Walking— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid fillers (uh, um) and repetitions. Correct verb forms and prepositions (e.g. “the place where I work,” “I prefer walking to taking…”).

Ejemplo: Yes, I walk a lot because my workplace is only about a 20-minute walk from home. Moreover, the route is peaceful, so I prefer walking to taking the bus or cycling since it helps me relax and get light exercise.

Sugerencia: Provide a clear topic sentence and one specific detail or short example. Fix grammar and awkward phrases (e.g. “my mom used to take me for a walk every evening”). Use a linking word to connect reason and result.

Ejemplo: Yes. My mother used to take me for a walk every evening when I was a child. As a result, I got regular exercise and felt relaxed before bedtime.

Sugerencia: Give a concise topic sentence followed by two clear, specific reasons linked with words like ‘first’ and ‘second’. Avoid vague language and repetition. Use correct collocations (e.g. “surrounded by plants” → “have plenty of greenery”).

Ejemplo: People enjoy walking in parks for two main reasons. First, parks offer a social space where people can meet and chat with others. Second, parks have lots of greenery, so walkers can enjoy fresh air and a pleasant natural environment.

Sugerencia: This answer is quite good—clear and descriptive. Improve slightly by correcting small phrasing errors and linking ideas smoothly (e.g. ‘at sunrise’ not ‘traffic at the sunrise’), and keep it to two sentences max.

Ejemplo: I would love to walk along the coastline of a quiet seaside town at sunrise. The fresh sea breeze, the sound of waves, and the wide open horizon would help me relax and think clearly.

Sugerencia: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then add one brief reason. Correct tense and phrasing (e.g. “the only walking I do is my commute to work”); avoid repeating words and awkward constructions.

Ejemplo: Lately I have only walked to work, which is about 20 minutes from my home. I don't have much free time for other walks because I stand at work all day.

× Yes, I do a lot of walking in my daily life as the place where I'm working, it's just like 20 minutes away from my home.

✓ Yes, I do a lot of walking in my daily life because the place where I work is about 20 minutes from my home.

Original sentence used an incorrect clause 'the place where I'm working' and awkward punctuation with a comma splice. Use simple present 'where I work' for habitual situations and replace the comma splice with 'because' to join clauses correctly. Also 'about' is more natural than 'just like' for distance. ID:10

× So I have, I just use, uh, walking instead of just taking a bus or riding a bicycle because the place where I belong to is kind of very peaceful.

✓ So I just walk instead of taking a bus or riding a bicycle because the area where I live is quite peaceful.

Problems: redundant fillers and incorrect phrase 'the place where I belong to'. Simplify by saying 'I just walk'. Use 'the area where I live' instead of 'belong to'. Avoid double comparatives like 'kind of very'; use 'quite' or 'very'. ID:26

× So I'm usually prefer walking instead of taking in in the thing.

✓ So I usually prefer walking instead of taking other transport.

Errors: incorrect auxiliary 'I'm usually prefer' should be 'I usually prefer' (remove 'am') and wrong preposition/repetition 'taking in in the thing'. Replace with 'taking other transport' or 'taking a bus'. Keep simple structure for preference expressions. ID:27

× Yes, I remember when I was just a child, my mom, she used to take me walk every evening.

✓ Yes, I remember that when I was a child, my mom used to take me for a walk every evening.

Problems: unnecessary comma and pronoun 'she' creates redundancy; missing preposition 'for' in 'take me for a walk'. Use 'that when I was a child' for clarity and 'used to' for habitual past. ID:12

× So I can just get some good exercise in my mom too.

✓ So I could get some good exercise with my mom too.

Original sentence incorrectly uses 'in my mom'; correct preposition is 'with' to indicate companion. Also 'can' vs 'could' — since describing past habitual, 'could' or 'was able to' fits better. Keep 'with my mom' to show she accompanied the walks. ID:13

× And it's just like kind of good way of getting relaxed.

✓ And it was a good way to relax.

Awkward collocations 'just like kind of' should be removed. Use past tense 'was' to match context and 'a good way to relax' is the natural expression instead of 'getting relaxed'. ID:6

× I think people usually like to walk in parks, but just because it is surrounded by many other people as well, so they can just have chat with them.

✓ I think people usually like to walk in parks because they are surrounded by other people and can chat with them.

Problems: pronoun 'it' refers to 'parks' (plural) so use 'they'. Remove redundant 'just' and fix article in 'have chat' to 'have a chat' or 'chat'. Combine clauses without 'but' and 'so' together; use one conjunction. ID:11

× Second thing, umm, it's, it's surrounded by many of the different plants so they just get the fresh air and yes.

✓ Also, parks have many different plants, so people get fresh air.

Original 'surrounded by many of the different plants' is awkward and wordy. Use active construction 'parks have many different plants'. Remove fillers and 'the' before 'fresh air'. ID:7

× I would love to take a walk along the coastline of a quiet seaside town.

✓ I would love to take a walk along the coastline of a quiet seaside town.

Sentence is grammatical. 'Would' expresses a hypothetical desire correctly; no change needed. ID:20

× Traffic at the sunrise, the fresh sea breeze, the sound of waves and the wide open horizon help me relax and think clearly.

✓ The sunrise traffic, the fresh sea breeze, the sound of the waves, and the wide open horizon help me relax and think clearly.

Original word order 'Traffic at the sunrise' is awkward; use 'sunrise traffic' or simply 'the sunrise'. Add definite article 'the' before 'waves'. List items should be parallel; ensure consistent nouns and articles. ID:6

× As I already said, like I go for work every day and that's the only walk that I you do it because I'm standing there for whole day after in my workplace.

✓ As I already said, I walk to work every day, and that's the only walking I do because I stand at my workplace for the whole day.

Errors: unnecessary filler 'like', wrong phrase 'go for work' should be 'walk to work', pronoun confusion 'that I you do it', tense and phrasing 'I'm standing there for whole day after' should be 'I stand at my workplace for the whole day'. Make sentence concise and correct verb forms. ID:22

× So that's the only way where I just walk and I don't even usually have enough time for walking.

✓ So that's the only time I walk, and I usually don't have enough time for walking.

Use 'time' instead of 'way' to refer to an occasion. Reorder adverb 'usually' to 'I usually don't' for natural placement. Avoid redundant 'just'. ID:20