Travelling— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 발음과 문법 오류를 수정하고 문장을 간결하게 구성하세요. 질문에 바로 답한 뒤 이유를 한두 문장으로 명확히 설명하는 구조가 필요합니다. 예: 'get outside through the window'는 의미상 부적절하며 'look out' 또는 'look outside'로 교체하세요. 또한 'relieve my'처럼 불완전한 표현을 완성해야 합니다. 연결어(so, because)를 적절히 사용하고 문장 수를 3~4문장으로 제한하세요.

Ejemplo: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by car because I often get car sick. Looking at the scenery helps me feel less dizzy, so I try to focus on distant objects. This usually makes the journey more comfortable.

Sugerencia: 중복된 이유 표현('because' 반복)을 피하고 목적 표현을 자연스럽게 다듬으세요. 'keep it my phone'는 문법적으로 틀리므로 'save it on my phone'로 수정해야 합니다. 한 문장에 이유와 방법을 명확히 제시하고, 구체적 예시(특별한 장소나 순간)를 추가하면 더 좋습니다.

Ejemplo: Yes, I usually take photos of the scenery outside because I want to save the views on my phone. For example, I often photograph sunsets or interesting landscapes so I can remember the trip later.

Sugerencia: 첫 문장은 불완전하고 어색합니다('prefer to go to see' 수정 필요). 명확한 주제문을 만들고 이유를 구체적으로 설명하세요. 예를 들어 'I prefer the sea because I like the sound of the waves'처럼 자연스러운 어휘와 구조를 사용하세요. 연결어로 이유를 제시하고 감정 표현을 하나로 정리하세요.

Ejemplo: I prefer the sea to the mountains because I love the sound of the waves and the open views. The ocean atmosphere always makes me feel relaxed and refreshed, especially when I sit on the beach and listen to the water.

× Yes, I usually get outside through the window when I travel travel by car.

✓ Yes, I usually look out through the window when I travel by car.

The student used 'get outside through the window', which is incorrect collocation. 'Look out' or 'look out of' is the correct verb + preposition combination to describe viewing scenery through a window. Also there is a repeated word 'travel travel' which is a typo. Use 'look out' + optional 'of'/'through' and remove the duplicate word. Suggestion: say 'I usually look out through the window when I travel by car.'

× That's because sometimes I feel car sick and looking outside it helps me relieve my.

✓ That's because sometimes I feel carsick, and looking outside helps relieve it.

The original sentence has awkward word order and missing object. 'Looking outside it helps me relieve my' is ungrammatical. Use 'looking outside helps relieve it' where 'looking' is a present participle used as a gerund phrase subject and 'it' refers to 'carsickness'. Also 'carsick' is usually one word or 'car sick' as an adjective; 'relieve my' is incomplete. Suggestion: 'looking outside helps relieve it' or 'looking outside helps me feel better.'

× Yes, usually I do because when I see the scenery outside I want to take a photo because I want to keep it my phone.

✓ Yes, usually I do because when I see nice scenery outside I want to take a photo to keep it on my phone.

The phrase 'keep it my phone' is missing the preposition 'on' and the sentence repeats 'because' which is stylistically poor. Use 'to keep it on my phone' with infinitive purpose 'to keep'. Also add an article or adjective 'nice scenery' for naturalness. Suggestion: '...I want to take a photo to keep it on my phone.'

× I absolutely prefer to go to see.

✓ I absolutely prefer the sea.

The fragment 'prefer to go to see' is incomplete and does not specify an object. The question asked 'Do you prefer the mountains or the sea?' so respond directly with 'I prefer the sea' or 'I absolutely prefer the sea.' Suggestion: answer the choice directly: 'I absolutely prefer the sea.'

× That's because I like to the ocean sound and the view.

✓ That's because I like the sound of the ocean and the view.

'Like to the ocean sound' is ungrammatical: after 'like' you need a noun phrase, and 'sound of the ocean' is the correct noun phrase with preposition 'of'. Also 'the view' is fine but 'the ocean sound' should be 'the sound of the ocean.' Suggestion: use 'I like the sound of the ocean and the view.'

× The ocean view makes me feel relaxed and fresh.

✓ The ocean view makes me feel relaxed and refreshed.

'Fresh' is not the best collocation with 'feel' in this context; 'refreshed' is the correct adjective to describe feeling reinvigorated. Use past participle adjective 'refreshed.' Suggestion: '...makes me feel relaxed and refreshed.'