Walking— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and coherent: start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, avoid filler words (uh, um), correct grammar (use 'walk' not 'work'), and give one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words (for example, because) correctly.

Ejemplo: Yes, I walk a lot. I usually walk for about half an hour after getting off the bus because there is no direct bus to my workplace, so walking is the easiest option. For example, I walk every morning and evening to reach my office.

Sugerencia: Give a clear past-tense topic sentence and more specific supporting details. Avoid vague phrases like 'childhood stage' and incorrect word choices ('benefits of working' should be 'benefits of walking'). Use linking words such as 'because' or 'so' correctly to connect ideas.

Ejemplo: Yes, I often walked when I was a child. My grandfather, who served in the army, encouraged me to exercise every day, so I would walk to visit friends and play outside regularly.

Sugerencia: Organize the answer with a clear main reason and two specific supporting details. Reduce hesitation and use precise vocabulary (e.g., 'trees produce oxygen', 'fresh air', 'open space', 'flowers'). Use linking words like 'for example' or 'also'.

Ejemplo: People like walking in parks because the environment is pleasant. For example, trees produce oxygen and flowers make the air smell fresh, and there is plenty of open space where people can walk without traffic.

Sugerencia: Answer directly with a clear conditional sentence and one or two concrete reasons why you would choose that place. Avoid repetition and filler words; use past or present correctly when referring to observations. Provide a concise example describing what you saw.

Ejemplo: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk in Gaze Park, which is about half an hour from my home. I recently saw new flowerbeds there from the bus, so I would like to walk there to enjoy the different flowers and peaceful paths.

Sugerencia: Give a clear past-tense answer naming the place and time, then add one concise reason with specific details. Remove filler words and correct grammar ('I prefer to go' → 'I went' or 'I like to go'). Finish the sentence to avoid trailing off.

Ejemplo: Lately I went to the small park near my home. For example, yesterday I returned from work at 8:00 PM and walked there because it was quiet and peaceful, which helped me relax.

× Definitely I work a lot on a daily basis because, uh, after, uh, getting off from the bus, about 1/2 an hour, I have to walk, uh, then I then I reach, reach at my work. For example, I am prefer walking because, uh, there is a no bus facility because the, uh, my work is uh, like.

✓ Definitely I walk a lot on a daily basis because after getting off the bus I have to walk for about half an hour to reach my work. For example, I prefer walking because there is no bus service to my workplace.

The student used inappropriate present-tense verbs and awkward phrasing. Use simple present 'walk' for habitual actions (I walk a lot). 'Getting off from the bus' should be 'getting off the bus'. Time duration is 'for about half an hour'. 'I then I reach, reach at my work' is ungrammatical; use 'to reach my work' or 'to reach my workplace'. 'I am prefer' incorrectly uses 'am' with the base verb; use 'I prefer'. 'No bus facility' is unnatural; use 'no bus service' or 'no bus to my workplace'. Suggestions: use simple sentences, avoid redundant words, and place time/duration phrases correctly.

× I remember I went outside on a daily basis when I was at childhood stage. For example, my grandfather was in army at that time and they told me the benefits of working. So that's why I preferred walking from that day to still now.

✓ I remember I went outside every day when I was a child. For example, my grandfather was in the army at that time and he told me the benefits of walking. That's why I have preferred walking from then until now.

The student mixed past simple and incorrect phrases. Use 'when I was a child' instead of 'at childhood stage'. 'Was in army' needs the article: 'was in the army'. 'They told me' is unclear; use 'he told me' for grandfather. 'Benefits of working' should be 'benefits of walking'. To show a habit that started in the past and continues now, use present perfect 'have preferred'. Suggestions: choose correct past nouns and articles, and use present perfect for actions continuing to present.

× According to me, people prefer to walk in parks because, uh, there is a lot of trees, uh, which, uh, give the oxygen to people. Uh, for example, in the park, there are, there is a fresh air because there is a flowers as well as there is a, uh, huge space to walk.

✓ In my opinion, people prefer to walk in parks because there are a lot of trees that provide oxygen. For example, in the park there is fresh air, flowers, and a huge space to walk.

Errors include article and count noun usage: 'there is a lot of trees' should be 'there are a lot of trees' (plural subject requires 'are'). 'Give the oxygen to people' is unnatural; 'provide oxygen' is correct. 'There is a fresh air' should be 'there is fresh air' (uncountable, no article). 'There is a flowers' should be 'there are flowers'. Also streamline 'According to me' to 'In my opinion'. Suggestions: match singular/plural with 'is/are', use articles with countable/uncountable nouns correctly, and prefer concise expressions.

× I would say I will go to the gaze park, uh, which is around half an hour from my home. Uh, for example, uh, uh, yesterday I was, uh, traveling in the bus at that time I saw nowadays, uh, uh, there is a lot of, uh, new flowers like, which are different.

✓ I would say I would go to Gaze Park, which is about half an hour from my home. For example, yesterday when I was traveling by bus I saw many new flowers that looked different.

The sentence mixes conditional/modal forms and awkward time references. After 'I would say' it's more consistent to use 'I would go' for a hypothetical. 'I will go' is a definite future and clashes with hypothetical phrasing. 'Traveling in the bus' should be 'traveling by bus'. 'At that time I saw nowadays' is contradictory; remove 'nowadays' and use 'yesterday I saw many new flowers'. 'There is a lot of new flowers' needs plural agreement: 'there were many new flowers' or 'I saw many new flowers'. Suggestions: keep tense consistent, use 'by bus', and match 'there is/are' to singular/plural.

× Uh, mostly when I prefer to late walk at that time, I just, uh, prefer to visit, uh, the park, which is very near to my home. For example, yesterday I came back from my work at 8:00 PM. At that time, I prefer to go that park. At that time, I feel very relaxed because there is no one. So I.

✓ Mostly when I go for a late walk, I prefer to visit the park that is very near my home. For example, yesterday I came back from work at 8:00 PM and I went to that park. At that time, I felt very relaxed because there was no one there.

The student uses incorrect verb forms and present tense where past is needed. 'When I prefer to late walk' is ungrammatical; use 'when I go for a late walk'. 'I prefer to visit the park, which is very near to my home' should be 'near my home' (omit 'to'). 'Yesterday... I prefer to go that park' should be past tense 'I went to that park'. 'I feel very relaxed' should be 'I felt very relaxed' to match past narrative. 'There is no one' should be 'there was no one there'. Suggestions: use 'go for a walk', match verb tenses to the time reference, and place adverbial phrases naturally.