Walking— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler sounds (uh, umm), correct grammar (I walk a lot; I’m a walking person), and give one or two specific examples of places you walk. Use a linking word when contrasting mood (however/although).

Ejemplo: Yes, I walk a lot. I usually walk between my home and university and around the nearby market, which takes about 20 minutes each way. However, if I’m in a bad mood I prefer to stay indoors and rest.

Sugerencia: Provide a clear topic sentence and add a specific example of games or places to make the answer more vivid. Avoid repeating words and use linking words like because or for example to connect ideas.

Ejemplo: Yes, I went outside very often as a child because I loved playing with friends. For example, we used to play hide-and-seek and football in the local park almost every afternoon.

Sugerencia: Use clearer vocabulary and correct grammar. Start with a topic sentence, then give two specific reasons using linking words (because, for example). Replace awkward phrases (feel themselves so quiet) with natural expressions (feel relaxed, escape crowds).

Ejemplo: I think people enjoy walking in parks because they feel relaxed and can escape busy streets. For example, parks offer fresh air and green spaces, which help clear the mind and reduce stress.

Sugerencia: Give a concise topic sentence and avoid hesitations. Use correct grammar (I would like to take a long walk in Astana because its parks are peaceful). Provide one specific feature of the place and a reason using linking words (because/so).

Ejemplo: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk in Astana because its parks are quiet and well maintained. For example, I enjoy the tree-lined paths and small lakes there, which make it easy to relax and forget city noise.

Sugerencia: Use past tense when asked about recent past (I went walking). Start with a direct answer, then give a specific recent example and a brief reason. Remove repetition and filler words.

Ejemplo: Lately I went walking in the parks of Astana. Last weekend I walked for an hour around the central park because it is quiet and has many benches, so I would recommend it to visitors.

× I work a lot, uh, because I'm walking person.

✓ I work a lot because I'm a walking person.

The indefinite article 'a' is needed before the noun phrase 'walking person'. Also remove unnecessary commas. Use 'a walking person' to indicate one who walks often.

× I umm, walk it by the my course, my school and another places.

✓ I walk along the route to my course, my school, and other places.

The original uses incorrect structure 'walk it by the my course' and a plural issue 'another places'. Use 'walk along the route to' and 'other places'. 'Another' cannot modify plural nouns; use 'other'.

× When I have a bad mood, I don't walk.

✓ When I'm in a bad mood, I don't walk.

Use the idiomatic expression 'be in a bad mood' rather than 'have a bad mood'. This is a present tense state description.

× Yes, I often went outside when I was a child and I walked a lot because I loved playing with girls, with boys, playing different type of games.

✓ Yes, I often went outside when I was a child, and I walked a lot because I loved playing with girls and boys, playing different types of games.

The main issue is plural/quantifier use: 'type' should be plural 'types' when referring to multiple games. Also remove redundant commas and keep parallel structure 'girls and boys'. The tense 'went' and 'walked' are correct for past.

× In my opinion, people like to walk in parks because they feel themselves so quiet and so especially like amazing not in crowded places.

✓ In my opinion, people like to walk in parks because they feel calm and relaxed, and enjoy the peaceful, uncrowded environment.

'Feel themselves so quiet' is incorrect; use 'feel calm and relaxed'. 'So especially like amazing' is ungrammatical. Rephrase to 'enjoy the peaceful, uncrowded environment' for clarity and correctness.

× They keeps their minds so quite.

✓ They keep their minds very quiet.

'They' requires the base verb 'keep', not 'keeps'. Also use 'very quiet' or better 'calm' instead of 'so quite' ('quite' is an adverb pronounced like 'kwite' and doesn't fit here).

× I, if I had a chance, I would like to take a long walk in Astana City because they're so amazing, so quiet parks that I loved very much, uh, and they're not so much, umm, people and they're not crowded, so it helps you feel yourself good.

✓ If I had the chance, I would take a long walk in Astana City because the parks are amazing and very quiet; I love them very much. They are not crowded, so walking there makes you feel good.

Remove redundant pronouns and fix grammar: 'they're so amazing, so quiet parks' is incorrect—use 'the parks are amazing and very quiet'. 'Not so much people' is ungrammatical; use 'not crowded' or 'not many people'. 'Feel yourself good' should be 'feel good'.

× Lately I go walking.

✓ Lately I have been going for walks.

Use present perfect continuous 'have been going' or present perfect 'have been walking' to express an action that has been happening recently. 'Go walking' in simple present is less natural here.

× I prefer Lately I prefer walking and in the parks in Astana.

✓ Lately I prefer walking in the parks in Astana.

Remove the duplicated 'I prefer' and place 'lately' at the start or omit it. Use 'the parks in Astana' or 'parks in Astana' depending on specificity; 'the parks in Astana' is acceptable.

× It's so quiet place I I would like to recommend it to people.

✓ It's a very quiet place, and I would like to recommend it to people.

Use the article 'a' before 'very quiet place'. 'So quiet' is colloquial; 'very quiet' is more standard. Remove duplicated 'I'. Add a conjunction for sentence clarity.