Walking— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise, avoid fillers (umm, uh), correct grammar (use present tense and subject-verb agreement), and avoid awkward or insensitive phrasing. Start with a clear topic sentence about how often you walk, then give one or two specific reasons or examples using linking words (for example, because, so).

Ejemplo: Yes, I walk regularly with my little brother in the park. We usually walk for about 45 minutes most days because it helps us stay fit; for example, we have both lost some weight since we started going every week.

Sugerencia: Answer directly with a clear past tense sentence, reduce repetition and fillers, and use correct verb forms. Provide a brief specific memory and connect it with a linking word (for example, because, and then) to make it coherent.

Ejemplo: Yes, I often walked outside as a child with my grandparents. I remember going to the park where I wanted to join the playground but was shy at first; later I met other children there and we became friends.

Sugerencia: Give a general topic sentence and then 1–2 clear, specific reasons. Avoid irrelevant or confusing details and reduce hesitations. Use linking words (for example, firstly, because, also) and correct vocabulary (supervise children, relax, exercise).

Ejemplo: People like walking in parks because it is relaxing and safe. For example, parents can supervise their children playing while they get some exercise, and many people enjoy fresh air and green surroundings.

Sugerencia: Give a clear location and explain why with specific reasons. Use correct sentence structure, avoid repetition and filler words, and give concrete details (distance, event) in a coherent way. Use linking words such as because or for example.

Ejemplo: I would like to walk in the Rock Marathon area because it hosts a famous 10-kilometer race. I think walking there would be inspiring and motivating, especially since many athletes compete and the atmosphere is energetic.

Sugerencia: Use past tense for recent events, keep sentences concise, and avoid fillers. Start with a clear past statement about where you went, then give one or two specific details (who you went with, what you did) using linking words like then or after that.

Ejemplo: Recently I went for a walk at Al Marjan Beach in Ras Al Khaimah with my parents. After our walk we bought different cookies from a food truck, choosing treats like Kinder and Lotus because everyone had their own preference.

× I like the sport so much because it's helped me umm uh, every time I take my little brother and we go to the park, we we go and we, we walk so much.

✓ I like the sport so much because it has helped me. Every time I take my little brother and we go to the park, we walk a lot.

The original uses 'it's helped' which is acceptable colloquially but unclear; 'it has helped me' is the standard present perfect (past participle) form. Also redundant fillers and repeated words were removed. Use present perfect to show an experience that affects the present; keep simple present for habitual actions ('we walk').

× We walk and we lose weight.

✓ We walk and we lose weight.

No grammatical change required for tense here; sentence is acceptable. However, it pairs present habitual action with present simple correctly. No correction applied per instruction to only correct listed types; kept for context.

× We lose 5K because my brother is so fat and he need to be lose weight because they will don't accept him in the military and he have so much suspect.

✓ We lost 5 kilograms because my brother was overweight and he needs to lose weight; otherwise they might not accept him into the military and he is under a lot of suspicion.

Multiple issues: '5K' is informal; use '5 kilograms'. Tense consistency: shift to past 'lost' if referring to a completed change, but if habitual use present 'lose'. 'He need' should be third person singular 'he needs' (Third person singular ID 2) and 'to be lose' is incorrect form; use 'to lose' (verb infinitive). 'They will don't accept' is incorrect contraction and auxiliary; use 'might not accept' for possibility. 'He have so much suspect' uses wrong verb and noun; use 'he is under a lot of suspicion.' Corrections address quantifiers and verb forms.

× Yes, I, uh, yes, I, I remember that time when I was, when I was with my grand grandma, grandpa and uh, we, we was working at the park and I did want to go to play with uh, to the games with my umm, with my mates, but I didn't know them and after that they have become my friends.

✓ Yes, I remember the time when I was with my grandparents and we were working at the park. I wanted to go to play the games with my mates, but I didn't know them; after that they became my friends.

Use correct past tense forms: 'we was' should be 'we were' (subject-verb agreement, Past tense ID 5 and 27). 'I did want' is unnatural; use 'I wanted'. 'They have become' should be simple past 'they became' to match past narrative. Also simplify redundant words and use 'grandparents' instead of 'grand grandma, grandpa.'

× People who, who like to walk in the parks, maybe they have a small brother or a child that they have to take off so they can put them at the games of the park and they can take a walk.

✓ People who like to walk in parks may have a small child or younger sibling whom they need to take with them; they can put the child on the playground equipment and then take a walk.

Pronoun and relative clause corrections: 'have a small brother or a child that they have to take off' is incorrect; use 'younger sibling' or 'child' and 'whom they need to take with them'. 'Put them at the games of the park' is awkward; use 'put the child on the playground equipment'. Modal 'maybe' replaced with 'may' for formality. This fixes pronoun reference and prepositional use (IDs 12 and 11).

× So when they finish the walk, they come and pick up their child or their brother or The Who is he?

✓ So when they finish the walk, they come back and pick up their child or younger sibling.

Remove the fragmented question 'The Who is he?' and streamline sentence. 'Come and pick up' is acceptable but 'come back and pick up' clarifies returning. This corrects sentence fragmentation and incoherent phrase (ID 26).

× At a famous place that names uh rock marathon, this place make me good like and strong more because this is a place who were play uh people race, uh sport, uh, for 10 kilometers who finished first uh, may may have money 10 million yes.

✓ I would like to walk at a famous event called the Rock Marathon; this place makes me feel good and stronger because it is where people race in a 10-kilometer event. Those who finish first may win prize money, for example 10 million.

Grammar fixes: 'that names' should be 'called' (article and naming). 'This place make' needs third person singular 'this place makes' (ID 2). 'Good like and strong more' corrected to 'feel good and stronger' (adjective/adverb order, ID 13 and 18). 'This is a place who were play people race' corrected to 'where people race' (relative pronoun and tense, IDs 16 and 6). 'May may have money 10 million' simplified to 'may win prize money'.

× I'll go for a walk at the Karach at Ras Al Khaimah with my parents, my mother and father.

✓ I went for a walk at Al Qarah in Ras Al Khaimah with my parents.

Context indicates asking about where did you go lately, so past tense should be used rather than future 'I'll go'. Use correct place name form 'Al Qarah' if intended. Change to past simple 'I went' to match question (Future/Past tense ID 7 and 5).

× After that, we go to the cookies, uh, cookies truck and we ordered, uh, cookies and kinder and Lotus, uh, cookies with a different, uh, tastes because everybody has have his own test and choice.

✓ After that, we went to the cookie truck and ordered cookies such as Kinder and Lotus with different flavors because everybody has their own taste and preferences.

Use past tense 'we went' and 'ordered' to match narrative (Past tense ID 5). 'The cookies truck' should be 'the cookie truck' (article and noun form, ID 17/22). 'A different tastes' corrected to 'different flavors' (plural agreement and word choice, IDs 1 and 13). 'Everybody has have his own test and choice' should be 'everybody has their own taste and preferences'—use singular 'their' as gender-neutral pronoun and correct nouns (pronoun error ID 12, word choice ID 13).