Walking— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 문장이 반복되고 어순과 관사 사용에 실수가 있습니다. 간단한 주제문으로 시작한 뒤 연결어로 이유를 자연스럽게 덧붙이세요. 불필요한 중복(예: 'my my')를 피하고 관사(a/the)와 전치사(to/from) 사용을 정확히 하세요. 문장은 2~3개로 유지하고 주어·동사 위치를 명확히 하세요.

Ejemplo: Yes, I walk a lot. My university is quite far from the nearest subway station, so I usually walk to and from campus every day.

Sugerencia: 시제 일치와 관사/어순 오류가 있습니다(예: 'when I was child' → 'when I was a child'). 또한 모호한 표현('love the out the outside in my eyes')를 구체적으로 바꾸세요. 간단한 주제문 후에 이유와 예시를 연결어로 덧붙이면 더 자연스럽습니다.

Ejemplo: Yes, I often walked outside when I was a child because I loved playing outdoors. For example, I used to walk to the park with my friends or take evening strolls with my parents.

Sugerencia: 단어 선택과 철자(working→walking) 오류를 고치고 문장을 완성하세요. 일반적 이유를 말한 뒤 구체적 예시나 결과를 연결어로 덧붙이세요. 관사 사용('the park'/'parks')을 상황에 맞게 고르세요.

Ejemplo: I think walking is very good for health, and parks are ideal for it. Also, people can relax and chat with friends there, which makes the experience more enjoyable.

Sugerencia: 불필요한 음성적 휴지('umm','MMM')를 줄이고 문장을 명확히 구성하세요. 표현 오류('walk desert' → 'walk in the desert'; 'a people' → 'people'/'a person')를 고치고 이유와 경험을 논리적으로 연결하세요. 문장은 2~3개로 유지하세요.

Ejemplo: If I had the chance, I would like to take a long walk in the desert. I find deserts fascinating, and after watching a film about people walking through a desert when I was 19, I became curious to experience it myself.

Sugerencia: 중복 표현('with my friends' 반복), 시제와 문장완성 오류('we talk'→'we talked'; 'during watching Han River' → 'while watching the Han River'), 문장 마무리 부족을 고치세요. 한두 개의 문장으로 요점(장소, 동반자, 활동, 감정)을 명확히 전달하세요.

Ejemplo: Recently I went for a walk near my house with some friends. We walked along the Han River, talked about our future plans, and I felt very excited.

× Yes, I usually walk a lot because my my university ha is in the very far away to the subway station.

✓ Yes, I usually walk a lot because my university is very far from the subway station.

The original sentence has subject-verb agreement and word order problems: 'my my' is a repetition, 'ha' is incorrect for 'is', and 'in the very far away to' is incorrect preposition and word order. Use 'is' for the singular noun 'university' and the preposition 'far from' to indicate distance. Also place 'very' before 'far' and remove unnecessary articles.

× So when I go to school I walk a lot.

✓ So when I go to school, I walk a lot.

This sentence is acceptable but needs a comma for clarity between clauses. The tense 'go' and 'walk' are present and match habitual action. Add the comma to separate the subordinate clause.

× Yes I usually walk around outside when I was child because I love the out the outside in my eyes.

✓ Yes, I usually walked outside when I was a child because I loved being outdoors.

Mixing present habitual 'usually walk' with past time marker 'when I was a child' is inconsistent. Change verbs to past tense ('walked', 'loved') to match the past time frame. 'was child' needs the article 'a child'. 'the out the outside in my eyes' is unclear; use 'being outdoors' to express preference.

× So walk with my friends or walk with my parents in my childhood.

✓ So I walked with my friends or with my parents during my childhood.

Sentence fragments lacking subject and correct tense. Add subject 'I' and past tense 'walked'. Use 'during my childhood' to indicate the time period. Also combine prepositions properly: 'with my friends' and 'with my parents'.

× I think working is very good for health and.

✓ I think walking is very good for health.

The word 'working' is likely a mispronunciation of 'walking'. Remove the trailing 'and.' which is incomplete. Use 'for health' or 'for your health' — both are acceptable; here 'for health' is concise.

× Park is a very suitable place to talk with their friends or walk with.

✓ Parks are very suitable places to talk with friends or to go for a walk.

'Park is' should be plural/general 'Parks are' when speaking generally. 'their friends' is unnecessary—use 'friends'. 'walk with' is incomplete; use 'to go for a walk' or 'to walk with friends'. Ensure parallel structure: 'talk with friends or go for a walk.'

× MMM I will war.

✓ Hmm, I will warm up?

The original 'I will war' is unclear and likely a speech filler or mispronunciation. If intended to say 'I will' plus an activity, replace with a clear phrase. If not understood, ask for clarification. Here no grammar correction can be precise; suggest clarification. (Note: keep responses concise.)

× I want to walk desert because desert is very umm special place to me.

✓ I want to walk in the desert because the desert is a very special place to me.

Missing preposition 'in' before 'the desert'. Use definite article 'the desert' when referring to a specific environment. Add 'a' before 'very special place' and remove filler words. Maintain natural word order: 'walk in the desert'.

× When I was 19 years old I watched a movie when a people walk desert, so I want to.

✓ When I was 19 years old, I watched a movie about people walking in the desert, so I wanted to go.

Tense consistency: past events should use past tense ('watched', 'wanted'). 'a people' is incorrect—use 'people'. Use preposition 'in the desert'. Complete the final clause: 'so I wanted to go.'

× I walked in front of my house with my friends, umm walking with my friends and we talk about our future and during watching Han River.

✓ I walked in front of my house with my friends; we walked together and talked about our future while watching the Han River.

Maintain past tense consistently ('walked', 'talked'). Remove repeated phrase 'walking with my friends'. Use a semicolon or separate clauses for clarity. Use 'while watching the Han River' for simultaneous actions and include the definite article 'the' before 'Han River'.

× So I'm very excited at the.

✓ So I was very excited.

tense and construction: since the event was in the past, use past tense 'was'. 'at the.' is incomplete and ungrammatical. Remove the fragment and state the emotion clearly: 'I was very excited.'