Travelling— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Correct tense and subject-verb agreement (e.g., “makes” not “makes me” with wrong tense). Avoid filler like “and” mid-sentence.

Ejemplo: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because the scenery relaxes me. For example, when I see green fields or quiet villages I feel calmer and more refreshed.

Sugerencia: Reduce hesitations and correct verb forms; use linking words to organize ideas. Give one or two specific examples and keep to 2–4 sentences. Use past or present consistently (e.g., “see” and “take” in present or “saw” and “took” in past).

Ejemplo: Yes, I sometimes take photos of the scenery outside the window. For instance, if I see a beautiful sunset or a row of green trees against a blue sky, I stop and take a quick picture to remember it.

Sugerencia: Answer directly with correct grammar and add a specific reason using a linking word. Avoid fragmented phrasing; correct past participle (“I was born”) and use clearer vocabulary (“plain” instead of “plane land”).

Ejemplo: I prefer the mountains because I was born in a flat city with no sea. As a result, I love the fresh air and scenery of mountains, which feels very different from the flat landscape where I grew up.

× Yes, I do, because the scenery was beautiful, I thought and.

✓ Yes, I do, because the scenery is beautiful and I enjoy it.

The original mixes past tense 'was' with present context 'I do' and has an extra fragment 'I thought and.' Use present tense 'is' to match 'do' and remove the incomplete phrase. Suggestion: keep consistent tense and complete the clause (e.g., 'and I enjoy it').

× And it will makes me feel relaxed.

✓ And it makes me feel relaxed.

The original uses 'will makes' which is incorrect: 'will' should be followed by the base verb 'make' (would be 'will make') and present habitual action suits 'makes'. Use simple present 'makes' to express habitual feeling. Remove auxiliary 'will' or change to 'will make' depending on intended meaning.

× Yes I do umm, sometimes when I saw the sunset was so beautiful I will take picture of it and the green trees, the blue sky, I would I would all take pictures for them.

✓ Yes, I do. Sometimes when I see a beautiful sunset, I take pictures of it and of the green trees and the blue sky.

The sentence mixes tenses and repeats phrases. Use simple present 'see' and 'take' to describe habitual actions. Add articles 'a' and preposition 'of' for clarity, remove repeated 'I would'. Also use commas and conjunctions to separate items correctly.

× I will take picture of it

✓ I will take a picture of it

When referring to a single photograph, the countable noun 'picture' requires an article 'a'. Without it the phrase is ungrammatical. Use 'a picture' or 'pictures' as appropriate.

× I do prefer the mountains because I born in a city where it's the plane land and there is no sea so I love mountains so much.

✓ I prefer the mountains because I was born in a city that is flat and has no sea, so I love mountains very much.

The verb 'born' requires the passive past form 'was born'. 'Do prefer' is unnecessary; simple present 'prefer' is natural. 'Plane land' is incorrect; use 'flat' or 'plain'. Improve sentence flow by using clauses: 'a city that is flat and has no sea'. Use 'very much' rather than 'so much' for formality.