Travelling— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Make the response clearer and more grammatical: start with a direct topic sentence, limit to 3–4 short sentences, use linking words and specific details. Avoid repetition and incorrect words (e.g. 'singing') and choose correct prepositions (e.g. 'when I travel').

Ejemplo: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by bus or car. I especially enjoy large, beautiful views because they help me relax and feel more comfortable. For example, I like watching fields and mountains pass by, which makes long journeys seem shorter.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and simply, using correct grammar and clear reasons. Say whether you take photos and explain when it is safe or unsafe. Keep to 2–3 sentences and use linking words like 'but' or 'so'.

Ejemplo: Not usually, because taking photos while in a moving car can be unsafe. However, I often take pictures when I get out of the car or when the vehicle is parked, because then I can focus and capture better shots.

Sugerencia: Give a clear preference statement and support it with specific reasons and examples. Reduce hesitation sounds and repeat fillers, and use precise vocabulary (e.g. 'peaceful', 'fresh air', 'sense of strength'). Keep answers to 2–3 concise sentences.

Ejemplo: I prefer the mountains because they make me feel peaceful and energised. For example, hiking to a mountain top gives me fresh air and a sense of achievement, which helps me relax and feel stronger.

× Actually while the travelling I enjoy the look at window specially there are large stunning also that makes me more comfortable also relaxing so that's why I enjoy the singing while the travelling outside of window.

✓ Actually, while travelling I enjoy looking out of the window, especially at the large, stunning views; they make me feel more comfortable and relaxed, so that's why I enjoy sightseeing while travelling.

Issues combined: incorrect article use ('the travelling' should be 'travelling' or 'the trip'), incorrect verb forms ('enjoy the look at window' -> 'enjoy looking out of the window'), word order and word choice ('specially there are large stunning' -> 'especially at the large, stunning views'), adjective order and punctuation, and repetition/awkward phrasing ('also relaxing' and 'enjoy the singing' likely intended 'sightseeing' or 'seeing'). Suggestion: use 'enjoy + gerund' for activities (enjoy looking, enjoy sightseeing), use 'out of the window' or 'out the window', place adjectives before nouns and separate clauses with commas or semicolons to improve clarity.

× Actually, when I take a picture, especially traveling and outside, that's the bit unsafe. So but when I just outside like without any car anyway, the the bus like when I just upside on the standing I I, I, I would like to take PhD because the taking picture.

✓ Actually, taking pictures while travelling in a moving car can be a bit unsafe. But when I am outside, not in a car or on a stationary bus, I would like to take photos.

Problems: incorrect sentence structure and tense, wrong word choices ('that's the bit unsafe' -> 'can be a bit unsafe'), pronoun/verb form errors ('when I just outside' -> 'when I am outside'), repetition and nonsense ('take PhD' is incorrect; intended 'take photos'), and excessive filler words. Suggestions: simplify sentences, use 'taking pictures' or 'take photos', use 'can be' for general statements about safety, and ensure subject and verb are present ('I am outside').

× Oh, actually I would prefer uh, mountains because, you know, I am there. I feel more comfortable, uh, national energy of mountains. Uh, even when I, umm, uh, the top of mountains, I feel more strong because type of mountain is uh, the powerful.

✓ Oh, actually I prefer the mountains because when I am there I feel more comfortable and I can sense the natural energy of the mountains. Even when I am at the top of a mountain, I feel stronger because the mountains are powerful.

Issues: article use ('the top of mountains' -> 'the top of a mountain' or 'at the top of the mountains'), preposition errors ('at the top' not just 'the top'), incorrect word choice ('national energy' -> 'natural energy', 'more strong' -> 'stronger', 'type of mountain is the powerful' -> 'the mountains are powerful'). Suggestions: use comparative form 'stronger', use correct articles ('a mountain' or 'the mountains'), and choose the correct adjective 'natural' instead of 'national'.