Travelling— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Reduce hesitation and repetition, give a clear topic sentence and one specific supporting detail. Use correct pronouns and concise phrasing. For example, avoid repeating words and unnecessary fillers ("I I", "and and"). Also correct minor grammar: use "when I travel by bus or car" and explain one clear reason (e.g., it relaxes me or prevents motion sickness).

Ejemplo: Yes. I always look out the window when I travel by bus or car because the changing scenery relaxes me and helps prevent motion sickness. For instance, seeing trees and buildings helps me focus on distant objects rather than screens.

Sugerencia: Remove fillers (uh, um) and repetitions, and organize the answer: state the habit, give two clear conditions when you take photos, and provide a short example. Use accurate vocabulary (e.g., "beautiful view" instead of "homage view").

Ejemplo: Yes, I often take photos of scenery outside the window, especially when my phone has enough battery and the view is new or particularly beautiful. For example, I took several pictures of a dramatic canyon last summer because I had full battery and it was a view I had never seen before.

Sugerencia: Give a direct preference sentence, then support it with two specific reasons using linking words (e.g., "because", "also"). Avoid vague words and unclear fillers. Correct tense (use present: "I like the mountains") and choose clear vocabulary (e.g., "snowfall", "fresh air").

Ejemplo: I prefer the mountains because I enjoy snow and peaceful nature. Also, the fresh air and hiking opportunities help me relax and exercise, so I often choose mountain trips for weekend getaways.

× Yes, I I always observe the scenery when you're traveling, when you travel through bus or car.

✓ Yes, I always observe the scenery when I travel by bus or car.

Error type: Present tense issue (ID 6). The original mixes second person 'you're traveling' with the speaker's experience and repeats pronouns. Use simple present 'I travel' for habitual actions and the correct preposition 'by' with means of transport. Remove duplicate words ('I I') and redundant clause. Suggestion: Use 'I always observe the scenery when I travel by bus or car.'

× It gives me a better vibe and and avoid avoid the sickness of movie.

✓ It gives me a better feeling and helps me avoid motion sickness.

Error type: Incorrect use of quantifiers / word choice (ID 14) and sentence structure. 'Vibe' is informal and awkward here; 'feeling' or 'mood' fits better. The verbs were repeated and the sentence lacked a subject for 'avoid.' Use 'helps me avoid' to show cause and effect and 'motion sickness' is the correct term. Suggestion: Say 'It gives me a better feeling and helps me avoid motion sickness.'

× Yes, I really uh take a photo of outside uh outside outside nezha uh, when uh, I have a a lot of battery charge on my phone and and uh when uh when uh, there is a homage view that I never seen.

✓ Yes, I often take photos of the view outside when my phone has a lot of battery and when there is a beautiful view that I have never seen before.

Error type: Present tense issue (ID 6) and past participle form (ID 9) for 'seen'. The sentence has repetitions and filler words. Use habitual adverb 'often' or 'really often' and pluralize/adjust nouns: 'photos of the view outside.' Use 'my phone has a lot of battery' or better 'my phone has a lot of battery left.' Use present perfect 'have never seen' to describe an experience up to now. Suggestion: Reduce fillers and use 'have never seen before.'

× when you travel through bus or car.

✓ when you travel by bus or car.

Error type: Incorrect use of prepositions (ID 11). The preposition 'through' is incorrect with modes of transport. Use 'by' to indicate means of travel: 'by bus' or 'by car.'

× I liked the mountains in Mountain dear, there are a lot of snowfall where where it gives the uh vibe of beautiful nature and MMM, I really enjoy the uh isna.

✓ I like the mountains; there is a lot of snowfall, which gives the feeling of beautiful nature, and I really enjoy it.

Error type: Past tense issue (ID 5) and sentence structure (ID 26). The speaker switches between past 'liked' and present 'enjoy.' For general preference use present 'I like.' 'Snowfall' is a noun and should be uncountable here; use 'there is a lot of snowfall' or 'there is a lot of snow.' Use a relative clause 'which gives the feeling...' and replace unclear filler 'isna' with 'it.' Suggestion: Keep tense consistent and remove fillers.