Walking— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be slightly more concise and add a brief linking phrase to connect reasons. Fix minor grammar (use contractions consistently) and avoid repetition of 'walk' and 'hiking'.

Ejemplo: Yes, I do. I love hiking, so I often walk to nearby places; it’s healthier and lets me enjoy being outdoors.

Sugerencia: Clarify unclear phrases and correct grammar and word choice (e.g., 'took me to work on parcels' or 'took me to walk around the lake'). Keep sentences shorter and add linking words to show cause and effect.

Ejemplo: Yes, I did. My grandpa often took me to walk around the lake on weekend mornings, and those outings were wonderful. As a result, I developed the habit of taking regular walks to relax and get fresh air.

Sugerencia: Correct vocabulary and grammar (e.g., 'greenery' not 'greeneries', remove unclear words like 'arrows' and 'in the past'). Give two clear reasons with linking words and specific details.

Ejemplo: I think people walk in parks because the greenery and flowers create a peaceful atmosphere, which helps them relax and reduce stress. Additionally, parks are social spaces, so seeing other people exercising or chatting makes the place feel lively and safe.

Sugerencia: Avoid repetition and refine phrasing (e.g., 'climb in mountains' → 'go hiking in the mountains'). Use one or two reasons with a linking word and keep within five sentences.

Ejemplo: I would like to go hiking in the mountains because I enjoy the challenge and the scenery. It feels adventurous and gives me a chance to disconnect from daily life.

Sugerencia: Fix tense and word choice errors (e.g., 'had worked' → 'went', 'enjoying' → 'enjoyed', 'arrogance of flowers' → 'sight of the flowers' or 'fragrance'). Use linking words and be specific about activities.

Ejemplo: I went to a lake near my school recently with my best friends. We walked and chatted around the lake, enjoying the birdsong and the sight of blooming flowers, which helped me relieve stress.

× Yes I do.

✓ Yes, I do.

Missing comma after 'Yes' is punctuation; not in list. However sentence itself is grammatically correct in present tense. No change needed beyond adding a comma for natural speech rhythm.

× I love hiking so I often choose to walk when I need to get somewhere nearby.

✓ I love hiking, so I often choose to walk when I need to get somewhere nearby.

Add comma before conjunction 'so' linking two independent clauses for correct sentence structure. Grammar types list includes verb+ -ing but here the -ing form 'hiking' is correct; main issue is sentence structure (26) and punctuation. Improvement: add comma to separate clauses.

× Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

✓ Did you often go outside for a walk when you were a child?

Use 'for a walk' rather than 'to have a walk' which is unnatural in English. The question uses past tense correctly; change improves idiomatic usage.

× Yes, I did.

✓ Yes, I did.

This sentence is correct for past tense; no grammatical change needed.

× When I was a child, my grandpa often told me for working parcel around the lake, usually on weekend mornings, and those outings were wonderful experience.

✓ When I was a child, my grandpa often took me to work on parcels around the lake, usually on weekend mornings, and those outings were a wonderful experience.

Multiple issues: 'told me for working parcel' is incorrect. Likely intended meaning is 'took me to work on parcels' or 'had me help with parcels.' Use 'took me to work on parcels around the lake.' Also 'wonderful experience' needs the article 'a'. This fixes verb choice, prepositions, and article usage (IDs 11 and 22). Suggestion: use clear verbs (take/took, help) and include articles.

× As a result, I developed a good habit of taking regular works for relaxation and fresh air.

✓ As a result, I developed the good habit of taking regular walks for relaxation and fresh air.

'Works' is wrong here; intended word is 'walks.' Also use article 'the' or no article depending on meaning; 'the good habit' or 'a good habit.' 'Taking regular walks' is the correct collocation (IDs 13 and 22). Suggestion: learn common collocations: 'take a walk' or 'take regular walks.'

× I think the main reason is that the environment in park is perfect since there are great greeneries and flowers where it's arrows can make people feel relaxed and relieve their stress.

✓ I think the main reason is that the environment in a park is perfect, since there is a lot of greenery and flowers that can make people feel relaxed and relieve their stress.

Multiple issues: use 'in a park' (article), 'greenery' is uncountable not 'greeneries', use 'there is' for uncountable noun (There be issue ID 3), and 'that can' rather than 'where it's arrows can' which is nonsensical. Replace with 'that can' for relative clause. Suggestion: use correct articles and uncountable/countable nouns and simpler relative clauses.

× What's more, there are many people in the past which makes the atmosphere great.

✓ What's more, there are often many people there, which makes the atmosphere great.

'in the past' is wrong here; probably meant 'around' or 'there' (location). 'Which' refers to the clause and needs a comma. Change to 'often many people there' to express usual presence. This fixes incorrect temporal phrase and pronoun/reference (IDs 11 and 12). Suggestion: use appropriate time/location phrases.

× I would like to go to the mountains, yes, since there are many small mountains around where I live, so I would always choose to climb in mountains to take a long walk.

✓ I would like to go to the mountains, since there are many small mountains around where I live, so I would always choose to climb them to take a long walk.

Replace 'climb in mountains' with 'climb them' or 'climb the mountains.' Pronoun/object needed after 'climb.' This is a sentence structure and incorrect preposition issue (IDs 11 and 26). Suggestion: use 'climb the mountains' or 'climb them.'

× It is a challenging but adventurous experience for me.

✓ It is a challenging but adventurous experience for me.

Sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. The -ing form 'challenging' is appropriate as adjective here.

× Where did you go for a walk lately?

✓ Where did you go for a walk recently?

'Lately' is acceptable but 'recently' is more natural with past simple questions. Both are similar; this is a stylistic suggestion rather than strict tense error.

× I went to a lake near my school recently.

✓ I went to a lake near my school recently.

This sentence is correct in past tense; no grammatical change needed.

× Yeah, I had worked there with my best friends.

✓ Yeah, I went there with my best friends.

Using past perfect 'had worked' is incorrect here; simple past 'went' fits the sequence. If the meaning was that they worked there earlier than another past event, past perfect would be used, but context indicates simple past. This fixes past tense misuse (ID 5).

× We chatted together around the lake and enjoying the bird singing and the arrogance of flowers.

✓ We chatted around the lake and enjoyed the birds singing and the fragrance of the flowers.

Parallel structure: use past tense 'enjoyed' to match 'chatted.' 'Bird singing' should be 'birds singing' and 'arrogance of flowers' is incorrect — likely 'fragrance' or 'aroma.' This corrects tense, plurality, and word choice (IDs 5, 1, 13). Suggestion: keep verb tenses consistent and choose correct nouns.

× It's a great experience for me to release my stress.

✓ It was a great experience for me to relieve my stress.

Use past tense 'was' to match 'I went' earlier and 'relieve' rather than 'release' stress. 'Relieve stress' is the correct collocation. This fixes tense and word choice (IDs 5 and 13). Suggestion: use appropriate collocations and keep tense consistent.