Travelling— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid hesitation and repetition, and use correct vocabulary (scenery, not scenario). Add one specific supporting detail and a linking word. Keep to 2–4 sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy the scenery. For example, I especially like watching green fields and trees, which relaxes me, so I often sit by the window to enjoy the view.

Sugerencia: Be concise and correct tenses and word forms. Start with a direct answer, then give a specific example and use linking words. Avoid repeating the same idea and fix collocations (make an album, scenes → scenery).

Ejemplo: Yes, I do. I love photography, so I often take photos from the car window and later make an album to keep the memories. For instance, last month I photographed a sunrise over the hills and added the best shots to a travel album.

Sugerencia: Give a clear topic sentence, correct grammar and be specific about reasons. Use linking words (because, for example) and avoid filler sounds. Mention a concrete activity and result in 2–3 supporting sentences.

Ejemplo: I prefer the mountains because I enjoy hiking and fresh air. For example, last summer I visited a traditional area called Troumeasure and hiked several trails, which left me feeling refreshed and energized.

× Yeah, I mostly look out the window at the scenario when I'm traveling by bus or the car.

✓ Yeah, I mostly look out the window at the scenery when I'm traveling by bus or by car.

The word 'scenario' is incorrect for what is seen outside a window; the correct noun is 'scenery'. Also, 'the car' is unnatural when speaking generally; use 'by car' or 'in the car'. Use consistent preposition 'by' for modes of travel. Suggestion: replace 'scenario' with 'scenery' and change 'the car' to 'by car' or 'in the car' depending on context.

× Uh, I'm fond of the scenarios, especially the greenery, uh, when I was a child, I always like to sit there and so I.

✓ Uh, I'm fond of the scenery, especially the greenery. When I was a child, I always liked to sit there.

Mixed tenses and incorrect noun form: 'scenarios' should be 'scenery' (uncountable). The clause shifts from past ('when I was a child') to present 'I always like' — maintain past: 'I always liked'. The sentence fragment 'and so I' is incomplete and should be removed. Suggestion: use consistent past tense for childhood habits and uncountable noun 'scenery'.

× I'm actually a photaholic person, so whenever I travel by car I always look at the scenes.

✓ I'm actually a photoholic, so whenever I travel by car I always look at the scenery.

'Photaholic' is a spelling error; common form is 'photoholic' or better 'I love taking photos'. 'Scenes' is plural but 'scenery' (uncountable) is more natural. Suggestion: use 'photoholic' or 'I love taking photos' and 'scenery' for what you see outside.

× So I took some photos and make it a album to make some memories.

✓ So I took some photos and made them into an album to preserve some memories.

Tense inconsistency: 'took' is past so following verb should be past 'made', not 'make'. 'It a album' has article error and number agreement: use 'an album' and refer to 'them' (photos). 'To make some memories' is awkward; use 'to preserve some memories' or 'to keep memories'. Suggestion: keep past tense consistent and use correct article 'an' and plural pronoun 'them'.

× So yeah, I take photos whenever I'm traveling.

✓ So yeah, I take photos whenever I travel.

Present continuous 'I'm traveling' is acceptable, but for habitual action use simple present 'I travel' with 'I take photos'. Suggestion: use simple present for habits: 'whenever I travel'.

× I prefer the mountains, uh, at the last summer I visit the mountains called the Troumeasure, which is also a traditional, uh, area.

✓ I prefer the mountains. Last summer I visited the mountains called Troumeasure, which is also a traditional area.

'At the last summer' is incorrect preposition and article use; say 'Last summer'. 'I visit' should be past 'I visited' to match time reference. 'the Troumeasure'—if a proper name, no 'the' unless part of name; remove comma before 'area'. Suggestion: use 'Last summer I visited...' and correct tense to past.

× I like to hike on the mountains, which keep me a fresh.

✓ I like to hike in the mountains, which keep me feeling fresh.

Use preposition 'in the mountains' rather than 'on the mountains' for hiking. 'Keep me a fresh' is ungrammatical: use 'keep me feeling fresh' or 'keep me refreshed'. Suggestion: use 'in the mountains' and an appropriate verb phrase like 'feeling fresh' or adjective 'refreshed'.