Travelling— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific details. Avoid fillers (uh, um) and repetition. Use correct articles and countable/uncountable forms (a tree/trees, the countryside). Add a linking phrase to connect the reason to the opinion.

Ejemplo: Yes, I always look out the window when I travel by car or bus. For example, when I travel across Java I enjoy seeing the green rice fields and small villages because the countryside looks peaceful and fresh. As a result, I find the journey relaxing and inspiring.

Sugerencia: Use correct tense and clearer wording. Begin with a direct answer, then give specific details about what you photograph and why. Remove unclear words (e.g., 'villain') and correct collocations (take photos/take videos/save memories). Keep it to 2–3 sentences and use a linking word to explain purpose.

Ejemplo: Yes, I often take photos and videos through the window. For instance, I usually photograph interesting landscapes, old houses and people working in the fields, so I can keep those memories and look back at them later.

Sugerencia: Start with a clear preference statement, then give two specific reasons with linking words. Correct grammar (I am afraid of swimming; past experience was bad). Avoid repeating phrases and use varied vocabulary (sunbathing, tanning, beaches). Keep answer within 3–4 sentences.

Ejemplo: I prefer the mountains to the sea. Mainly, I am afraid of swimming because I had a bad experience on a previous trip, and I also dislike strong sun since I do not like tanning. Therefore, I enjoy hiking and cool mountain air instead.

× when you're traveling to Java, uh, you can see a trees, the village and the circumstances.

✓ when you're traveling to Java, uh, you can see trees, the village and the surroundings.

The original uses the indefinite article 'a' before the plural noun 'trees', which is incorrect. Remove 'a' to match the plural noun: 'see trees'. Also 'circumstances' is not the intended word for scenery; 'surroundings' is more appropriate. Suggest using plural nouns without 'a' and choose vocabulary that fits the context.

× I think, uh, the, the view is exhilarating, exhilarating and yeah.

✓ I think, uh, the view is exhilarating and really beautiful.

Repetition of 'exhilarating' is stylistic rather than grammatical but awkward. Replacing the repetition with an adverb or adjective improves clarity. 'Exhilarating' as an adjective is correct here; adding 'really beautiful' refines the expression.

× Yeah, I always took a photo at the scenery at the window and also take a villain, take a videos and I lost to stuff all, uh, the things that I will remember in the future.

✓ Yeah, I always take photos of the scenery through the window and also take videos, and I keep all the things that I will remember in the future.

Mixed and incorrect verb tenses: 'always took' (past) conflicts with habitual present 'always take'. Use present simple 'always take' for habitual actions. 'a photo' should be plural 'photos' to match 'always'. Prepositions: 'of' is correct for 'photos of the scenery' and 'through the window' is clearer than 'at the window'. 'take a villain' is incorrect; likely intended 'take videos'. 'I lost to stuff all' is unclear; 'I keep all the things' expresses the intended meaning. Use consistent present tense for habits and correct verb forms.

× I always took a photo at the scenery at the window and also take a villain, take a videos

✓ I always take photos of the scenery through the window and also take videos

'Noun number' errors: 'a photo' plus 'always' suggests plural 'photos'. 'a videos' mixes singular article with plural noun; remove article and use 'videos'. Ensure noun and article agree: use 'photos' and 'videos' for repeated actions.

× I always took a photo at the scenery at the window

✓ I always take photos of the scenery through the window

Preposition choice: use 'photos of' not 'photo at the scenery', and 'through the window' or 'from the window' is more natural than 'at the window'. Also correct tense to present simple for habitual actions.

× I prefer the mountain because I don't really like to see the sea.

✓ I prefer the mountains because I don't really like to see the sea.

Count noun: 'mountain' when speaking generally should be plural 'mountains' ('I prefer the mountains'). The rest of the sentence uses present tense correctly. Use plural to express a general preference.

× I afraid to swim at the sea because my past journey was terrible for me and I don't really like sun.

✓ I'm afraid to swim in the sea because my past journey was terrible for me and I don't really like the sun.

Missing auxiliary verb: 'I afraid' should be 'I'm afraid' (be + adjective). Preposition: 'in the sea' is standard, not 'at the sea'. Article: 'the sun' is required. Also 'to swim' is acceptable but 'of swimming' could be used with 'afraid of' if restructuring ('I'm afraid of swimming in the sea').

× my past journey was terrible for me

✓ a past journey was terrible for me

Tense and article: 'my past journey' is acceptable, but 'a past journey' sounds more natural when introducing one specific trip. The past tense 'was' is correct here; keep consistent past reference. Suggest 'on a past trip I had a terrible experience' for clarity.

× I lost to stuff all, uh, the things that I will remember in the future.

✓ I keep all the things that I will remember in the future.

Pronoun and verb choice: 'I lost to stuff all' is ungrammatical. Likely intended meaning is preserving memories, so 'I keep all the things' or 'I save everything' is appropriate. Use correct verbs and pronouns to convey meaning clearly.

× I don't really like sun. I I don't really like to turn up my skin so I prefer to visit the mountain.

✓ I don't really like the sun. I don't really like getting my skin darker, so I prefer to visit the mountains.

Article: 'sun' needs 'the sun'. Redundant 'I' removed. 'to turn up my skin' is not idiomatic; use 'getting my skin darker' or 'getting tanned'. 'the mountain' should be plural 'the mountains' when stating preference. Use natural collocations and articles.