Travelling— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (e.g., “uh”), correct collocations (use “eye-catching” not “eye catchy”), and use one or two specific supporting details. Keep your answer under five sentences and use linking words for coherence.

Ejemplo: Yes. I usually look out of the window because the scenery is much more eye-catching than my phone. For example, I enjoy watching changing landscapes and people’s daily life, which helps me relax during long journeys.

Sugerencia: Clarify vocabulary and be specific: avoid confusing words (e.g., “Cinderella” seems incorrect), use singular/plural consistently (“a friend” or “friends”), and give a clear reason with linking words. Keep to the length limit and correct small grammar errors.

Ejemplo: Yes, I often take photos through the car window, especially when the landscape is striking or unusual. Taking these quick shots helps me remember the trip and share highlights with a friend, and it’s also a good way to practise composition while travelling.

Sugerencia: Make a clear topic sentence and tighten the supporting details. Correct grammar and word order (e.g., “I prefer the sea to the mountains,” “birds that are chirping”), avoid repetition, and use linking words to explain reasons briefly and specifically.

Ejemplo: I prefer the sea to the mountains because I enjoy the sound of waves and the birds that often fly along the shore. The rhythm of the sea relaxes me, and I like walking on the beach to clear my mind.

× I love to look at the scenery outside instead of just scrolling down on my mobile because the view outside is more eye catchy uh, than the scene inside the bus and I don't want to miss anything so I just want to enjoy every moment of.

✓ I love to look at the scenery outside instead of just scrolling on my mobile because the view outside is more eye-catching than the scenes inside the bus, and I don't want to miss anything so I just want to enjoy every moment.

The phrase 'eye catchy' is incorrect; the correct adjective is 'eye-catching' (a compound adjective). 'Scrolling down on my mobile' is awkward; 'scrolling on my mobile' is more natural. 'Scene inside the bus' should be plural 'scenes' to match general reference. Also sentence flow improves with a comma before 'and'. Suggestion: use compound adjectives with a hyphen and match singular/plural for general nouns.

× Yes, I often take photos of Cinderella outside the car window, especially when the landscape is striking or unusual. Capturing those fleeting views helps me remember trips and share the experience with the friend. It is an easy way to practice composition while traveling.

✓ Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the car window, especially when the landscape is striking or unusual. Capturing those fleeting views helps me remember trips and share the experience with friends. It is an easy way to practice composition while traveling.

'Cinderella' is an incorrect noun here — likely a mistaken word for 'scenery'. Replace with 'scenery'. 'The friend' is incorrect; use 'friends' or 'a friend' depending on meaning; plural 'friends' fits general sharing. Ensure noun choice matches context and use correct count (singular/plural).

× I love watching sea instead of mountains because there are the waves and there are the birds that are chirping around. I love the view. I love the fact that waves how waves come forward and backward, and I love to go to the beaches.

✓ I love watching the sea instead of the mountains because there are waves and birds chirping around. I love the view. I love the way waves come forward and back, and I love going to the beach.

Use definite article 'the' with 'sea' and 'mountains' when speaking generally about those features in contrast. Remove unnecessary 'the' before 'waves' and 'birds' when speaking generally. 'Waves how waves come forward and backward' is ungrammatical; replace with 'the way waves come forward and back'. Use 'going to the beach' (singular) to refer to visiting beaches in general. Suggestions: use 'the' with specific natural features in contrasts, simplify repetitive wording, and correct word order.