Walking— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Cải thiện độ trôi chảy và cấu trúc câu: tránh lặp từ 'uh' quá nhiều, sử dụng câu chủ đề rõ ràng và ngắn gọn, sửa ngữ pháp (ví dụ: 'my work requires me to walk a lot'; 'I prefer running in my free time'). Thêm liên từ khi cần để mạch lạc và giữ tối đa 3-4 câu.

Ejemplo: Yes, I walk a lot because my job requires me to be on my feet most of the day. However, in my free time I prefer running to walking because it is more intense and helps me stay fit.

Sugerencia: Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và trật tự từ, dùng câu đơn giản rõ ràng: tránh lặp 'I didn't' và dùng thì quá khứ đúng ('when I was a child'). Nêu rõ hoạt động cụ thể và dùng liên từ để mạch lạc.

Ejemplo: No, I didn't walk often as a child. Instead, I usually hung out with friends in my hometown to play sports and do other outdoor activities.

Sugerencia: Tránh từ thừa và sửa cấu trúc: dùng từ chính xác (e.g. 'provide a lot of fresh air' not 'mandatory'). Giữ ý chính ngắn gọn, giải thích cụ thể lý do và kết quả. Hạn chế tiếng ậm ừ.

Ejemplo: Personally, I think people walk in parks because parks provide fresh air and less pollution. As a result, walking there helps people relax and feel more comfortable, which is good for both physical and mental health.

Sugerencia: Làm rõ ý và dùng thì điều kiện đúng: bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng ('If I had the chance, I would...'). Nêu lý do cụ thể và dùng liên từ để liên kết. Tránh lẫn lộn từ 'working walking'.

Ejemplo: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk with my girlfriend because we could talk about our daily lives and enjoy each other's company in a relaxed setting.

Sugerencia: Sử dụng thì quá khứ phù hợp và câu ngắn gọn: 'Recently I went to the park' hoặc 'Recently I had a meeting in the park.' Giải thích ngắn gọn lý do (e.g. meeting to discuss work and life). Hạn chế 'uh' và cấu trúc dài lê thê.

Ejemplo: Recently I went to the park because my friend and I decided to hold a meeting there. We worked and talked about our daily lives in a relaxed environment.

× Yes, I do uh, because uh, my working, uh, require me to work uh, a lot, Uh, but in my free time, I prefer uh to running instead of, uh, working.

✓ Yes, I do, because my work requires me to work a lot, but in my free time I prefer running instead of working.

Several issues: 'my working' is incorrect noun usage; use 'my work'. 'require' must agree with singular subject 'work', so use 'requires' (subject-verb agreement). 'to running' is wrong form; after 'prefer' use gerund 'running' or 'to run' (prefer running / prefer to run). Also unnecessary filler words 'uh' removed and comma usage simplified. Suggestion: identify the subject and choose correct verb form, and use 'prefer' with consistent form. ID:26

× No, I didn't, I didn't, and when I was try I often hanging out with my friend in my hometown for the purpose that playing sport and outdoor activity except the working.

✓ No, I didn't. When I was young, I often hung out with my friends in my hometown to play sports and do outdoor activities, except when I was working.

Problems: 'when I was try' is incorrect word; intended 'when I was young'. 'I often hanging out' mixes tenses and lacks auxiliary; use past simple 'I often hung out'. 'my friend' -> plural 'my friends' fits context. 'for the purpose that playing sport' is awkward; use 'to play sports'. 'outdoor activity' plural 'activities'. 'except the working' should be 'except when I was working'. Suggestion: use past simple consistently for past habits and choose correct collocations (play sports, do activities). ID:5

× Uh, personally, I think the park, uh, we have, uh, mandatory, uh, is create, uh, a lots of fresh air and no air pollution.

✓ Personally, I think the parks we have here mainly create lots of fresh air and have no air pollution.

Errors: 'we have' placement and 'mandatory' misused; 'mainly' or 'generally' conveys intended meaning. 'is create' wrong verb form; use 'create'. 'a lots of' incorrect article and plural; use 'lots of' or 'a lot of'. 'no air pollution' fits but better with 'have no air pollution'. Suggestion: remove filler words and reorder phrase for clarity, use correct verb forms and quantifier. ID:13

× It's, uh, make it make people feel relaxed and comfortable to working to work.

✓ It makes people feel relaxed and comfortable when they are at work or when they go for a walk.

Problems: 'It's make it make' is ungrammatical repetition; correct is 'It makes'. 'to working to work' is incorrect form and unclear. I replaced with clearer clause 'when they are at work or when they go for a walk' to fit likely meaning. Suggestion: use simple subject-verb agreement 'It makes' and use gerund or infinitive correctly depending on context. ID:26

× When I have a chance to, uh, take a long walk and I think when I working walking with my girlfriend or a native, uh, that, uh, we can have a long talk about daily life.

✓ If I have the chance to take a long walk, I would like to walk with my girlfriend or a local; we can have a long talk about daily life.

Issues: 'When I have a chance to, uh, take a long walk and I think when I working walking' is confusing and mixes tenses and forms. 'working walking' is wrong; use 'walk' or 'go walking'. 'a native' should be 'a local' if meaning a local person. Also conditional 'If I have the chance' or 'I would like' fits the question. Suggestion: choose clear conditional structure and correct verb forms. ID:10

× Recently I have an opportunity to work, uh, in the park, uh, because my friend and I, uh, have a meeting, uh, so that, uh, we decide to work in the park for the purpose, uh, talking about daily life and working.

✓ Recently I had the opportunity to meet in the park because my friend and I had a meeting, so we decided to meet in the park to talk about daily life and work.

Problems: 'I have an opportunity' should be past 'I had an opportunity' if referring to a recent completed event. 'to work in the park' seems wrong; context implies meeting. 'have a meeting' -> past 'had a meeting'. 'we decide' -> past 'decided'. 'for the purpose, talking' -> 'to talk'. 'working' -> 'work' or 'our work'. Suggestion: use consistent past tense for completed recent events and use verbs that match intended meaning (meet, talk about work). ID:5