Walking— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Your answer is relevant and clear with good reasons, but it's a little long and could be more concise. Reduce redundancy (e.g. "before the afternoon") and use one linking phrase to connect ideas. Also vary vocabulary slightly (e.g. "refresh my mind" or "re-energize"). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I walk regularly at work. I take a 10–15 minute walk in the central hall after lunch because it helps me relax and re-energize, so I can concentrate better in the afternoon.

Sugerencia: Your answer is on topic but contains multiple pronunciation/word choice errors and unclear phrases (e.g. "I I was Joel"). Correct structure: start with direct statement, then give a clear example with correct vocabulary and linking words. Avoid irrelevant details and be specific about frequency and places.

Ejemplo: Not really. I usually stayed near home and prayed with friends outside our houses, but occasionally I walked with my parents along the pedestrian mall when we went shopping, where there were many shops and restaurants on both sides.

Sugerencia: Good structure and a clear example, but watch word choice and minor grammar ("lecture scenery" is incorrect). Be more specific with descriptive vocabulary and use one linking phrase to connect idea and effect.

Ejemplo: People enjoy walking in parks because of the open green spaces where they can relax. For example, many appreciate the peaceful scenery and bird song, which helps reduce stress and lift their mood.

Sugerencia: Your idea is personal and relevant, but the answer has disfluencies, repetition and imprecise word choices ("The. The peaceful light, a cheer like path"). Organize into two clear sentences: state preference, then describe specific sensory details using correct adjectives and linking words.

Ejemplo: I'd like to take a long walk with my two children on the trails behind my house because the peaceful, tree-lined paths and birdsong make me feel calm and recharged.

Sugerencia: The answer is relevant but has grammatical mistakes (possessive/plural: "children's"), repetitions and awkward phrases ("white age of tropical trees"). Use past simple consistently, correct plurals, and provide one or two clear sensory details. Keep to 2–3 concise sentences.

Ejemplo: I recently went for a walk with my two children in the island garden. There were rows of tall tropical trees and many colorful flowers, which made the walk very relaxing.

× I usually take a 10 to 15 minute walk in the central hall of the building after lunch because walking helps me relax and clear my mind before the afternoon and I can focus on my work.

✓ I usually take a 10- to 15-minute walk in the central hall of the building after lunch because walking helps me relax and clear my mind before the afternoon so I can focus on my work.

Run-on and connector issue: the original sentence uses 'and' to join two clauses where a result connector 'so' is more natural. Also hyphenate '10- to 15-minute' as a compound modifier before 'walk'. Keep present simple tense. Suggestion: use appropriate connectors for cause and effect and hyphenate compound time expressions.

× Not really. I often pray with my friends outside our houses, but occasionally I I was Joel with my parents along the pedestrian mall when we went shopping.

✓ Not really. I often prayed with my friends outside our houses, but occasionally I was with my parents along the pedestrian mall when we went shopping.

Tense and extra word error: the question asked about childhood (past), so use past simple 'prayed' not present 'pray'. There is also a duplicated 'I' and an extraneous word 'Joel' that seems incorrect; remove it. Ensure past tense consistency when referring to habitual past actions.

× There are variety of shops, restaurants on both of the street.

✓ There are a variety of shops and restaurants on both sides of the street.

Count and preposition error: 'variety' needs an article 'a' when followed by 'of', and 'on both of the street' is incorrect; use 'on both sides of the street'. Also add 'and' between 'shops' and 'restaurants'.

× For example, many may enjoy the lecture scenery and listen to birds while walking, which helps reduce stress and improve mood.

✓ For example, many may enjoy the lovely scenery and listen to birds while walking, which helps reduce stress and improve mood.

Word choice error: 'lecture scenery' is incorrect; likely intended 'lovely' or 'beautiful'. Replace with an appropriate adjective. Grammar otherwise fine.

× I would like to take a long walk with my two children along the trails behind my house. The. The peaceful light, a cheer like path and the bird sound often made me feel calm and recharged.

✓ I would like to take a long walk with my two children along the trails behind my house. The peaceful light, a cheerful path and the sound of birds often make me feel calm and recharged.

Fragment and agreement errors: remove stray 'The.' fragment. Change 'cheer like' to 'cheerful' (adjective), 'bird sound' to 'the sound of birds'. Use present simple 'make' to express general feeling rather than past 'made' because question asks hypothetical desire; keep tense consistent in context.

× I went for a walk with my two children's in the island's garden recently.

✓ I went for a walk with my two children in the island garden recently.

Punctuation and possessive error: do not use possessive for plural children; use 'children' not 'children's'. 'Island's garden' is awkward—use 'island garden' unless referring to a garden that belongs to the island. Keep past simple 'went' is correct for 'recently'.

× There are there were a white age of tropical trees and and beautiful flowers there which made our walk enjoyable and relaxing.

✓ There were a wide range of tropical trees and beautiful flowers there, which made our walk enjoyable and relaxing.

Mixed tenses and word choice: the sentence has both 'are' and 'there were'—choose past 'there were' because of 'made'. Replace 'white age' (nonsense) with 'a wide range' or 'a variety' and remove duplicate 'and'. Add comma before nonrestrictive clause. Ensure past tense consistency.