Travelling— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Make the answer more natural and grammatically correct, keep it concise, and add one supporting detail using a linking word. Correct verb forms and remove hesitation. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then add a brief reason or example using a linking word such as “because” or “so”.

Ejemplo: Yes, I always sit by the window when I travel by bus because I enjoy watching the changing scenery. For example, I like to see towns and countryside pass by, which helps me relax during the journey.

Sugerencia: Improve fluency and clarity by removing repetitions and filler words. Use correct tense and clearer linking words like “but” or “however”. Limit to two or three sentences: a topic sentence and a short supporting detail with a reason or example.

Ejemplo: Yes, sometimes I take photos when I see a beautiful view, but often I miss the best shot because I’m slow to grab my phone. For instance, once I missed a sunset as the car passed too quickly.

Sugerencia: Give a clear, direct opinion followed by one specific reason. Fix grammar (use “prefer” not conditional unless comparing), avoid redundancy, and use linking words like “because” or “so”. Provide a concise, vivid supporting detail rather than vague phrases.

Ejemplo: I prefer the sea because it feels more open and offers varied scenery. For example, I enjoy watching the wide ocean, sandy beaches and coconut trees, which create a relaxing atmosphere.

× When I traveling by bus, I always choose to be seated, uh, beside the window so that I can see a good view from one destination to another destination.

✓ When I travel by bus, I always choose to sit beside the window so that I can see a good view from one destination to another.

Error type: Present tense issue and sentence structure. 'When I traveling' is incorrect because after 'when I' you need the base form 'travel' (simple present). 'Choose to be seated' is awkward; use 'choose to sit'. Remove redundant 'destination' and unnecessary filler words. Suggestion: use simple present for habitual actions and prefer natural verbs (travel, sit).

× Window Yes, sometimes I can see a good scenery so that I quickly pick up my handphone and take a photo.

✓ Yes, sometimes I see a beautiful scene, so I quickly pick up my phone and take a photo.

Error type: Verb + -ing form and word choice. 'I can see a good scenery' is unidiomatic; 'scenery' is uncountable and 'good scenery' is awkward — use 'a beautiful scene' or 'nice scenery'. 'Handphone' is nonstandard in many varieties; use 'phone'. Also 'can see' is acceptable but simple present 'see' fits habitual context. Suggestion: use appropriate nouns and concise verbs.

× Sometime I get the the best views scenery but sometimes I lost out of that scenery because quite late to take a photo.

✓ Sometimes I get the best views, but sometimes I miss them because I am too late to take a photo.

Error type: Singular and plural issue and sentence structure. 'Sometime' should be 'Sometimes'. 'the the' is duplication. 'best views scenery' mixes countable 'views' with 'scenery'; use 'the best views' or 'the best scenery'. 'I lost out of that scenery' is incorrect: use 'I miss them' for present habitual actions. 'because quite late to take a photo' needs auxiliary and subject: 'because I am too late to take a photo.' Suggestion: fix plurality and include proper verb forms and subject.

× If you compared with this mountain, I would prefer the sea because the sea is my view more largest.

✓ Compared with the mountain, I would prefer the sea because the sea is more beautiful and offers a larger view.

Error type: Incorrect conjunction/comparative construction and adjective use. 'If you compared with this mountain' is incorrect; use 'Compared with the mountain' or 'If you compare it with the mountain'. 'the sea is my view more largest' is ungrammatical: 'largest' is superlative and requires a group to compare; 'more large' is wrong. Use 'more beautiful' or 'offers a larger view'. Suggestion: use correct comparative structures: 'more + adjective' or 'comparative adjective + than'.

× I can see more view from the sea like there is a sea itself and then there is a normally we can see the coconut tree, which is that the good scenery, uh, at the.

✓ From the seaside I can see more: the sea itself, and usually some coconut trees, which make a nice view.

Error type: Sentence structure errors and article errors. 'I can see more view from the sea' is awkward; use 'From the seaside I can see more' or 'I can see a wider view from the sea.' 'there is a sea itself' is redundant. 'the coconut tree' should be plural 'coconut trees' when speaking generally. Fragments like 'which is that the good scenery, uh, at the.' are incomplete. Suggestion: simplify structure, use plural for general statements, and complete clauses.