Walking— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 문장 구조와 어휘 선택을 더 자연스럽게 다듬으세요. 구체적으로는 ‘work every day to commute to school’는 의미가 불분명하므로 ‘walk to school every day’로 고치고, 불필요한 중복(‘taking public station transport’)을 ‘public transport’로 간결하게 표현하세요. 또한 ‘umm’ 같은 말버릇을 줄이고 이유를 연결할 때 연결어(for/to)와 결과를 자연스럽게 사용하세요.

Ejemplo: Yes, I walk to school every day. I prefer walking for short distances rather than taking public transport because it is good exercise and helps me clear my mind before classes.

Sugerencia: 과거 습관을 말할 때 ‘used to’는 적절하지만 동사 선택과 철자를 정확히 하세요(‘work’→‘walk’, ‘store’→‘stroll’). 또한 한두 개의 문장으로 직접 답을 주고 이유(대화 기회 등)를 연결어로 명확히 설명하세요.

Ejemplo: Yes, I used to walk with my family every evening. We would stroll around the neighborhood for about half an hour, and it was a great chance to talk with my father about our day.

Sugerencia: 문법과 단어 형태(‘landscapes’→‘landscape’, ‘makes’→‘make’, ‘unwind’→‘feel more relaxed’)를 고치세요. 또한 이유를 두 부분으로 나누어 연결어(‘because’, ‘so’, ‘which’)를 사용해 더 자연스럽게 설명하세요.

Ejemplo: I think people like walking in parks because the natural landscape helps them feel more relaxed and relieved from the stress of busy city life.

Sugerencia: 지명과 표현을 정확히 하세요(‘Hangung’→‘Hong Kong’). ‘composition of Hong Kong's like…’ 같은 표현 대신 ‘the combination of’ 또는 ‘the mix of’로 자연스럽게 연결하세요. 또한 목적과 이유를 간결히 정리해 하나 또는 두 문장으로 말하세요.

Ejemplo: I would love to take a long walk in Hong Kong because the combination of city views and natural scenery would help me relieve stress from busy school life.

Sugerencia: 시제와 동사 형태를 정확히 사용하세요(‘Last morning I walk’→‘This morning I walked’). 문장을 간결하게 나누고 이유(거리, 편리함, 소요 시간)를 논리적으로 연결어로 정리하세요. 숫자와 시간 표현은 간결하게 말하세요.

Ejemplo: This morning I walked to school because it's a short distance and more convenient than taking the bus; it only took about ten minutes.

× Yes, I work every day to commute to school and I prefer walking to taking public station transport for short distance because umm, it's good exercise.

✓ Yes, I walk every day to commute to school, and I prefer walking to taking public transport for short distances because it's good exercise.

The student used 'work' incorrectly instead of 'walk' (vocabulary error but affects tense/verb choice) and 'public station transport' is awkward; 'public transport' is correct. 'Short distance' needs plural 'short distances' for general statements. Add a comma before 'and' for sentence clarity. Improve by using correct verbs and plural when speaking generally.

× Yes, I used to work with my family every evening and we usually store around our neighborhood for about half an hour and it was a great chance to talk with my father about our day.

✓ Yes, I used to walk with my family every evening, and we usually strolled around our neighborhood for about half an hour. It was a great chance to talk with my father about our day.

The student used 'work' and 'store' incorrectly; the intended past habitual action requires 'used to walk' and 'strolled' (past tense). Split into two sentences for clarity. Use 'stroll' (past 'strolled') for walking leisurely. Ensure past tense consistency for habitual past actions.

× I think people like walking in park because the nature landscapes makes people more unwind and relieve stress of busy city life.

✓ I think people like walking in parks because natural landscapes make people more relaxed and help relieve the stress of busy city life.

Use plural 'parks' for general statements and 'natural landscapes' instead of 'the nature landscapes'. 'Makes' should be 'make' to agree with plural subject 'landscapes'. 'More unwind' is ungrammatical; use 'more relaxed'. Add 'help' before 'relieve' for parallel structure. These changes fix article, agreement, adjective/adverb errors.

× I would love to take a long walk to Hangung because composition of Hong Kong's like the city view plus nature landscape will help me to get rid of my stress from the busy school life.

✓ I would love to take a long walk in Hong Kong because the combination of Hong Kong's city views and natural landscapes would help me get rid of my stress from busy school life.

Use 'in Hong Kong' not 'to' for where you would walk. 'Composition of Hong Kong's like' is incorrect; use 'the combination of Hong Kong's city views and natural landscapes'. Use plural 'views/landscapes'. 'Would help me get rid of' is more natural (remove 'to' before 'get rid of'). These fix preposition and word choice errors.

× Last morning I walk to the school because the distance is very short and it more convenient than taking the bus and only take about like 10 minutes.

✓ Yesterday morning I walked to school because the distance was very short and it was more convenient than taking the bus; it only took about ten minutes.

Use past tense 'walked' for an action that happened in the past ('yesterday morning' rather than 'last morning'). Remove the definite article before 'school' in general expressions: 'walked to school'. Ensure past tense consistency: 'was' and 'took'. Replace 'only take about like 10 minutes' with 'it only took about ten minutes' and avoid filler 'like'.