Building— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more fluent and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid hesitation sounds (uh), correct grammar (e.g. 'an apartment'), and complete the thought. Add one specific detail about the buildings and use a linking word if needed.

Ejemplo: Yes. There are several tall buildings near my home in Surrey. For example, there is a very tall apartment complex less than ten minutes away, and I often see its lights when I travel to Vancouver.

Sugerencia: Finish your idea and avoid repetition. Give one or two specific reasons or examples and use linking words to connect them. Keep to 2–3 sentences and use varied vocabulary (e.g. 'architecture', 'facades').

Ejemplo: Yes, I do because I'm fond of photography. I particularly enjoy photographing buildings for their interesting architecture and unique facades, and I often focus on patterns of light and shadow to make my photos more dramatic.

Sugerencia: Organize your answer with a clear topic sentence, concise reasons, and one specific detail (name or feature of the building). Reduce filler words and repeat information less. Use a linking word to show sequence (e.g. 'however', 'so').

Ejemplo: Yes. There's a very famous building in Vancouver called [name of building] that I want to visit. I planned to go last year but couldn't because of my schedule, however I have arranged to visit with friends this month and I plan to take photos of its distinctive glass facade.

Sugerencia: Avoid repeating the same idea and correct unclear phrases ('child view'). Start with a clear statement, give 1–2 specific reasons, and use linking words (e.g. 'because', 'for example'). Improve vocabulary (e.g. 'panoramic view', 'architecture').

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because it offers panoramic views of the city and excellent light for photography. For example, a high-floor apartment would allow me to capture sunrise photos of the skyline and appreciate the building's modern architecture.

× I live in Surrey, so uh, near my home there is a apartment, uh, it's very tall and whenever I go Vancouver and, uh, to.

✓ I live in Surrey, so near my home there is an apartment; it's very tall, and whenever I go to Vancouver...

Use 'an' before a vowel sound and 'apartment' is singular countable so requires an article; also include the missing preposition 'to' before 'Vancouver' and fix word order and punctuation to make the sentence grammatical. Suggestion: Use 'an apartment' and include necessary prepositions and punctuation to separate clauses.

× whenever I go Vancouver and, uh, to.

✓ whenever I go to Vancouver.

English requires the preposition 'to' before place names when describing movement toward them. Also remove the extra 'and' which makes the phrase incomplete. Suggestion: Use 'go to [place]' for movement toward a location.

× I love to take photos of buildings because they.

✓ I love to take photos of buildings because they look interesting.

The sentence ends abruptly with a dependent clause 'because they' lacking a main idea. Complete the thought by specifying what 'they' do or are (for example, 'they look interesting'). Suggestion: Always complete 'because' clauses with a clear reason.

× there is a building, most very famous building in Vancouver.

✓ there is a building, the most famous building in Vancouver.

Use 'the' for a specific or unique noun ('the most famous building'); remove redundant words ('most very' is ungrammatical). Also use correct superlative form 'most famous'. Suggestion: Use 'the most famous' for superlative and avoid stacking intensifiers.

× I wanted to go there last year, but because of my schedule I wasn't able to go.

✓ I wanted to go there last year, but because of my schedule I wasn't able to go.

This sentence is grammatically correct in past tense and needs no change. Included here to indicate it was checked. Suggestion: None.

× So, uh, this month I have planned to go there with my friends.

✓ This month I have planned to go there with my friends.

The original has filler words but the tense 'have planned' is acceptable for a planned near-future action. Removed filler for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'I have planned' or 'I am planning to go' for near-future plans.

× So yeah, I will go there and I will take some pictures of the building.

✓ So yeah, I will go there and take some pictures of the building.

Repeating 'I will' is not incorrect but can be streamlined by omitting the second 'I will'. The future tense is appropriate for a planned action. Suggestion: Combine verbs with a single auxiliary for conciseness.

× I want to live in a tall building because I, uh, love to take photography.

✓ I want to live in a tall building because I love photography.

'Take photography' is incorrect collocation; use 'love photography' or 'love taking photographs'. Also remove unnecessary filler 'uh' and commas. Suggestion: Use 'love photography' or 'love taking photos'.

× I want to take pictures of sunshine from a child view.

✓ I want to take pictures of the sunshine from a child's viewpoint.

Use the definite article 'the' with 'sunshine' in this context; use possessive form 'child's' and the correct noun 'viewpoint' or 'perspective'. Suggestion: Use 'a child's viewpoint' or 'from a child's perspective'.

× So yeah, I love the architecture of a tall buildings, how we can look at town.

✓ So yeah, I love the architecture of tall buildings and how we can look at the town.

Mixing 'a' with plural 'buildings' is incorrect; remove 'a' or make singular. Also use conjunction 'and' instead of comma splice and include the definite article 'the' before 'town'. Suggestion: Use 'architecture of tall buildings' or 'the architecture of a tall building' and join clauses with 'and'.

× Uh, the view is just so good, Yeah.

✓ The view is just so good.

Remove filler 'Uh' and the unnecessary capitalized 'Yeah' at the end; punctuation should be consistent. The sentence is fine when cleaned up. Suggestion: Avoid filler words and keep a single clear sentence.