Walking— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific details with a linking word. Avoid grammatical errors (use gerunds correctly) and repeat words less.

Ejemplo: Not really. I don’t walk much because I prefer running and gym workouts; for example, I run three times a week and go to the gym twice to stay fit.

Sugerencia: Provide a clear topic sentence, then add specific details and correct grammar. Use linking words (e.g., because, so) but avoid repeating 'used to' too much and correct word choice (surrounding → around).

Ejemplo: Yes, I often walked outside as a child because my grandfather loved strolling around the village, so I would join him almost every weekend and explore the nearby fields.

Sugerencia: Clarify your main idea and use appropriate vocabulary. Start with a concise topic sentence, then give two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid filler words and incorrect phrases (e.g., ‘feel that most fear’, ‘too much in the parts’).

Ejemplo: People like walking in parks because they can enjoy greenery and fresh air; for instance, after spending time in concrete buildings, many city residents visit parks to relax and breathe cleaner air.

Sugerencia: Be specific and use correct tense and vocabulary. Give a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting reasons. Avoid vague or awkward phrases (e.g., 'vast for if you want to take a good look about around').

Ejemplo: If I could take a long walk, I would choose the trails near Mount Everest because I enjoy spectacular mountain views and the peaceful high-altitude environment, which would be unforgettable.

Sugerencia: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence and then add concise details. Use correct sentence structure and reduce fillers. Mention a specific recent example and time frame.

Ejemplo: I haven’t been walking regularly lately, but recently I walked to the nearby grocery store to buy a few items; it’s only a five-minute walk from my house and I went last Saturday.

× Sometimes I do running and I do gym exercises, but I do not walk too much.

✓ Sometimes I run and do gym exercises, but I do not walk much.

Use of 'do' with gerund 'running' is incorrect. In English we say 'run' (simple verb) or 'do running' is not natural. Also 'do not walk too much' is wordy; 'do not walk much' is correct. Replace 'do running' with 'run' and remove unnecessary 'do' before 'gym exercises'.

× I used to go with my grandparents because my grandpa's very like to go for a walking around the village.

✓ I used to go with my grandparents because my grandpa really liked to go for walks around the village.

'Grandpa's very like' is ungrammatical. Need past tense 'liked' to match 'used to'. Also 'go for a walking' is incorrect: use the plural noun 'walks' or the verb phrase 'go walking'. Changed 'very like' to 'really liked' and 'a walking' to 'walks'.

× So I used to go with him surrounding my village.

✓ So I used to go with him around the village.

'Surrounding my village' is improperly used; it makes the subject unclear. Use the prepositional phrase 'around the village' to indicate where they walked. Also match past habitual 'used to'.

× I think the, they want to feel that most fear.

✓ I think they want to feel peacefulness or to relax.

Original phrase is unclear and uses incorrect words ('most fear') that do not fit context. Replace with appropriate noun or infinitive phrase describing the purpose of walking in parks: 'feel peaceful' or 'relax'.

× They want to feel like, uh, the greenery, which is I think too much in the parts.

✓ They want to enjoy the greenery, which I think is abundant in parks.

'The greenery' is acceptable but sentence structure and article 'the' before 'parts' is wrong; 'parts' should be 'parks'. Also 'too much' is awkward; 'abundant' is better. Reword to 'enjoy the greenery' and correct 'parts' to 'parks'.

× Nowadays people have a concrete houses, so I think they prefer to go to a park and take some good air fresh.

✓ Nowadays people live in concrete houses, so I think they prefer to go to a park to get some fresh air.

'Have a concrete houses' has number and article errors and wrong verb: use 'live in concrete houses'. 'Take some good air fresh' is incorrect word order and word choice; correct phrase is 'get some fresh air'.

× If I have a chance to walk somewhere, I would say, uh, it is going to be a Mount Everest.

✓ If I had a chance to walk somewhere, I would say it would be Mount Everest.

The conditional sentence mixes present and conditional incorrectly. For a hypothetical, use past tense in the if-clause ('If I had a chance') and 'would' in the main clause. Also 'it is going to be a Mount Everest' is unnatural; 'it would be Mount Everest' is correct.

× I like to watch all the views from the peaks.

✓ I would like to see the views from the summit.

'Watch all the views' is awkward; use 'see the views' or 'enjoy the views'. 'Peaks' plural is possible but 'the summit' or 'the peak' fits better when referring to Mount Everest. Also 'would like' matches hypothetical.

× So I think Mount Everest is a vast for if you want to take a good look about around the surroundings.

✓ So I think Mount Everest is a great place if you want to get a good view of the surroundings.

Original has incorrect structure and word choices: 'a vast for' is ungrammatical. Replace with 'a great place' and use 'get a good view of the surroundings' to express the intended meaning.

× If I have a chance to walk somewhere, I would say, uh, it is going to be a Mount Everest. I like to watch all the views from the peaks.

✓ If I had the chance to walk somewhere, I would choose Mount Everest. I would like to see the views from the summit.

Combined correction: ensure conditional tense consistency ('If I had... I would...') and use polite phrasing 'would like'. Use 'choose Mount Everest' and 'see the views' for natural expression.

× Where did you go for a walk lately? Like I do not go for a walk almost like for a daily routine whenever I sometimes I do so I go for like a grocery.

✓ Lately I have not been going for walks regularly. Sometimes I walk to the grocery store.

Question asks past activity; 'lately' suggests present perfect. Original mixes tenses and has redundant phrasing. Use present perfect 'have not been going' or simple present for habits. Simplify to 'Sometimes I walk to the grocery store.'

× The grocery store is a very near to my house so if I have to do pick up some like a little stuff so I go for some work and do my grocery as well.

✓ The grocery store is very near my house, so if I need to pick up a few items I go there to do my shopping.

Remove incorrect article 'a' before 'near', use 'near my house'. 'Have to do pick up' is incorrect; use 'need to pick up'. 'A little stuff' should be 'a few items'. 'Go for some work and do my grocery' is unnatural; use 'go there to do my shopping'.