Building— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Improve clarity and grammar, be more concise, and use one or two supporting details. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add a specific detail (location or example). Use correct tense and natural phrasing.

Ejemplo: Yes. I live near Brisbane’s CBD, so when I look across the river I can see many tall buildings on the skyline, including several office towers and residential high-rises.

Sugerencia: Clarify and correct grammar, avoid redundant or unclear phrases, and keep it within a few sentences. Start with a clear yes/no and follow with a brief reason linked coherently. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

Ejemplo: Yes, I often photograph buildings because I'm a structural engineer. I enjoy capturing their appearance and studying details that show how they resist vertical and lateral loads.

Sugerencia: Be specific and correct names, avoid vague or incorrect phrases, and organize ideas with linking words. Provide one or two clear examples with brief reasons why you want to visit them.

Ejemplo: Yes. I would like to visit Queen's Wharf in Brisbane because of its modern design, and I also hope to see the new One World Trade Center in New York to appreciate its symbolic architecture.

Sugerencia: Correct pronunciation/typos (e.g., 'I don't think so'), be concise and use clearer reasons with linking words. Give a direct topic sentence then two concise supporting reasons (space, convenience, etc.).

Ejemplo: I don't think so. I'd prefer a medium-rise apartment or a house because very tall buildings require large core areas and services, which reduces usable living space and can be less convenient.

× Yeah, I'm living in Brisbane right now and really close to the CBD, so looking across the river I can see so many tall buildings across the skyline.

✓ Yeah, I live in Brisbane right now and am really close to the CBD, so looking across the river I can see many tall buildings on the skyline.

Use simple present 'I live' for a current permanent or long-term situation rather than present continuous 'I'm living'. Also change 'so many' to 'many' for conciseness and use 'on the skyline' instead of 'across the skyline' for natural preposition usage.

× Yes I do. I'm a structural engineer, outdoor specifically working in the instance.

✓ Yes I do. I'm a structural engineer, working outdoors specifically in this area.

'Outdoor' is an adjective; the correct adverbial form is 'outdoors'. 'Working' as present participle is fine but the phrase 'in the instance' is incorrect; use 'in this area' or similar. This corrects word form and phrase choice.

× I love buildings not because of their outside looks like their aesthetic values, but also try to investigate how they work to resist the load both vertically and laterally.

✓ I love buildings not because of their external appearance or aesthetic value, but because I also try to investigate how they resist loads both vertically and laterally.

Replace informal conjunction and phrasing: 'outside looks like their aesthetic values' is ungrammatical. Use 'not because of their external appearance or aesthetic value' and include 'because' to connect the contrasting clause. Also adjust verb forms to 'they resist loads' for clarity and correctness.

× Yeah, there are so many iconic buildings around the world that I would like to visit one day.

✓ Yeah, there are so many iconic buildings around the world that I would like to visit one day.

Sentence is already grammatically correct. It uses present tense 'there are' appropriately to refer to existing buildings and 'would like' for a desire about the future.

× For example, in Brisbane, a haven visit that new building called Queen's Wharf that housed the Newcastle.

✓ For example, in Brisbane, I haven't visited that new building called Queen's Wharf that houses the Newcastle.

Original sentence has multiple issues: 'a haven visit' seems to be a mishearing of 'I haven't visited' and 'housed the Newcastle' should be 'houses the Newcastle' if present fact. Correct pronoun and auxiliary usage to express the intended meaning.

× The other famous building I want to visit is the new World Trade Center and the one replacing the one that got taken out.

✓ The other famous building I want to visit is the new World Trade Center, the one that replaced the one that was taken down.

Use simple past passive 'was taken down' for the earlier building and 'replaced' for the action that created the new building. This clarifies tense and passive construction.

× MI don't think so.

✓ No, I don't think so.

'MI' is a typo; use 'I' and include an appropriate negation 'No,' at the start to sound natural.

× I would prefer a medium rise or even a flat house because once you get taller and taller you need the core, which is like the main scale of the body.

✓ I would prefer a mid-rise or even a detached house because as buildings get taller you need a core, which is like the main structural spine of the building.

'Medium rise' is better expressed as 'mid-rise'. 'Flat house' is unclear—likely 'detached house'. 'Once you get taller and taller' should be impersonal 'as buildings get taller'. 'Main scale of the body' is unidiomatic; use 'main structural spine' to convey meaning.

× You know it's hard. It's going to get bigger and bigger which means you're going to have less usable space.

✓ You know, it's difficult. It will get bigger and bigger, which means you'll have less usable space.

'Hard' is acceptable but 'difficult' is more formal. Use future 'will' consistently and contract 'you're' to 'you'll' for natural spoken future. Add comma before 'which' for correct clause separation.