Building— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and use a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail with a linking word. Avoid redundancy (e.g., “one story” and “they do not have top story floors” repeat the same idea).

Ejemplo: No, there aren't any tall buildings near my home because it's mainly a low-density residential area. For example, most houses are single-storey bungalows, so the skyline is fairly flat.

Sugerencia: Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific examples and a linking phrase. Avoid repeating phrases like “I love” and be careful with terms (use “ancient” rather than “prehistoric” for built architecture).

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoy photographing buildings because I'm fascinated by architecture. For instance, I often photograph modern glass facades and ancient stone churches, as they offer very different textures and shapes.

Sugerencia: Begin with a clear statement and then give two concise, specific reasons connected by a linking word. Correct minor grammar and be precise with details (e.g., mention which statue or architectural feature).

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to visit the White House in Washington, D.C., because I admire its neoclassical façade. In particular, I'm interested in the building's marble details and the historical statues on the grounds.

Sugerencia: Answer directly, then give one clear, specific reason with a linking word. Remove repetition and correct tense/wording (e.g., “As a child” not “As a kid I I am not sure why”).

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because I grew up in low-rise houses and I enjoy the views from higher floors. For example, living on the 15th floor would give me a panoramic city view and more natural light.

× No, there are no tall buildings near my home because my home is a residential area and most of the buildings near my area are one story buildings, meaning they only have a ground floor and they do not have top story floors.

✓ No, there are no tall buildings near my home because my home is in a residential area and most of the buildings near my area are one-story buildings, meaning they only have a ground floor and do not have upper floors.

The phrase 'in a residential area' is the correct prepositional phrase (Incorrect use of prepositions -> ID 11). 'One story buildings' should be hyphenated as 'one-story buildings' and treated as plural (Singular and plural issue -> ID 1). 'Top story floors' is awkward and redundant; 'upper floors' is the correct noun phrase. Also remove the unnecessary second 'they' for clarity and concision.

× Yes, I like to take photos of buildings because I am interested in architecture. I am interested in modern architecture and prehistoric architecture. I love the way the buildings look. I love the vast variety of beauty they have.

✓ Yes, I like to take photos of buildings because I am interested in architecture. I am interested in modern and ancient architecture. I love the way buildings look and the wide variety of beauty they display.

'Prehistoric architecture' is usually used for very ancient periods but 'ancient' is more natural here; this is an adjective choice issue (Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs -> ID 13). 'Vast variety of beauty' is awkward; 'wide variety of beauty' or 'variety of styles' is clearer. 'They have' is less natural than 'they display' when referring to appearance.

× Yes, I would like to visit the White House in America internationally because I find it interesting the the way it looks.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit the White House in the United States because I find the way it looks interesting.

'In America internationally' is redundant and unidiomatic; use 'in the United States' or simply 'the United States' (Incorrect use of prepositions -> ID 11). The word order 'I find it interesting the the way it looks' is incorrect; correct order is 'I find the way it looks interesting' (Sentence structure errors -> ID 26). Also remove the duplicated 'the'.

× I also have a keen interest in the marble shapes and the statue.

✓ I also have a keen interest in the marble shapes and statues.

'The statue' implies a specific statue already known; using the plural 'statues' or 'a statue' depends on meaning. Here 'statues' matches 'marble shapes' as a general interest. This is an incorrect article/number choice (Article errors -> ID 22 and Singular and plural issue -> ID 1).

× Yes, I would love to live in a tall building because all my life I've always lived in a low rise type of arrangement, but I've always found stairs and elevators interesting.

✓ Yes, I would love to live in a tall building because all my life I've lived in low-rise housing, and I've always found stairs and elevators interesting.

'Low rise type of arrangement' is wordy and unidiomatic; 'low-rise housing' is concise (Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs -> ID 13). Using both 'all my life' and 'always' is repetitive; keep one. Hyphenate 'low-rise'.

× As a kid I I am not sure why but I find high rises to be more exciting.

✓ As a kid, I was not sure why, but I found high-rises more exciting.

Tense inconsistency: the speaker refers to childhood, so past tense 'was' and 'found' are correct (Past tense issue -> ID 5). Remove the duplicated 'I'. Hyphenate 'high-rises'. Also add commas for clarity (Sentence structure errors -> ID 26).