Travelling— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Improve clarity and naturalness. Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid vague phrases like "this kind of city," and add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Keep it under five sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I often look out the window when I travel by bus or car. For example, I enjoy watching old buildings and street life because it helps me learn about the local culture. Moreover, seeing different neighborhoods broadens my perspective and inspires new ideas.

Sugerencia: Correct grammar and use more precise vocabulary. Begin with a clear topic sentence, fix errors (e.g., "a memorized" → "a memory"), and add a brief reason or example with linking words. Keep responses concise.

Ejemplo: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the car window. For instance, I photograph interesting streets or landscapes so I can remember special trips. This helps me revisit those moments later and share them with friends.

Sugerencia: Work on accuracy and coherence. Give a clear opinion then support it with specific, grammatical reasons. Avoid unclear comparisons ("more white") and incorrect pronouns for the sea. Use linking words to connect ideas and stay within five sentences.

Ejemplo: I prefer the sea because its open horizon and gentle waves help me relax. For example, listening to the waves calms my mind after a stressful day. In my opinion, the sea looks especially beautiful at sunset, which makes the whole scene peaceful and memorable.

× Yes, because I think it can also broaden my horizon and make me appreciate the views about this kind of city.

✓ Yes, because I think it can also broaden my horizons and make me appreciate the views of this kind of city.

Use plural 'horizons' commonly in this expression (singular/plural idiom). Also replace preposition 'about' with 'of' to indicate the relationship between 'views' and 'this kind of city'. Suggestion: say 'broaden my horizons' and 'the views of this kind of city' for natural English.

× Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside because I think it can become a memorized in my life.

✓ Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside because I think they can become memories in my life.

'A memorized' is incorrect: 'memorized' is an adjective/verb form and cannot follow the indefinite article here. The correct noun is 'memories' (plural) to match 'photos' and the idea of multiple remembered moments. Also change 'it' to 'they' to agree with plural 'photos'. Suggestion: use 'they can become memories' or 'they can be memorable moments'.

× I prefer the sea because the sea is more white than mountains.

✓ I prefer the sea because the sea is whiter than the mountains.

Comparative form requires adjective + -er ('whiter') rather than 'more white'. Also include 'the' before 'mountains' for parallel reference and naturalness. Suggestion: use 'whiter than the mountains'.

× It can make me make my heart more relaxing and she is also more beautiful in my thoughts.

✓ It can make me feel more relaxed, and I also find the sea more beautiful in my thoughts.

'Make my heart more relaxing' is unidiomatic: use 'make me feel more relaxed' (adjective 'relaxed' describing a person). The pronoun 'she' should not be used for 'the sea' in formal English; use 'it' or rephrase to 'I find the sea'. Also 'more beautiful in my thoughts' is better expressed as 'I also find the sea more beautiful in my thoughts.' Suggestion: use natural subject 'I' and correct adjective forms.