Travelling— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Improve pronunciation and grammar (e.g. 'scenery'), shorten and organize the answer into a clear topic sentence plus 1–2 supporting points. Use linking words for coherence and avoid repetition. For example, say you look out because it relaxes you and shows urban development, with one concrete detail.

Ejemplo: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because the scenery relaxes me and reduces my anxiety. For example, I enjoy watching green parks and busy streets pass by, which makes me feel like a traveler in the city. Also, the view often shows how developed a neighbourhood is, such as new buildings or renovated parks.

Sugerencia: Clarify and make sentences concise; correct word choice (e.g. 'perspective' instead of 'vision', 'movement' instead of 'mobility') and avoid repetition. Give one specific example of what you capture and how you compose the photo.

Ejemplo: Yes, I often take photos from the car window because the perspective is unique. For instance, I like to photograph streetscapes and passing markets from a moving car, using a fast shutter or panning technique to capture the motion. This gives me dynamic images I cannot get when walking.

Sugerencia: Organize into a clear comparison: state preference or say both, then provide two distinct, specific reasons using linking words. Correct grammar and word choice (e.g. 'serenity', 'the sound of the waves'). Limit to 2–3 sentences.

Ejemplo: I find it hard to choose because I enjoy both for different reasons. For example, I love the mountains for their peaceful green views and hiking trails, which reduce my anxiety; whereas the sea offers soothing sounds and wide horizons that make me feel calm.

× I always look outside for the skinery because the skinnery really calms me down and give me a sense and reduce my anxiety and also I feel like I'm like a traveler in the city.

✓ I always look outside at the scenery because the scenery really calms me down, gives me a sense of peace, reduces my anxiety, and makes me feel like a traveler in the city.

Incorrect word choice and adjective/adverb forms: 'skinery' and 'skinnery' are misspellings of 'scenery'. Verb forms are inconsistent: 'give' and 'reduce' should agree with the singular subject 'the scenery' and be conjugated as 'gives' and 'reduces'. Also 'give me a sense' is incomplete; specify 'a sense of peace'. Suggestion: use correct noun 'scenery', ensure verbs agree in number and use parallel structure for listed verbs.

× This really made me feel alive.

✓ This really makes me feel alive.

Tense inconsistency: context is general/present habitual, so present tense 'makes' is appropriate instead of past 'made'. Suggestion: use present simple when describing habitual or enduring feelings.

× Besides that the window, the view outside also reflect how the how the development of a city.

✓ Besides that, the view outside the window also reflects the development of a city.

Redundancy and word order issues: 'the window, the view outside' is awkward and 'how the how the' is duplicated. Subject-verb agreement: 'view' (singular) needs 'reflects'. Suggestion: reorder to 'the view outside the window' and correct verb to 'reflects'.

× I take photos of the scenery outside the car because the vision is different.

✓ I take photos of the scenery outside the car because the view is different.

Word choice: 'vision' refers to eyesight generally, while 'view' refers to a scene. Use 'view'. Tense is okay (present simple for habitual actions). Suggestion: replace incorrect noun with correct one.

× When I walk on the street, I have to use my eyes.

✓ When I walk on the street, I have to watch where I am going.

Awkward phrasing: 'use my eyes' is literal and unnecessary. More natural expression is 'watch where I am going' or 'look around'. Suggestion: choose a natural collocation for the context.

× Then I use my cell phone or camera to capture views.

✓ Then I use my cell phone or my camera to capture the views.

Article and parallelism: add 'my' before 'camera' for balance and 'the views' is more natural. Also 'capture views' is acceptable but 'capture the views' sounds better. Suggestion: maintain parallel structure and include articles as needed.

× But in the car, there's a mobility.

✓ But in the car, there is movement.

Word choice error: 'mobility' is the ability to move, not the movement of the car. 'There is movement' or 'the car is moving' is clearer. Suggestion: use 'movement' or 'motion' to describe the moving vehicle.

× There's a mobility and I follow the move to capture everything.

✓ The car is moving, and I follow the motion to capture everything.

Incorrect nouns and awkward phrasing: 'mobility' and 'move' are wrong choices. Use 'the car is moving' and 'motion' or 'movement'. Suggestion: use natural collocations like 'the car is moving' and 'I follow the motion' or 'I follow the movement with my camera'.

× It's hard to choose between these two because they are both my favorite.

✓ It's hard to choose between the two because they are both my favourites.

Article and word choice: 'these two' is acceptable in spoken English but 'the two' is more natural here. 'my favorite' can be 'my favourites' since two items are being referred to. Suggestion: use 'the two' and plural 'favourites' when referring to more than one favorite item. (Note: American spelling 'favorites' is also acceptable.)

× I love the mountains because the green views reduce my anxiety and the view is very spectacular.

✓ I love the mountains because the green scenery reduces my anxiety and the view is very spectacular.

Word choice and agreement: 'green views' is odd; 'green scenery' is better. Subject-verb agreement: 'scenery' (singular) takes 'reduces' rather than 'reduce'. Suggestion: use 'scenery' and ensure verb agrees with singular noun.

× As for the sea, sea represent the S Serenity also can calm me down and I love to hear the echoes of this waves.

✓ As for the sea, the sea represents serenity and can also calm me down, and I love to hear the echoes of the waves.

Article and noun-verb agreement: missing article before 'sea', verb 'represent' should be 'represents' for singular subject, extraneous 'S' and capitalisation error in 'Serenity'. 'This waves' incorrect pronoun/number; should be 'the waves'. Suggestion: add 'the' before 'sea', use 'represents', remove stray characters, and use 'the waves'.