Travelling— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and avoid fillers ("you know", "like"). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific supporting detail and a brief coping strategy using a linking word (e.g. "so" or "therefore"). Keep to 2–4 sentences. Pronunciation of key words (carsick, vomit, distract) should be clear.

Ejemplo: I usually avoid looking out of the window because I get carsick, so I close my eyes and listen to music to distract myself. This helps me stay calm and prevents nausea while travelling.

Sugerencia: Correct small errors and remove repetition. Use a clear topic sentence, then a reason with a linking word ("because"), and finish with a brief comment. Replace vague phrases ("car seat") with accurate vocabulary ("carsick" or "motion sickness").

Ejemplo: I do take photos, but only when the vehicle has stopped because I get carsick if I try to photograph while it’s moving. Therefore I wait until we stop, even though I sometimes wish I could capture the view on the move.

Sugerencia: Organize into a clear preference statement followed by two concise, specific reasons. Avoid fillers and grammatical errors ("temperature there is have low" → "it's cooler"). Use linking words ("because", "also") to connect ideas. Keep it within 2–4 sentences and use precise vocabulary (sunburned, cooler, refreshing).

Ejemplo: I prefer the mountains because it’s much cooler and the air feels fresher. Also, I’m sensitive to strong sunlight and often get sunburned at the seaside, so the mountains suit me better.

× I will try to close my eyes and relax, listen to music to, you know, distract myself from the scenery.

✓ I try to close my eyes and relax, and listen to music to, you know, distract myself from the scenery.

The original mixes future 'I will try' with habitual context; the rest of the sentence uses infinitive 'to distract' and gerund ideas. Use simple present 'I try' for habitual actions when talking about a general tendency. Also add 'and' to join parallel actions 'close my eyes and relax, and listen to music'. Suggestion: use consistent tense for habitual behavior.

× if I take try to take the photo while the car is moving I will get car seat for sure.

✓ if I try to take a photo while the car is moving, I will get carsick for sure.

The original had an accidental repetition 'take try to take' and used the incorrect noun 'car seat' instead of the adjective 'carsick'. Use 'try to take a photo' (infinitive) and 'carsick' (adjective) to describe becoming ill in a moving vehicle. Also add a comma before the conditional clause's result for clarity.

× I will try to close my eyes and relax, listen to music to, you know, distract myself from the scenery.

✓ I try to close my eyes and relax, and listen to music to, you know, distract myself from the scenery.

Redundant with earlier but here the issue is consistency: 'eyes' and 'music' are fine; main problem was tense consistency rather than number. Ensure singular/plural nouns are correct; no change needed for plurality but tense adjustment to simple present is required for habitual actions.

× I prefer the mountains because the atmosphere there is more refreshing and also the temperature there is have low because it's high.

✓ I prefer the mountains because the atmosphere there is more refreshing and the temperature is lower because it's higher up.

The original used 'is have low' which is ungrammatical. Use comparative 'lower' to compare temperatures and the phrase 'higher up' to explain altitude. Maintain present tense 'is' for general statements. Suggestion: use comparative adjective 'lower' after 'is' when comparing temperatures.

× You know, I umm, I realize the cool weather. Why at the sea there's a lot of direct sunlight and I get sunburned easily.

✓ You know, I, um, appreciate the cool weather. At the sea, there's a lot of direct sunlight and I get sunburned easily.

'I realize the cool weather' is awkward; 'appreciate' or 'enjoy' fits better. The sentence 'Why at the sea...' is a fragment; rewrite as two clauses: 'At the sea, there's...' to form a complete sentence. Also add commas for natural pauses. Suggestion: use appropriate verbs ('appreciate') and start clauses correctly to avoid fragments.