Walking— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be concise and directly answer the question first, then give one or two clear supporting details. Avoid filler words (uh, I don't say that) and repetition. Use a simple topic sentence such as “Not really” or “No, I don't walk a lot,” then explain why (e.g., work responsibilities) with one linking phrase.

Ejemplo: Not really. I don't walk a lot because I'm currently doing an internship in a medical laboratory where I mostly stand at my workstation. As a result, I rarely have time for long walks during the day.

Sugerencia: Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then give specific details and use linking words. Correct small vocabulary errors (pupa → papa/dad) and finish your sentences. Mention frequency and a memorable detail to sound natural.

Ejemplo: Yes, I often went for walks as a child. Before school most mornings my father, my sister and I would walk to the nearby park; I remember the cold winter mornings and how calm and peaceful everything felt.

Sugerencia: Give a clear, direct answer and use accurate vocabulary. Replace unclear words (bark barks → parks; shirts → shuts) and add one or two specific reasons with linking words like “because” or “for example.” Keep it to two or three sentences for clarity.

Ejemplo: People like walking in parks because parks connect us with nature and help us relax. For example, seeing trees and a clear sky can calm the mind and reduce stress, so many people go there to unwind.

Sugerencia: Answer directly using the conditional correctly (“I would like to”). Be specific about the place and give one or two reasons. Avoid repetition and filler words. Use linking words like “because” to explain why you chose that place.

Ejemplo: If I had the chance, I would like to take a long walk along the seaside in Istanbul because of its beautiful views and vibrant atmosphere. I imagine walking by the Bosphorus at sunset would be relaxing and very picturesque.

Sugerencia: Begin with a clear past-tense sentence naming the place, then add one specific detail and a reason. Avoid repeating phrases (“in my society”) and filler words. Keep sentences grammatical and finish them properly.

Ejemplo: Recently I went for a walk in the park inside my residential area. The park was peaceful with pleasant views and fresh air, which helped me relax and reduce stress.

× I don't say that I do walk a lot, but uh, currently I am doing an internship at Chutai lab in medical laboratory.

✓ I wouldn't say that I walk a lot, but currently I am doing an internship at Chutai Lab in a medical laboratory.

The original sentence uses an awkward structure 'I don't say that I do walk' which is unidiomatic (sentence structure error). Also articles and capitalization needed fixing ('Chutai lab' -> 'Chutai Lab', 'in medical laboratory' -> 'in a medical laboratory'). Suggestion: use the conditional negative 'I wouldn't say' to express understatement and include the article 'a' before 'medical laboratory'.

× Uh, so there I don't, I still don't say that I do walk, but there we have work in which we have to stand all the time, like if I'm doing.

✓ There I still wouldn't say that I walk a lot, but our work there requires us to stand all the time, for example when I am performing tasks.

This sentence has several structure problems and repetitions ('I don't, I still don't say that I do walk' and a trailing fragment 'like if I'm doing'). Rephrase to a clear structure: 'I still wouldn't say that I walk a lot' and use 'requires us to stand' for the job requirement. Provide a complete example clause 'when I am performing tasks'.

× From my childhood memory, I still remember before going to the school in the morning, I used to go on a walk with my family, my pupa and my sister in the park which is in our area and it.

✓ From my childhood memories, I remember that before going to school in the morning, I used to go for a walk with my parents and my sister in the park near our home.

Problems: tense and awkward phrasing. 'From my childhood memory' should be plural 'memories'. 'Before going to the school' should be 'before going to school' (no article). 'Go on a walk' is acceptable but 'go for a walk' is more natural. 'My pupa' is likely 'parents' or 'papa' — changed to 'parents'. 'Park which is in our area and it.' is an incomplete clause. Suggestion: use 'used to' for habitual past actions and simplify to 'park near our home'.

× It was the morning of winters and everything seemed so calm and.

✓ It was a winter morning and everything seemed so calm.

Fragment and incorrect phrase 'morning of winters'. Use 'a winter morning' and remove the trailing 'and' to complete the sentence. This fixes sentence structure and noun phrase order.

× I think bark barks are the symbol of nature where we can see clear sky in green tree with give calm to mind and I think it shirts our brain down from overthinking or stress.

✓ I think parks are a symbol of nature, where we can see clear skies and green trees that calm the mind, and I think they help quiet our brains to reduce overthinking and stress.

Many word-choice and adjective/adverb errors: 'bark barks' is incorrect — should be 'parks'. 'Clear sky' -> plural 'clear skies'. 'Green tree' -> 'green trees'. 'With give calm to mind' is ungrammatical; use 'that calm the mind' (adjective clause). 'Shirts our brain down' is wrong; intended meaning is 'quiet our brains' or 'calm our minds'. Suggest using 'help quiet our brains' and 'reduce overthinking and stress'.

× It is best for stress relief as well.

✓ It is also great for stress relief.

Original is understandable but slightly awkward. Replacing with 'It is also great for stress relief' creates a more natural, fluent sentence.

× If I had a chance, I will like to go on the walk at any beach or seaside, uh, apart from my own country.

✓ If I had the chance, I would like to go for a walk on a beach or by the seaside outside my country.

Conditional sentence mixing: 'If I had a chance' (second conditional) should pair with 'I would like', not 'I will like' (future). Also use 'go for a walk' and 'on a beach' or 'by the seaside' and 'outside my country' for clarity.

× If I want to walk in somewhere else, I will like to walk on the near the seaside in Istanbul with the beautiful view and vibrant light and aesthetic.

✓ If I want to walk somewhere else, I would like to walk near the seaside in Istanbul, enjoying the beautiful views, vibrant lights, and aesthetic atmosphere.

Problems: conditional forms inconsistent ('If I want... I will like'), extra articles ('on the near the seaside'), and awkward listing. Use 'If I want to walk somewhere else' with 'I would like' to match hypothetical tone, remove redundant articles, and make nouns plural and parallel: 'beautiful views, vibrant lights, and an aesthetic atmosphere.'

× Recently I went to a park which is located in inside my society in my society for a walk.

✓ Recently I went for a walk in a park located inside my housing community.

Redundancy and awkward phrasing: 'located in inside my society in my society' repeats and is unidiomatic. 'Housing community' or 'my housing complex' is clearer than 'my society'. Use 'went for a walk in a park located inside my housing community.'

× The views are very aesthetic, peaceful, uh, which release the stress as we breathe the fresh air.

✓ The views are very aesthetic and peaceful, which helps relieve stress as we breathe the fresh air.

'Which release the stress' is ungrammatical subject-verb agreement and word choice: 'views' (plural) with relative clause should lead to 'help relieve stress' or 'which helps relieve stress' depending on intended subject; here the whole idea 'the views... which helps relieve stress' is acceptable with singular idea, so use 'helps relieve stress'. Also use 'relieve' rather than 'release' for stress. Suggestion: 'The views are very aesthetic and peaceful, which helps relieve stress as we breathe the fresh air.'