Travelling— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and directly relevant. Start with a clear topic sentence that answers the question, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid vague philosophical statements and repetition. Use linking words (for example, because, so, also) to make the answer coherent and keep it to 2–4 sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I often look out the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy watching passing towns and countryside. For example, I like noticing changes in architecture and farmland, and sometimes I spot animals or small local markets which give me a sense of the place.

Sugerencia: Reduce hesitations and filler words. Provide a clear reason and one specific example of how you use the photos. Keep it within 2–3 sentences and use linking words like so or because to connect ideas. Avoid leaving sentences unfinished.

Ejemplo: Yes, I often take photos and short videos from the car window because they help me remember places I visit and share highlights on my social media. For example, I once recorded a coastal sunset and paired the clip with a favorite song to make a short travel montage.

Sugerencia: Give a direct answer followed by one or two concrete reasons with specific details or comparisons. Remove filler words and keep it concise. Use linking words (for example, because, while, therefore) to connect your points and remain within 2–3 sentences.

Ejemplo: I prefer the mountains because I like cooler temperatures and peaceful hiking trails. While beaches can be crowded and hot, mountains offer fresh air and quiet viewpoints where I can relax and enjoy nature.

× Yes, I do a lot of time when I'm traveling.

✓ Yes, I do it a lot of the time when I'm traveling.

The original sentence omits the pronoun object 'it' and misorders 'a lot of the time'. Use the phrasal expression 'do it a lot of the time' to mean 'I often do that'. Also include 'the' before 'time' to make the phrase idiomatic.

× I think that's the only time where we get to immerse ourselves understanding more about what do we really want in life apart from enjoying the picturesque.

✓ I think that's the only time when we get to immerse ourselves and understand more about what we really want in life, apart from enjoying the scenery.

Several issues: use 'when' instead of 'where' for time, the structure needs a conjunction 'and' between verbs 'immerse ourselves' and 'understand', and the embedded question form 'what do we really want' should be a statement 'what we really want'. 'Picturesque' is an adjective; use the noun 'scenery'. Reordering improves clarity.

× And then that's also the time when I get to actually really appreciate.

✓ And that's also when I get to really appreciate things.

The original sentence is incomplete; 'appreciate' requires an object. Remove extra filler 'then' and 'actually' can be omitted; add 'things' or specify what is appreciated for clarity.

× I do take some photos along the way, umm, mainly for, uh, for the purpose of remembering it as well as uh, putting some, those, some of those videos in my social media as well.

✓ I do take some photos along the way, mainly to remember it and to put some of those photos or videos on my social media.

Use infinitive 'to remember' instead of 'for the purpose of remembering it' for conciseness. 'Putting' should be parallel with 'to remember' or rephrased; 'on my social media' is the correct preposition. Remove disfluencies and duplicate words.

× And then, uh, to put it uh, together with some of the best songs uh, that I'm very.

✓ I also like to put them together with some of my favorite songs.

The original is incomplete ('that I'm very' is unfinished). Make a complete clause: 'my favorite songs' conveys intended meaning. Use 'them' to refer back to photos/videos and 'put together with' is appropriate.

× I prefer the mountain mainly because I don't like staying in the heat of being at the beach, but uh, in the mountain I get to really be immersed with a very cold weather and that's what I like the most about it.

✓ I prefer the mountains mainly because I don't like staying in the heat at the beach, but in the mountains I can really be immersed in very cold weather, and that's what I like most about them.

Use plural 'mountains' or 'the mountains' rather than 'the mountain' when speaking generally. Use 'at the beach' not 'being at the beach'. Use 'immersed in' (preposition) not 'immersed with'. Use 'very cold weather' without 'a'. Replace 'that's what I like the most about it' with 'about them' to match plural 'mountains'. Also 'can' fits better than 'get to' but 'get to' is acceptable; here 'can' clarifies ability.