Walking— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect phrases (e.g., 'work around', 'different sit').

Ejemplo: Yes, I walk a lot. I especially enjoy walking in new cities because it lets me explore local streets and experience an atmosphere different from my hometown. For example, last month I walked through a historic district and discovered small cafés and markets that I wouldn’t have found by car.

Sugerencia: This answer is clear and relevant but reduce hesitations and fix tense consistency. Start with a direct sentence, explain reason concisely, and add a brief follow-up using a linking word (e.g., 'but' or 'however').

Ejemplo: No, I didn’t. When I was a child I had severe asthma, so even short walks made me short of breath. However, my condition has improved, and now I enjoy walking regularly for exercise and fresh air.

Sugerencia: Organize the answer with a clear topic sentence and two specific reasons. Use linking words (e.g., 'because', 'for example') and correct vocabulary (e.g., 'parks', 'clean air', 'greenery'). Avoid vague phrases like 'grass seeds' and repetition.

Ejemplo: People like walking in parks because it helps them relax and reduces stress. In addition, parks usually have cleaner air and lots of greenery, such as trees and lawns, which create a pleasant atmosphere for walking.

Sugerencia: Be specific about the place and give clear reasons. Use correct grammar for conditionals and singular/plural (e.g., 'If I had the chance, I would explore Europe' or name a specific city). Provide two concrete reasons and a linking word.

Ejemplo: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk through Paris, France, because the architecture and street life are very different from Japan. For example, walking along the Seine and through historic neighborhoods would let me experience local culture and cafés.

Sugerencia: Provide a clear topic sentence naming the place (correctly), give one or two specific details about why you went there, and use linking words. Correct word choices (e.g., 'a river nearby', 'many people go there') and avoid broken sentences.

Ejemplo: Recently I went for a walk by the nearby river close to my house. Many people visit that area for walking because it has wide paths, plenty of trees, and nice views of the water, which makes it very relaxing.

× Yes, I work around because I like walking, especially different sit in different cities because by walking a lot I can explore the other city and then I can experience the atmosphere that is completely different from my home cities. I like it and it's really refreshing and yeah, I like it.

✓ Yes, I walk around because I like walking, especially sitting in different cities, because by walking a lot I can explore other cities and experience atmospheres that are completely different from my hometowns. I enjoy it; it is really refreshing.

Errors: misuse of 'work around' instead of 'walk around'; 'different sit in different cities' is incorrect word form and order; 'the other city' should be plural 'other cities' to match context; 'home cities' is better as 'hometowns'; 'then I can experience the atmosphere' repetitive/modal unnecessary. Suggestion: use correct present participle 'sitting' for 'sit' when describing ongoing action, use consistent plural nouns for general statements, and simplify sentence structure to avoid redundancy. Grammar problem type ID: 10

× Actually I didn't because when I was a child I suffered from really heavy asthma. So if I walk even a little distance, I, I, I cannot, I couldn't breathe both. So yeah, I didn't do that. But now I like it because I don't suffer from asthma now.

✓ Actually I didn't because when I was a child I suffered from very severe asthma. If I walked even a short distance I couldn't breathe. So I didn't do that. But now I enjoy walking because I no longer suffer from asthma.

Errors: inconsistent tense mixing present and past ('if I walk' should match past 'when I was a child'); incorrect adverb 'really heavy' should be 'very severe'; 'breathe both' is ungrammatical. Suggestion: keep past tense for past conditions, use standard adjectives (severe) and concise clauses ('if I walked... I couldn't'). Grammar problem type ID: 5

× Because by walking perks we can refresh and relax because and the usually the air is daily clean because there are a lot of trees and like a lot of grass seeds. So it is really great atmosphere and good experience to have a walk.

✓ Because walking in parks lets us refresh and relax, and usually the air is clean because there are many trees and areas of grass. So it is a really pleasant atmosphere and a good experience to go for a walk.

Errors: 'by walking perks' incorrect preposition and noun form; 'daily clean' unnatural collocation — use 'usually the air is clean'; 'grass seeds' wrong noun, use 'areas of grass' or 'lawns'; missing articles 'a really great atmosphere' needs 'a' and 'a good experience'. Suggestion: use correct prepositions ('in parks'), natural collocations ('air is clean'), and appropriate count/uncount noun forms. Grammar problem_type_id: 11

× If I have a chance, I would like to explore the Europe on onset because Europe is really nice country. Europe are really nice country because the atmosphere is really different from Japan, especially the city that is really believable. So I like it and I like the culture and the.

✓ If I had the chance, I would like to explore Europe at once because Europe is a really nice place. Europe is a very different region from Japan, especially in its cities. I like it, and I enjoy the culture.

Errors: 'the Europe' unnecessary definite article; 'Europe are' subject-verb disagreement and pluralization errors; 'nice country' is incorrect for the whole continent — use 'place' or 'region' or refer to specific countries; 'the city that is really believable' unclear and incorrect; tense in conditional should be past ('If I had the chance'). Suggestion: remove incorrect articles with continent names, ensure subject-verb agreement ('Europe is'), use appropriate nouns for scope ('place'/'region'), and correct conditional tense. Grammar_problem_type_id: 1

× I went to deliver which is close to my house that is really big river and around the here many people will go to go to there because it is really good way, good place to take a walk and there are lots of nature so.

✓ I went to the river near my house. It is a really large river, and many people come here because it is a great place to take a walk and there is lots of nature.

Errors: 'deliver' likely wrong word for 'river' and sentence fragments cause poor structure; redundant and incorrect phrases ('around the here many people will go to go to there'); 'lots of nature' is informal but acceptable if rephrased. Suggestion: split into clear sentences, use correct nouns ('river'), correct article usage ('the river'), and simplify expressions for clarity. Grammar_problem_type_id: 26