hissettiniz).

Ejemplo: I live close to the seaside, so I often walk there. Last time I walked from Boston to Kaduke, and it took about an hour; I enjoyed the sea views the whole way.

× Actually, I walk as much as I humanly can because I love walk on the seaside or the other way and I believe that it is a great help to my body.

✓ Actually, I walk as much as I humanly can because I love walking on the seaside or along the shore and I believe that it is a great help to my body.

The verb 'love' should be followed by the -ing form 'walking' when describing general preferences. Also 'walk on the seaside' is unnatural; use 'walking on the seaside' or 'walking along the shore'. Suggestion: use 'love walking' + a natural prepositional phrase like 'on the seaside' or 'along the shore'. Grammar problem type ID: 8

× When I was child, I always have a walk at that time because we were going to school or we were playing with my neighbor neighborhood at the outside.

✓ When I was a child, I always went for a walk because we were going to school or we were playing with my neighbors outside.

Missing article: 'a child' requires the indefinite article 'a'. Tense inconsistency: use past tense 'went' and 'were playing' is acceptable but 'have a walk' is incorrect in past narrative. 'Neighbor neighborhood' is wrong; use 'neighbors' (plural noun for people who live nearby). Use 'outside' rather than 'at the outside'. Suggestions: add 'a' before 'child', make verbs consistently past, use 'went for a walk' and 'neighbors outside'. Grammar problem type ID: 22

× Because the park area is safety area for whole people or for children, uh, but some people don't, uh, might live, uh, on the seaside or near the seaside. Uh, it can be.

✓ Because the park is a safe area for everyone, especially children, but some people may not live near the seaside.

Wrong word forms: 'safety area' should be 'safe area' (adjective). 'Whole people' is incorrect; use 'everyone' or 'all people'. 'don't, might live' is conflicting modal/negation; choose 'may not' or 'do not'. Suggestion: use adjective 'safe', 'everyone' and a single correct modal like 'may not live near the seaside'. Grammar problem type ID: 13

× If I had the chance, I would like to walk under the North light because it is my childhood dream and one day I believe that I will do that.

✓ If I had the chance, I would like to walk under the Northern Lights because it is my childhood dream and I believe that one day I will do it.

Incorrect preposition/collocation: 'under the North light' should be 'under the Northern Lights' (established phrase). 'one day I believe that I will do that' is awkward; 'I believe that one day I will do it' is more natural. Suggestion: use the correct noun phrase 'Northern Lights' and natural word order for the belief clause. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× Actually, I live close to Seaside. Because of that I usually walk by Seaside. At the last time I walked from Boston to Kaduke.

✓ Actually, I live close to the seaside. Because of that, I usually walk by the seaside. Last time I walked from Boston to Kaduke.

Article and capitalization: 'Seaside' is a common noun here and needs 'the' and lowercase ('the seaside'). 'At the last time' is unidiomatic; use 'Last time' or 'On my last walk'. Also add comma after 'Because of that'. Tense 'walked' is fine for the past event. Suggestion: use 'the seaside' consistently and natural time phrase 'Last time'. Grammar problem type ID: 6}]}