Travelling— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and grammatical. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using appropriate linking words. Correct verb forms and word choice (e.g. “when I’m driving or on a train”, “gradation of the sky”, “take a photo”). Avoid repetition.

Ejemplo: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by car or train because I enjoy viewing landscapes. For example, I particularly like the gradation of colours in the sky, so if I see a beautiful sunset I often take a photo to keep the memory.

Sugerencia: Organise your answer with one clear statement and specific reasons. Use correct tense and reduce unclear phrases (e.g. “try to paint the scenery”, “I keep them as memories”). Avoid saying conflicting intentions (selling vs keeping) without explanation.

Ejemplo: Yes, I often take photos of scenery from the window because I like to paint landscapes later. If the sky has beautiful colours, I take a photo to capture the tones, and I usually keep the pictures as references for my paintings.

Sugerencia: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence and one or two specific reasons. Correct awkward phrases (e.g. “I’m not an outdoors person”, “I’m afraid of heights”). Use linking words like ‘because’ to connect reason and effect, and avoid repetition.

Ejemplo: I prefer the sea because I’m not really an outdoors person and I don’t like high places. For instance, I enjoy walking along the beach where it feels calm and flat, which suits me better than hiking in the mountains.

× I look around when I driving or some train with the window because I love the drawing or painting scenery.

✓ I look around when I am driving or when I am on a train with the window open because I love drawing or painting scenery.

Errors: missing auxiliary verb 'am' for present continuous and incorrect phrase 'some train with the window'. Use present continuous 'I am driving' and 'when I am on a train'. Also use 'drawing or painting scenery' (no article) for a general activity. Suggestion: use 'am' + verb-ing for ongoing actions and preposition 'on a train' and add 'open' to clarify window.

× Even especially I love the graduation of the sky.

✓ Especially, I love the gradation of the sky.

Awkward word order and wrong word choice: 'Even especially' is redundant and 'graduation' is incorrect; the correct word is 'gradation' (or 'gradients'/'the sky's colors'). Suggestion: place 'Especially' at the start and use 'gradation' or 'the sky's color gradation'.

× So sometimes even if sky color is very beautiful, I just took a picture and when I have time.

✓ So sometimes, if the sky's color is very beautiful, I just take a picture when I have time.

Tense inconsistency: 'took' is past tense while surrounding context is present habitual; change to present 'take'. Also missing article and possessive: use 'the sky's color' and move 'when I have time' to the end for clarity.

× Yes, I take a picture outside of the window because I when I have time I just try to painting of the scenery.

✓ Yes, I take pictures out of the window because when I have time I just try to paint the scenery.

Errors: 'take a picture outside of the window' is better as 'take pictures out of the window'; redundant 'I when I have time'. Use base verb 'paint' after 'try to' (not 'painting'). Use plural 'pictures' for habitual action.

× So sometimes if they the color of sky is beautiful, I just took a picture and I try to express the color and want to sell it.

✓ So sometimes, if the color of the sky is beautiful, I just take a picture, try to express the color, and want to sell it.

Pronoun and article errors: 'they the color of sky' is incorrect; use 'the color of the sky'. Tense: use present 'take' to match habitual context. Also streamline verbs: 'try to express' -> 'try to express' or 'try expressing'. Maintain parallel structure with commas.

× Yes, I take a picture outside of the window because I when I have time I just try to painting of the scenery. So sometimes if they the color of sky is beautiful, I just took a picture and I try to express the color and want to sell it. So normally I keep the memory.

✓ Yes, I take pictures out of the window because when I have time I just try to paint the scenery. So sometimes if the color of the sky is beautiful, I take a picture and try to express the color and may want to sell it. Normally I keep the memories.

Pluralization: use 'pictures' and 'memories' for repeated actions and plural items. Also fixed 'painting' -> 'paint' and article errors. Suggestion: choose singular only for single instances.

× I prefer sea because I'm not outside person so I just stay home but even if I have a time or I need a chance go to a outside.

✓ I prefer the sea because I'm not an outdoorsy person, so I usually stay at home, but if I have time or I get a chance to go out,

Pronoun/article problems: 'prefer sea' needs 'the sea'; 'outside person' is better 'outdoorsy person'; 'a time' -> 'time' and 'a outside' -> 'out' or 'outside' with correct preposition. Also add articles 'an'.

× I definitely definitely prefer the sea because I don't want to go high place because I have a high.

✓ I definitely prefer the sea because I don't want to go to high places; I am afraid of heights.

Awkward repetition and incorrect noun phrase: 'go high place' should be 'go to high places'. 'I have a high' is incorrect; correct expression is 'I am afraid of heights' or 'I have a fear of heights'. Suggestion: avoid repeating 'definitely' and use standard idioms for fear of heights.