Walking— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 文法と語順の誤り（例：work → walk、everyday → every day、pretty cafe → pretty cafes）を直し、トピック文の後に具体的な詳細を論理的に続けると自然になります。また冗長な表現を避け、接続詞（for example, because, so）を使って理由を明確に述べてください。最大5文以内にまとめてください。

Ejemplo: Yes, I do. I walk for about 30 minutes every morning around my house to stay fit. For example, when I walk in Kyoto I often discover many pretty cafes, which makes the walk more enjoyable. This routine helps me start the day with energy.

Sugerencia: 時制と動詞の一致（take took → took、I was very active person → I was a very active child）を直し、同じ意味の語句の繰り返しを避けてください。理由や具体例を接続詞でつなぎ、文を簡潔にまとめると効果的です。5文以内に収め、具体的な活動や場所を1つ示すと良いです。

Ejemplo: Yes, I did. I often walked around my grandmother’s house with her because she liked to take me to the nearby park. I was a very active child, so I usually played games like tag and climbed trees there.

Sugerencia: 『deep questions』などの不自然な表現を避け、主張をシンプルに述べてから具体例で補強してください。また語の数と複数形（various kind → various kinds, it's good plan time → it's a good place/time）を正しく使い、接続詞（because, for example, so）で論理をつなぎます。

Ejemplo: I think people enjoy walking in parks because parks offer a relaxed environment for socializing and exercise. For example, you can meet friends, see elderly people taking a stroll, or families with children, so it’s easy to have conversations and feel connected.

Sugerencia: 語順と名詞形の間違い（beachside → the beach, I really love beach and looking → I really love the beach and watching the sea）を直し、理由を自然な英語で述べてください。感情表現は簡潔にし、接続詞で理由を明確に述べると効果的です。

Ejemplo: I would like to take a long walk along the beach. I really love the sea and watching the waves, because walking by the shore helps me relieve stress and forget about daily worries.

Sugerencia: 時制の一致と冗長表現を直してください（Recently I walk → Recently I walked, for a walk 重複、attend my school → go to school/school by bike）。理由を簡潔に述べ接続詞（so, because）で繋ぐと自然になります。5文以内でまとめてください。

Ejemplo: Recently I walked to my university instead of cycling. I used to ride my bike to school, but I started walking for health reasons, and I find it refreshes me before classes.

× Yes I do, I work almost everyday morning about 30 minutes around my house to keep my weight.

✓ Yes I do. I work out almost every morning for about 30 minutes around my house to keep my weight.

The sentence has several issues: 'everyday' should be the adverbial phrase 'every morning' (everyday is an adjective), and 'almost everyday morning' is awkward; use 'almost every morning' or 'almost every day' depending on meaning. 'work' is vague; use 'work out' for exercise. Add 'for' before duration 'about 30 minutes'. Also punctuation: split into two sentences for clarity. Suggestion: say 'I work out almost every morning for about 30 minutes.'

× Kyoto is a fun place to walk because I can find many pretty cafe while walking.

✓ Kyoto is a fun place to walk because I can find many pretty cafes while walking.

'Cafe' is countable and plural here so it needs the plural form 'cafes'. Also 'pretty' as adjective is fine. Ensure plural agreement between 'many' and noun: 'many cafes'. Suggestion: use 'cafes' when referring to multiple establishments.

× I want to find it.

✓ I want to find them.

'It' is singular but refers to multiple 'cafes' mentioned previously, so the pronoun should agree in number with its antecedent. Use 'them' for plural referents. If the speaker meant a single cafe, clarify: 'I want to find one.' Suggestion: ensure pronoun number matches the noun it replaces.

× Yes I did. I used to walk around my grandma's house with my grandma.

✓ Yes I did. I used to walk around my grandma's house with her.

Repeating 'my grandma' is redundant and stylistically awkward. Use a pronoun 'her' for the repeated reference. The past tense 'used to' is correct for habitual past actions. Suggestion: replace repeated nouns with pronouns when context is clear.

× My grandma always take took me to park because I was very active person and I used to play outside everyday.

✓ My grandma always took me to the park because I was a very active person and I used to play outside every day.

There is a mixed verb form 'take took' — use the past tense 'took' to match 'always' in a past habitual context. 'to park' requires the definite article 'the park' in this context. 'very active person' needs the article 'a'. 'everyday' is an adjective; use 'every day' as an adverbial phrase. Suggestion: use consistent past tense verbs and correct articles: 'took me to the park', 'a very active person', 'every day'.

× It's a deep questions, but I believe that people like it because we can meet with various kind of people such as friends, old people and young people.

✓ It's a deep question, but I believe that people like it because we can meet various kinds of people such as friends, older people and young people.

'questions' should be singular 'question' to match 'It's'. 'meet with' is acceptable but 'meet' without 'with' is more natural here. 'various kind of people' should be 'various kinds of people' (plural). 'old people' is better as 'older people' in this context. Suggestion: use singular/plural consistency and natural collocations: 'It's a deep question', 'meet various kinds of people'.

× It's good plan time to communicate with them.

✓ It's a good time to communicate with them.

'plan' is unnecessary and incorrect here. Use 'a good time' with the indefinite article 'a'. The phrase 'plan time' is not idiomatic. Suggestion: simplify to 'It's a good time to communicate with them.'

× I want to take a long walk around beachside.

✓ I would like to take a long walk along the beach.

Context is a hypothetical preference; 'I would like' is more polite and matches 'if you had the chance' question. 'around beachside' is unidiomatic — use 'along the beach' or 'on the beach'. Also add definite article 'the' before 'beach' if referring to a specific beach. Suggestion: 'I would like to take a long walk along the beach.'

× That's because I really love beach and looking.

✓ That's because I really love the beach and looking at the scenery.

'love beach' needs the article 'the beach' or 'beaches' as a general noun. 'looking' alone is incomplete; use 'looking at the scenery' or 'walking and looking at the view'. Suggestion: provide an object for 'looking' and include the article: 'I really love the beach and looking at the scenery.'

× Beach makes me relieve stress and make me forget the reality.

✓ The beach helps me relieve stress and makes me forget reality.

Use the definite article 'the beach'. Use a single subject-verb agreement structure: 'helps me relieve' and 'makes me forget' — both verbs must agree with 'the beach' (singular). Remove 'the' before 'reality' unless a specific reality is meant; 'forget reality' is idiomatic. Suggestion: 'The beach helps me relieve stress and makes me forget reality.'

× Recently I walk to my university for a walk.

✓ Recently I have been walking to my university for a walk.

The adverb 'recently' suggests present perfect continuous: 'have been walking'. 'I walk' (simple present) is inappropriate for recent actions. Also 'to my university for a walk' is redundant; better: 'I have been walking to my university' or 'I have been walking to the university.' Suggestion: 'Recently I have been walking to the university.'

× Until then I used to attend my school with my bike, but thinking for my health I started walking.

✓ Until then I used to go to school by bike, but for the sake of my health I started walking.

'attend my school with my bike' is unnatural; use 'go to school by bike'. 'thinking for my health' is ungrammatical; use 'for the sake of my health' or 'to improve my health'. 'Until then' is acceptable but 'before that' is another option. Suggestion: 'Until then I used to go to school by bike, but for the sake of my health I started walking.'