Building— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise, avoid repetition and use clearer sentence structure. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one specific detail with a linking word. Reduce filler phrases like "I could say" and remove the contradictory "and...but" structure.

Ejemplo: Yes. There are many tall buildings near my home because I live in the capital city. Although I don't live downtown, the neighborhood around me has several high-rise apartments and office towers, so the skyline is quite prominent.

Sugerencia: Give a clear, concise statement and one or two specific details using linking words. Remove hesitations and repeated words. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., "occasionally," "unique skyscrapers") and explain why you take the photos.

Ejemplo: Yes, I take photos occasionally because I'm a city person who enjoys architecture. For example, when I see a unique skyscraper with an unusual design, I usually photograph it to remember the detail and share it later with friends.

Sugerencia: Answer directly naming the building, then give specific reasons using coherent linking words. Remove repetitions and fix grammar (e.g., "I've never actually been on it"). Add one precise expected experience to show depth.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to visit the Canton Tower in Guangzhou. I grew up near it and have seen it many times, but I've never been up to the observation deck; I want to go to enjoy the panoramic city views and feel the height from above.

Sugerencia: Give a concise topic sentence, then support with specific reasons and one example. Avoid vague phrases like "blue moment" and conversational fillers such as "you know?" Explain what aspects of living in a tall building appeal to you (views, quiet, amenities).

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because of the spectacular city views and the peaceful atmosphere above street level. For instance, I imagine enjoying sunsets from a high balcony and appreciating less street noise compared with living on a low floor.

× Yeah, I could say there are many tall buildings near my house and I live in the capital of a country.

✓ Yes, I would say there are many tall buildings near my house, and I live in the capital of the country.

Grammar problem types: 1 (Singular and plural issue) and 22 (Article errors). 'Yeah' is informal; 'Yes' is more appropriate. 'I could say' is awkward for a simple statement; 'I would say' or 'I can say' fits better. 'the capital of a country' sounds generic; given context, use 'the capital of the country' or 'a capital city' depending on meaning. Use commas to join clauses correctly.

× And I could say even though I don't live in the center of the city, but around where I live, there are still many tall buildings.

✓ Even though I don't live in the centre of the city, there are still many tall buildings around where I live.

Incorrect conjunction use (16) and sentence structure errors (26): Do not combine 'even though' with 'but'—they serve the same contrasting function. Remove 'but' and reposition phrases for clarity. Also 'around where I live' flows better after 'there are still many tall buildings'.

× Yes, I take photos occasionally and I feel like that I'm kind of a city person, so every time when I see some unique and special rare like some special skyscrapers, I tend to to take a picture of them to record the memories.

✓ Yes, I take photos occasionally, and I feel like I'm kind of a city person, so whenever I see unique or rare skyscrapers I tend to take pictures of them to record the memories.

Present tense and redundancy issues (6, 26): Remove extra 'to' and redundant words ('special' repeated). Use 'whenever' rather than 'every time when'. Use plural 'pictures' for repeated actions. 'Unique or rare skyscrapers' is clearer and more concise.

× So my childhood was there. I've seen it for so many times, but I've never actually went on it.

✓ My childhood was spent there. I've seen it many times, but I've never actually gone up it.

Past tense issue (5) and verb form (9): 'My childhood was there' is awkward; 'My childhood was spent there' is natural. 'I've never actually went' is incorrect because after present perfect 'have' you need past participle 'gone' (verb in past participle form). Use 'gone up it' or better 'been up it'/'been up the tower' to describe visiting the tower.

× And I just want to experience how it is to be on there and see the.

✓ I just want to experience what it's like to be up there and see the view.

Sentence structure errors (26) and missing object (23): 'to be on there' is unidiomatic; use 'be up there'. The sentence ended with an incomplete phrase 'see the.' Add 'view' to complete the thought. Use 'what it's like' for natural expression.

× Yes, I really want to experience how it is like to live in a tall building because you can see all the spectacular views and the city, the blue moment and everything.

✓ Yes, I really want to experience what it's like to live in a tall building because you can see spectacular views of the city, the blue hour, and so on.

Present tense issue (6) and incorrect phrase (13): Use 'what it's like' rather than 'how it is like'. 'Spectacular views of the city' is clearer than 'the city, the blue moment'. 'Blue moment' is nonstandard; 'blue hour' is the common term for twilight. Use 'and so on' or 'and everything' more naturally as 'and so on'.

× I just feel like it's so pretty and live in the moment, you know?

✓ I just feel like it's so beautiful and I can live in the moment, you know?

Sentence structure and word choice (26,13): 'Pretty' is informal; 'beautiful' fits better describing views. The clause needs a subject and modal: 'I can live in the moment' or 'I can be in the moment'. Add 'I' before 'can' to make a complete sentence.