Travelling— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise, avoid repetition, include a clear topic sentence and one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Also correct minor grammar (use present simple consistently) and limit length to 2–3 sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I often look out the window when I travel by bus or car because it helps me relax. For example, I enjoy watching changing landscapes and people going about their day, which makes the journey feel shorter.

Sugerencia: Give a direct topic sentence, avoid hesitations and tense errors, and explain one clear reason with a linking word. Keep to 2–3 sentences and finish your thought fully.

Ejemplo: Yes, I often take photos from the car window, especially at sunset. I usually photograph sunsets because the colours are beautiful and they make me feel peaceful, so I like to keep those memories.

Sugerencia: Start with a clear preference sentence, avoid repetition, and give two specific reasons linked logically. Use varied vocabulary (e.g., coastline, swimming, views) and keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Ejemplo: I prefer the sea because I enjoy swimming and watching sunsets over the coastline. Also, being by the sea feels refreshing and helps me unwind after a busy week.

× Yes, I love looking out the window with the scenery while traveling by bus or car.

✓ Yes, I love looking out of the window at the scenery while traveling by bus or car.

Use present tense correctly (verb 'love' is fine) but preposition choice is incorrect: 'look out of the window' or 'look out the window' with 'at' the scenery. Change 'with the scenery' to 'at the scenery' to show focus. Suggestion: use 'look out of the window at the scenery' for natural phrasing.

× It usually keeps me calm and when I do that I forget about the time I just enjoyed every scenery or every view that I.

✓ It usually keeps me calm, and when I do that I lose track of time because I just enjoy every view.

Original sentence has sentence structure problems and an incomplete clause ('that I.'). 'Forget about the time' should be 'lose track of time' and 'every scenery' is uncountable; use 'every view'. Also remove redundant 'just' placement and complete the clause. Suggestion: combine with a comma and use 'lose track of time' and 'every view'.

× Yes, I do take photos of the scenery outside, but if it's usually sunset, not all the lovely scenery.

✓ Yes, I do take photos of the scenery outside, but usually only at sunset, not of all the lovely scenery.

Preposition and word order are incorrect. 'If it's usually sunset' is wrong; use 'usually only at sunset' to indicate time. Also clarify 'not of all the lovely scenery' to show exclusion. Suggestion: place 'usually' before the time expression and use 'of' after 'not'.

× I I usually took the sunset pictures because I love sunsets.

✓ I usually take sunset pictures because I love sunsets.

Tense inconsistency: question is about habitual action, so present simple 'take' is correct, not past 'took'. Also remove duplicate 'I'. Suggestion: use present simple for habits: 'I usually take'.

× It relaxes me when I.

✓ It relaxes me when I watch them.

Incomplete sentence: 'when I.' lacks a verb/complement. Clarify what the speaker does when relaxed; given context, 'watch them' or 'see them' fits. Suggestion: complete the clause with an appropriate verb, e.g., 'when I watch them'.

× I prefer the sea because I love sunsets, I love, I love looking out at the sunset and I'm just like at the sea seaside.

✓ I prefer the sea because I love sunsets; I love looking out at the sunset and being by the seaside.

Run-on sentence and awkward phrasing. Use semicolon or conjunction to join related clauses. 'I'm just like at the sea seaside' is ungrammatical; use 'being by the seaside' or 'being at the seaside'. Remove repeated 'I love'. Suggestion: simplify and use 'being by the seaside' for natural expression.

× I enjoy seeing and I love swimming at the sea.

✓ I enjoy sightseeing and I love swimming in the sea.

Use correct collocations: 'sightseeing' or 'enjoy seeing' plus object; 'swimming in the sea' is correct preposition, not 'at the sea'. Suggestion: use 'sightseeing' or 'enjoy seeing the scenery' and 'swimming in the sea'.