Walking— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 句子有语法和用词错误，表达不够自然且有些冗长。建议：1) 开头直接回答并给出简短原因；2) 注意动词和名词的正确使用（如“iterate”应换成“walk”或“go outside”）；3) 把句子分成最多两到三句，避免信息过多；4) 使用连词强化句子衔接，如“but”“so”。具体练习：用正确时态和词汇说明频率和特殊情况（如下雨）。

Ejemplo: Yes, I walk quite often, especially around campus. I sometimes cycle between classes, but when it rains in the mountainous area where my university is located, I prefer to walk to the classrooms.

Sugerencia: 表达存在严重语法和词汇错误，逻辑不清。建议：1) 直接给出过去频率（e.g. usually, often）；2) 使用正确短语描述“孩子的天性”和“探索环境”；3) 句子要简洁，避免错误的被动或不完整结构；4) 加入具体细节（例如和谁一起、去哪儿）以增加内容。

Ejemplo: Yes, I often went outside as a child because children are naturally curious. I usually asked my grandparents to take me for walks so I could explore the area around our home.

Sugerencia: 回答思路正确但用词不够地道，结构稍显生硬。建议：1) 使用更自然的词汇（例如“facilities”而不是“infrastructures”，用“tidy”或“pleasant”替换“clear”）；2) 用连接词如“because”或“so”清晰表达原因；3) 可以加入具体例子说明人们在公园做什么以丰富内容。

Ejemplo: People prefer walking in parks because the environment is cleaner and more peaceful than many other public places. For example, parks offer green spaces and benches where people can relax after a long day of work or study.

Sugerencia: 回答总体良好但句子过长且有重复信息。建议：1) 开头直接陈述地点；2) 用一两句补充原因并给出具体细节（例如喜欢的景色或期待看到的事物）；3) 避免重复短语，如“different landscapes which attract me”。

Ejemplo: I would choose to walk in the low mountains and small hills around my campus. Our university is large and has varied scenery, so I enjoy exploring wooded paths and viewpoints to see the landscape.

Sugerencia: 时态和表达不准确，第二句逻辑混乱（“has real people for me to avoid noise”不通顺）。建议：1) 注意时态一致（过去式或现在完成）；2) 把原因分成两条清楚表达（例如方便、空间大、人多更安全或热闹）；3) 简化句子并使用自然搭配（unwind, crowded, lively）。

Ejemplo: Recently I walked to the campus central square after dinner because it's the nearest public place with plenty of space to relax. It is also lively and well-lit, so I feel safe and comfortable there.

× Sure, especially 1 iterates outside.

✓ Sure, I often go outside.

原句结构混乱，“1 iterates outside”不是英语表达。应该使用“I often go outside”来表示“我经常到外面去”。建议使用主语+频率副词+动词的常见句型。

× Sometimes I may ride to enter the different classes.

✓ Sometimes I may ride to attend different classes.

原句中用“enter the different classes”不自然且搭配不当。参加课程通常用“attend classes”。动词不需要进行式，应使用不定式或动词原形。建议用“ride to attend”来表示骑车去上课。

× However, when it's raining in the mountain area where my campus located in, I will walk to the classrooms.

✓ However, when it rains in the mountainous area where my campus is located, I walk to the classrooms.

原句中时态和词序有问题：“where my campus located in”中缺少be动词且多余介词“in”放错位置；“it's raining”与后句时态不一致，口语可用一般现在“it rains”或现在进行，但与习惯性动作更搭配用一般现在或一般现在时表示习惯。建议把从句改为“where my campus is located”，主句用“I walk”表示习惯动作。

× Sure it's pulling kids nature, meanwhile it's humans instinct to discover the unknown environment near them.

✓ Sure, it's in children's nature, and it's human instinct to discover the unknown environment around them.

原句形容词/名词使用错误：应为“in children's nature”而不是“pulling kids nature”；“humans instinct”应为“human instinct”；“near them”更自然为“around them”。还需注意并列连词用“and”。建议用固定搭配“in someone's nature”和“human instinct”。

× So are usually beg my grandparents to bring me outside for work to see what is happening around our home.

✓ So I would usually beg my grandparents to take me outside to see what was happening around our home.

原句缺少主语和正确助动词，词序错误。“are usually beg”不合语法，应为“I would usually beg”或“I would often beg”，并且“bring me outside for work”不合上下文，改为“take me outside to see”更自然。过去习惯应使用过去时“was happening”。

× Compared with other infrastructures, parks have a more clear and clean environment, so it's the best place for most people to relax, especially after a day's tired walk or study.

✓ Compared with other facilities, parks have a clearer and cleaner environment, so they are the best places for most people to relax, especially after a tiring day of walking or studying.

原句词汇搭配和冠词使用不当：“infrastructures”用法不自然，应为“facilities”；“more clear and clean”比较级和形容词顺序应为“clearer and cleaner”；“it's the best place”与复数主语parks不一致，应为“they are the best places”；“a day's tired walk or study”表达不自然，改为“a tiring day of walking or studying”。

× I'd like to take a long walk to the low mountains and small hills in the campus because our university is quite large and it contains some different landscapes which attract me and I'd like to discover them.

✓ I'd like to take a long walk to the low mountains and small hills on campus because our university is quite large and contains different landscapes that attract me and I would like to explore them.

原句中介词“in the campus”应为“on campus”；代词“it contains”指代不清，改为省略主语或用“contains”；“discover them”在此语境更自然用“explore”。建议注意校园常用介词“on campus”以及连贯地使用代词和从句。

× I go for a walk after dinner to the campus center square because it's the nearest public places which have a rather large space for me to unwind myself.

✓ I go for a walk after dinner to the campus central square because it's the nearest public place that has a fairly large space for me to unwind.

原句时态可保留一般现在，但存在复数/单数不一致：“nearest public places”应为“nearest public place”；“center square”更自然为“central square”；“have”应与单数主语一致为“has”；“unwind myself”中“myself”冗余，一般用“unwind”。建议保持主谓一致并简化反身代词用法。

× What's more, it often has real people for me to avoid noise.

✓ What's more, it often has real people around, so I don't feel alone and there is less noise.

原句“has real people for me to avoid noise”不合逻辑且表达混乱。“real people for me to avoid noise”无意义。可能想表达“有其他人在那，所以不感到孤单且噪音较少”。改为更清晰的因果关系句子，并注意冠词和短语搭配。