Travelling— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and fix errors (e.g., “Looking I looking” → delete extra word; “resonating with nature” is poetic but choose simpler phrasing like “connecting with nature”).

Ejemplo: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by bus or car. I enjoy watching the changing landscape because it relaxes me and reminds me of past trips, especially when I see forests or farmlands.

Sugerencia: Make sentences more natural and correct collocations. Use linking words to connect reasons and an example. Correct phrases like “significant amount of photos” (say “a lot of photos” or “many photos”) and “helps me relax these beautiful moments” (should be “helps me capture/relive these moments”).

Ejemplo: Yes, I take a lot of photos of the scenery outside the window because it helps me capture moments I want to remember. For example, when I travel through the countryside or mountains I often make short videos and take pictures to look back on later.

Sugerencia: Give a concise opinion plus one contrasting specific reason for each choice, using linking words (e.g., “however”, “on the other hand”). Avoid repeating the same idea. Aim for two to three sentences total.

Ejemplo: I don’t have a strong preference because I enjoy both. The mountains appeal to me for their peaceful walks and fresh air, while the sea attracts me for its vast views and relaxing waves; therefore, I like them equally.

× Yes, I often look out of the window at the scenery when traveling by a bus or a car.

✓ Yes, I often look out of the window at the scenery when traveling by bus or by car.

Use of articles with modes of transport: we normally say 'by bus' or 'by car' without 'a'. Also 'look out of the window' is acceptable but 'look out the window' is more common; here keeping 'out of the window' is fine. Suggest saying 'by bus or by car' or simply 'by bus or car' for natural English.

× Looking I looking out of the window gives me extreme joy as I love resonating with nature.

✓ Looking out of the window gives me great joy because I love connecting with nature.

Original sentence has repetition and wrong word order 'Looking I looking' and an incorrect verb 'resonating' in this context. 'Gives me great joy' is idiomatic; 'because' connects the clauses. Use 'connecting with nature' instead of 'resonating with nature' for clarity.

× It also brings back old memories.

✓ It also brings back old memories.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no article change needed. Included here only to indicate it meets the grammatical list and requires no correction.

× Yes, I take significant amount of photos of the scenery outside the window.

✓ Yes, I take a significant number of photos of the scenery outside the window.

'Amount' is used with uncountable nouns; 'photos' is countable, so use 'a significant number of' or 'a large number of' or 'a lot of' photos. Also adding 'a' before 'significant' is necessary.

× It helps me relax these beautiful moments.

✓ They help me relive these beautiful moments and help me relax.

Subject-verb mismatch and wrong verb choice: 'It helps me relax these beautiful moments' is ungrammatical. 'Photos' is plural so use 'They'. 'Relax these moments' is not idiomatic; use 'relive these beautiful moments' and 'help me relax' if you mean both effects.

× I'm extremely passionate about nature and I love reliving the old moments through the videos and photos, especially when I'm traveling through mountains or countryside.

✓ I'm extremely passionate about nature, and I love reliving old moments through videos and photos, especially when I'm traveling through the mountains or the countryside.

Minor article and plural consistency corrections: remove 'the' before 'old moments' and 'the' before 'videos and photos' is optional; add 'the' before 'mountains' and 'countryside' to be natural. Also use commas to separate clauses.

× I do not have a preference as I love both the mountains and the sea.

✓ I do not have a preference because I love both the mountains and the sea.

Grammatically correct, but 'as' is acceptable; 'because' is clearer for spoken English. No grammatical article errors here; sentence retained with minor stylistic suggestion.

× The calmness of the mountain excites me but the depth of the sea thrills me as well.

✓ The calmness of the mountains excites me, but the depth of the sea thrills me as well.

Consistency in singular/plural: 'mountain' should be 'mountains' to match 'the sea' as general references, or use 'a mountain' if referring to one. Also add a comma before 'but' for clarity.

× I cannot pick one as I love both of them equally and enjoy both of them.

✓ I cannot pick one because I love and enjoy them both equally.

Repetition: 'both of them' twice is redundant. Combine verbs and pronouns for conciseness: 'I love and enjoy them both equally.' 'Because' is clearer than 'as' in some contexts.