Travelling— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., repeating "love to look out" and listing similar phrases). Also correct small grammar slips (e.g., "even if this building" should be "even buildings").

Ejemplo: I really enjoy looking out of the window when I travel. For example, on long bus rides I like to watch mountains and rivers pass by, and when I fly I enjoy seeing the patchwork of fields below. This helps me relax and notice new places.

Sugerencia: Good content and clear reason. Improve by tightening the sentence and using linking words to separate ideas. Replace long list with two focused reasons and a brief example to sound more natural.

Ejemplo: Yes, I often take photos and videos of scenery from the car window because I like to capture memories and the simple beauty of nature. For instance, I recently filmed a valley at sunset to remember the colours and atmosphere.

Sugerencia: Begin with a direct topic sentence, then give two specific reasons using linking words. Fix grammar ("Not knowing swimming" -> "Not knowing how to swim") and avoid vague phrases like "so much I can do"—give examples of activities.

Ejemplo: I prefer the mountains to the sea. Firstly, I don't know how to swim, so I feel safer on land; secondly, the mountains offer many activities such as hiking and camping, which I enjoy.

× Yes, I love to look out at the window, at the scenery. When travelling by bus or car, or even when I'm flying, I love to look out of the window, admire the scenery, mountains, rivers, even if this building, I love to look outside.

✓ Yes, I love to look out of the window at the scenery. When travelling by bus or car, or even when I'm flying, I love to look out of the window and admire the scenery: mountains, rivers, and even buildings; I love to look outside.

The original sentence misuses commas and fragments when joining verbs and lists. Use the gerund/infinitive structure consistently: 'look out of the window and admire' connects two actions performed by the subject. Use commas and conjunctions to separate list items and avoid sentence fragments. Also change 'this building' to plural 'buildings' or 'a building' for clarity; here 'buildings' fits the list of scenery. Improve flow by replacing several commas with 'and' or punctuation (colon, semicolon).

× I always take photos and videos as well of the scenery outside the car window because I love to capture the memories, the beauty, the simplicity of the nature and places that I'm traveling to and it really soothes my mind.

✓ I always take photos and videos of the scenery outside the car window because I love to capture memories, the beauty and simplicity of nature and the places I travel to, and it really soothes my mind.

The phrase 'as well of' is awkward; use 'of' after 'videos'. 'The memories' and 'the nature' use unnecessary definite articles; use 'memories' and 'nature' for general meaning. 'Places that I'm traveling to' is wordy and uses a continuous form unnecessarily; 'the places I travel to' is more natural in present habitual context. Use commas to separate clauses and include 'and' before the final clause to join sentences properly.

× I prefer mountains over sea because I don't know how to swim.

✓ I prefer the mountains to the sea because I don't know how to swim.

When comparing preferences, the correct structure is 'prefer A to B' not 'prefer A over B' in formal English. Also use articles 'the' before 'mountains' and 'sea' when speaking about those general categories in this context.

× Not knowing swimming limits my ex experience and fun.

✓ Not knowing how to swim limits my experience and fun.

The phrase 'Not knowing swimming' is ungrammatical; use 'Not knowing how to swim' or 'Not being able to swim'. 'ex experience' appears to be a typo; remove 'ex'. Also 'fun' is uncountable here and fine, but 'experience and enjoyment' could be clearer. The corrected sentence uses infinitive 'to swim' after 'knowing' structure.

× So I choose mountains because there's so much I can do in the mountains rather than in the sea.

✓ So I choose the mountains because there is so much I can do in the mountains that I cannot do at sea.

The original uses 'there's so much I can do in the mountains rather than in the sea' which is understandable but slightly awkward. 'There is' is correct contraction for 'there is', but clarify comparison by completing clause: 'that I cannot do at sea.' Also use 'the mountains' and 'at sea' for natural prepositional usage.